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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 2, 2006 13:43:48 GMT -5
I have bad news i'm taking a break from the Darkness Within till November but i'm working on two other fanfics called ADML: Enter The Kardas and the Darkness within prequel called Dragon Wars but this can change
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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 10, 2006 13:39:01 GMT -5
Chapter 10 In the middle of New York At Night. Huntsman: Huntsgirl secure the Crystal Skull we found. Huntsgirl: Yes master. The Huntsman hears a dragon sound. Huntsman: Who's There! Jake: I always knew i was going to defeat you but your death will be coming sooner than you thought. Jake hits the huntsman with his tail but there are very sharp spikes on his tail. Huntsman: Huntsgirl i thought you slayed this dragon. Huntsgirl(Rose) thinks: Why is Jake doing this Jake: Huntsman if you put the entire huntsclan army under my command maybe i will let you stay alive. Huntsman: A dragon leading the Huntsclan,Never! Jake is preparing for his Dark Dragon attack. Huntsman: Ok ok but why do you want the Huntsclan Army under your command? Jake: For various reasons, But prepare the army for battle soon the survival of the fittest is the only thing that counts the magical and human world will be under my command, and throw the huntsgirl out of the huntsclan she is a liar and a traitor. Huntsgirl: But. Huntsman: You heard the dragon huntsgirl you can be glad we are letting you go and not killing you. A few hours later at the Huntsclan's headquarters. Jake: Why didn't you kill her parents. Huntsman: Our goal was to destroy the magical community and not to destroy mankind. Jake: Well my goal is to wipe out every weak lifeform in the world. Huntsman: and how do you think that we are going to acomplish that? Jake: With the skulls. Huntsman: But those skulls are made to destroy the magical world. Jake: That is not correct Huntsman. Next chapter firday! The thing about the lenght and the battle scenes are a little still in development.
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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 14, 2006 13:29:22 GMT -5
Chapter 11: Returning to it's original. Somewhere near the Huntsclan Academy Jake: Finally i have found the last skull and i only i will rule the world. Dark Dragon and Yang Jake voice: We don't need you Young Dragon we just needed you to find the skulls and now you did we don't need you anymore. Yang Jake and the Dark Dragon leave Jake's body. Jake: What's Happening? A few hours later... Jake: Where am i i remember i saw a green light in that building on fire but for the rest i don't remember anything where am i? Gramps: You are in the caverns of doom. Jake:Gramps is that you? Gramps: Yes it is me young one i am glad you survived. Jake: What happened? Gramps: I will explain on the way but now we have to get out of here. Later at the shop of Gramps. Fu: Hey Jake. Jake: Yo Fu. Fu: So how did it happen? Jake: I don't know the last thing i remember is a green light. Gramps: What kind of green light are you talking about Young Dragon? Jake: Well it was a very bright green light and it seems if some black goo was coming out of it. Fu: I hope you don't mean the Symbiot. Jake: What Symbiot sounds like someone copied it out of a Spider-Man comic. Fu: Well the symbiot is a living substance that can fuse with a lifeform and can replace it's DNA! Rose Walks in. Rose: Jake! Rose Hugs Jake. Rose: I'm glad you're alright End of Chapter 11 stay tuned for Chapter 12 it will come tomorrow.
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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 14, 2006 15:44:19 GMT -5
By the way i am working on the first chapter of the sequel/prequel but it won't come out till this one is finished
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Post by huntsrose on Oct 14, 2006 21:45:35 GMT -5
Two words: I'm scared.
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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 22, 2006 17:21:37 GMT -5
Chapter 12: Jake's future son Jake and Rose are trapped inside the school after all the teachers have left. Rose: What now? Jake: We just have to go through a room or something. Rose and Jake search for exit's throughout the school. Jake: Say what its like all the doors and windows are closed by steel or something. Rose: Jake look behind you. Jake: What's that Weird Voice: Rose you ow me your soul Rose: Who are you Weird Voice: You know the one who made a deal with you to turn Jake back to normal. Rose: But you did nothing to save Jake. Weird Voice: Sorry but a deal's a deal, Shadow guardians sieze them. Rose: But i thought you wanted to help us. Weird Voice: Of course not, Shadows Guardians begin the draining of their life force. A strange light starts draining their energy. Weird Voice: Prepare to die Suddenly a hourglass portal opens Mehdi: Your the only one that's gonna die Huntsshadow, Dragon Up. Mehdi starts fighting the shadow guardians and disables the Strange energy stealing beams and gives Rose and Jake their life energy back. Mehdi: Prepare to be Kardalized. Huntsshadow: You think you can beat me? Rose and Jake: He's not alone. Jake: Dragon up. They start fighting Jake: Yo dude do you know how to defeat him Mehdi: Aim your dragon fire for the Emblem you see on his chest. They aim their dragon fire and fire. Jake & Rose: Who are you? Mehdi: I'm Mehdi the 2nd american dragon/kardas dragon and you are Jake & Rose or should i say mom & dad. To be continued in Chapter 13.
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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 23, 2006 21:23:48 GMT -5
Chapter 13: City of the Lost Jake & Rose: What you are our son? Mehdi: Yes i am from the future you have sent me to make sure the Huntsshadow didn't kill you and help you defeat the Dark Dragon. Lets go before somebody sees us. Rotwood: What are you two hoodlums doing here and who are you. Mehdi: Well i'm. Rose: He's my cousin from Columbia. Rotwood: Detention but first go home and make your homework or something. Meanwhile at Grandpa's Shop Fu: Yo gramps i just had a message there has opened a Hourglass Portal. Gramps: Who the hell would travel time to this place during such a disaster. Later at Jake's House. Dad: Who's this? Jake: You won't believe it dad this is Mehdi my son from the future. Mom: O Jake Rose just called she asked if she can stay here for a while. Jake: Is that ok? Mom: Sure as long as there is no dirty bussines you can do that later or else Mehdi won't even be born. Later at midnight Rose: How nice of your parents to let me stay here and even in the same room. Jake: Yeah man it has been almost 3 years since we met each other but now wer'e 16 years old and sleep in the same room. Rose: I want to know so much about my future why don't we go into his dreams and ask? Jake: Let's go. They enter Mehdi's dream. Jake: Looks like New York but almost everything is destroyed. Rose: Look there in the sky. Jake: What is that. Rose: Looks like Mehdi. Jake: O no he has been shot out of the air. Rose: O my god. Suddenly they wake up. Jake: Whoa. an hour later they wake up slowly, Jake gives Rose a kiss. Rose: Why did you do that? Jake: Can't a boy give his girlfriend a kiss. They go asleep again. In the morning Dad yells: The school called no school today because of the blizzard. Mehdi: What blizzard. Dad: Hey Mehdi can you go to grandpa's store and see if he's alright i heard the blizzard is the worst in that part o yeah your a dragon it's too cold outside never mind. Mehdi: I'l do it one of my Kardas dragon powers is surviving extreme cold or heat. A few minutes later Mehdi: Aw man i can't see anything wait there's his store. He enters the store. Gramps: Who are you? Mehdi: I'm mehdi the son of your grandson don't worry i'm from the future. Fu: Maybe that's that Hourglass alert. Gramps: I figured someone from the future would come. To be continued in Chapter 14
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Post by huntsrose on Oct 29, 2006 14:41:25 GMT -5
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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 31, 2006 19:28:45 GMT -5
Chapter 14: Light Becomes Darkness Later at home Mehdi was sleeping on the couch In Mehdi's dream Mehdi: Where am i?, wait a minute this is New York but it's torn to pieces. Mehdi: Wait what's that, what that's me. Mehdi: Why is this in my dream. Some voice: This is no dream this is what is yet to happen. Mehdi: O no why am i doing this. While Mehdi is still asleep he combines with the symbiot. Mehdi: What's happening i feel like mu heart is stabbed by a knife. Some voice: Remember Light becomes Darkness even the greatest heroes do not have a destiny to protect but to destroy. He wakes up. Mehdi: Why is my jacket black. Mehdi's looks had changed he looked a bit more like Yang Jake(Notice i don't mean the Yang Jake look in the series but the new version i'm making) Yang Jake took over. Yang Jake: Time to smash some city, Dark Dragon Up! Jake walked down the stairs with rose. Jake: Wait a minute where's Mehdi? This was just a small chapter later i will add the next one
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Post by mehdi5 on Nov 15, 2006 13:57:33 GMT -5
Chapter 15: The Dragon Files In Jake's house Rose: Chill maybe hé's searching in the city for Yang Jake and the Dark Dragon. Rose walks away. in the alley Mehdi: Where am i. Yang Jake: Who cares stupid Mehdi: Bring it. Yang Jake: let's make this quick i got better things to do. Mehdi: Dragon up! Yang Jake: Dark Dragon up! They battle. Mehdi: That's all you got. Yang Jake: So you think your the best well watch this. Yang Jake shoots fire at him but they don't hit Mehdi. Mehdi: Watta? Yang Jake: Behind you. it looks like the fire is chasing Mehdi. Mehdi: Wait why am i flying away from the fire just like they say you have to battle fire with fire. It works. Mehdi: Wait where's the Yang dude. At jake's house. Mehdi doesn't realize the symbiote is still on him Mehdi: What's happening, i feel i feel oh no what's happening. Mehdi turns dragon and his dragon form is now black his eyes have the fury of fire. Mehdi: Let's Rock. Jake walks in. Jake: Yo dude where have ya been. Mehdi: Leave me alone. he walks away Jake: Chill man. At midnight. Mehdi: Whoa this power it feels great, Whoa huntsclan! He fly's down Huntsman: Dragon! The huntsclan poin their weapons at Mehdi and they shoot. Huntsman: what it has no effect. Mehdi: You think you can beat me that easy. A huntsman member try's to shoot him again but from his wings there come a black shadow that dodges them. Mehdi: Told you. 88: He's gone. 89: We're defeated. 88: Wouldn't be the first time and probably not the last. Huntsman: What where is he. end of chapter Some new specs. -The Darkness within is cheduled to be done by christmas. -The Prequel will premiere in January -The symbiote is based off the Spider-Man version but major adjustments Chapter 16 coming soon
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Justin belmont
Jake's friend
Embrace the end........[ss:American Dragon | Season 1]
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Post by Justin belmont on Nov 16, 2006 8:25:23 GMT -5
Oh no more? ?/
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Post by mehdi5 on Nov 16, 2006 15:00:41 GMT -5
o and if noone noticed it the Darkness Within 2 Teaser is in my sig
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Post by mehdi5 on Dec 18, 2006 17:38:10 GMT -5
The Next chapter will be out tomorrow
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Post by mehdi5 on Dec 19, 2006 14:16:28 GMT -5
Sorry i can't make it today i have a lot of homework and i will post it soon
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Post by mehdi5 on Dec 26, 2006 16:57:12 GMT -5
Chapter 16: Preparing for the battle. In a cave. Yang Jake: Why did you call the Symbiote back? Dark Dragon: Patience soon the Symbiote will fuse with me and i get all they're powers. Yang Jake: And what do we do with him? Dark Dragon: We send him back to te futre when the American Dragon dies he will also die. At Lao Shi's Shop Jake: Man why do i feel so weak. Fu: Listen kid i found something about the Symbiote, It drains your powers and it carries it around till it fuses with it's master. Jake: You mean i'm powerless? Fu: Well almost. Jake: And Jake we have one thing that is good about hte Symbiote. Jake: What? Fu: Well whenyou had the Symbiote you became the leader of the Huntsclan. Jake: In your face Huntsloser. Suddenly a silence is going through te city and a Earthquake starts. Jake: Whoa, What's happening? Suddenly it stops. Jake: What was that? Fu: I don't know o and by the way kid happy birthday. Jake: I almost forgot about my birthday tomorrow. 6 hours later at Jake's house. Jake: I'd better get some sleep. He falls asleep. Downstairs Yang Jake gets inside through the window. Yang Jake: I think it was a good idea making a evil doppelganger of that future kid before we ent him back. Yang Mehdi: Shut up. Yang Jake: Shut up yourself. They walk into the living room. Yang Jake starts looking for something but Yang Mehdi stops and turns around and sees Jake is awake. Jake: Yo Mehdi i see your back. Yang Mehdi: Dark Dragon up. Jake: I don't think your him. Jake try's to dragon up but he is too weak. Yang Mehdi: Weak human, i should have killed you when i had the chance. Jake: You can't if you kill me you will not exist. Yang Mehdi: That is a price i'm willing to pay. Jake runs but is hit by Yang Mehdi''s dragon fire. Jake: I can't move. Yang Mehdi and Yang Jake: Until we meet again. In the morning Jake wakes up in his bed. Jake: Good, it was all just a dream. (It wasn't a dream) Rose walks in. Rose: Hi Jake happy birthday. Next chapter soon...
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