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Post by dave on Jan 31, 2006 12:00:58 GMT -5
This is an experiment I am trying out...I am going to post one chapter each day, five days a week, just like a soap opera. It will also be like a soap opera. At the end, there will be previews for the next day's chapter. I am currently writting today's chapter. I want to know what you guys think of the idea!
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Post by dave on Jan 31, 2006 12:21:49 GMT -5
Here is the first chapter!
BTW...in case you didn't know, (V.O.) means voice over... ----------------------------------------------------------------------- January 31, 2006 Chapter
Jake: New York City. It is usually a busy city, traffic is horrible, but you can stay healthy by walking. There are many people in New York City that we are close to. ================================================================== *At Trixie’s house*
Jake (V.O): There is my friend, Trixie and her family
*Trixie walks to the couch and sits down to talk with her mother.*
Jake (V.O.): Her father is gone away as he is in the military. She also lives with her grandmother.
*Coughing noises are heard from behind a door. Trixie and her mother look at the door.*
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*At Spud’s House*
Jake (V.O.): Spud is well...special in a way. He isn’t too smart...
*Spud looks for a comic book on the floor which is sitting in plain sight on his bed.*
Jake (V.O): But, he can have his good moments. He lives with his parents at home and he is an only child.
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*At Laoshi’s shop*
Jake (V.O.): This is where I work and train practically every day. See, the thing is, I am a dragon. It isn’t just me though. My sister and grandfather are dragons too. Gramps makes sure that I get my training done every day. Ha, like that is a problem for the Am-Drag.
*Flashback of Jake falling off the roof*
Jake (V.O.): Well, maybe it is a problem once in a while...
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*At the Long Household*
Jake (V.O): This is where I live. I live here with my mother, father, and my annoying sister, Haley. I am hardly at home though thanks to my dragon business. My father doesn’t know about being married into a family of reptiles. Why?
*Flashback to him panicking over a piece of lint on his shirt*
Jake (V.O): So, we will tell him when the time is right. Mom is unfortunately unable to transform as she was a skip-generation and the powers were not granted to her. ==================================================================
*At The Huntslair*
Jake (V.O.): I am still mad that I was in here and I never realized that this was the Huntslair. Unfortunately, my girlfriend, Rose left after finding out about my powers...
*Flashback to Rose finding out that Jake was the American Dragon)
Jake (V.O.): We don’t know where she went and I have to admit that I am missing her badly.
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*At the school*
Jake (V.O.): This is where I go to school. The teachers are a little wack sometimes but there is one that is really tripping...
*Professor Rotwood walks into his class*
Jake (V.O.): Professor Rotwood. He is a nightmare and he loves to pretend that he knows all about magical creatures. Too bad for him that he doesn't know a thing about them.
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Jake (V.O.): But who knows what will happen in this city of ours where it is always busy, and the city is always lit.
*Jake transforms and flies off to look around the city.*
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Preview for 2/1/06
Huntsmaster (yelling): Get the American Dragon!
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*Laoshi has a look of worry on his face*
Laoshi: If we don’t help him, it may be too late.
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*Jake, struggling in chains*
Jake (thinking): I got to get out of this...
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Yes, I realize it is short, but I did that because well, it is like an introduction, it will start off for "real" tomorrow! Give me some ideas and comments about it!
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Post by yfwe on Jan 31, 2006 12:25:11 GMT -5
Not bad so far... update soon!
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Post by wishingiwasadragon on Jan 31, 2006 20:41:06 GMT -5
cool cool!!! i can't wait ti'll tomorrow!!...*think to myself: hope i can get on tomorrow*
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Post by dave on Jan 31, 2006 22:35:54 GMT -5
lol, I just noticed this. Only guys have reviewed on it so far, not a single girl. I told my friend this and she said, "That has got to say something about America today...lol". Well, tomorrow's chapter will be up by tomorrow morning.
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Post by crazy17 on Feb 1, 2006 0:04:31 GMT -5
Well, here you go! lol I think it's a great idrea! Keep going!
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Post by dave on Feb 1, 2006 7:40:06 GMT -5
lol, well...here is today's "episode" ;D -----------------------------------------------
2/1/06 Chapter
*Jake is flying over the city, looking around to make sure no magical creatures are in any danger. He sighs.*
Jake: Another boring day. I could be doing something with Spud and Trixie, but no, I have to watch over the city.
*continues to fly on.*
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*At the Huntslair*
*The Huntsmaster is standing in front of the fireplace with Huntsclan members sitting at the table.*
Huntsmaster: We have lost Huntsgirl! She ran away the day after the Grand Equinox Hunt. We are currently finding a recruit but we think we may have the person that we have been looking for.
*Every member of the Huntsclan waits in anticipation as a boy walks in*
Boy: Hello everyone.
Huntsman: This is our new Huntsboy!
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*At the electronics shop*
Laoshi: Is Jake back yet?
Fu: No, he is still out.
*Laoshi sighs and walks over to the counter and gets on the stool.*
Laoshi: He is probably out being bitter about having to be out today.
*The bell rings as Trixie and Spud walk in.*
Trixie: Yo! Have you seen Jake?
Laoshi: He is currently out checking out the city.
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*Jake flies over a skyscraper and looks below to see the streets crowded as usual. He looks ahead and glares at the Huntslair*
(Jake walked into the Huntslair with Rose. He looks around amazed at the place. He couldn’t believe someone would live in a place that big.)
Jake: If only I knew that was the Huntslair when I was there! I could of stopped Rose from running away!
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Huntsmaster: He will learn under my direction. He shall be the next in line to become a rightful member of the Huntsclan as soon as he slays his first dragon!
*The Huntsclan members cheer and the Huntsmaster turns to face the window for a moment and sees Jake.*
Huntsmaster (Softly and dangerously): Dragon...
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Trixie: That is wack yo! He said he was supposed to spend the day with us.
Laoshi: I am sorry young one but since the Huntsclan has been inactive for a week now since the end of the Grand Equinox Hunt, we can not take any chances of any surprise attacks.
Spud: But, if they aren’t doing anything, then they aren’t hurting anyone.
*Everyone in the shop gives Spud a look*
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*Jake is calmly flying around when a green arrow of energy flies past him*
Jake: Whoa! What the?!
*Huntsclan members are standing on the ground, shooting arrows at Jake.*
Jake: What is up with this?!
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*The Huntsmaster looks at the scene with a smile.*
Huntsmaster (thinking): He has no chance of getting away this time. He shall be captured and the Huntsboy shall become a member of the Huntsclan!
*Huntsboy walks into the room with his uniform on.*
Huntsboy: Why won’t you let me join them master? I thought that you wanted me to slay a dragon so that I can become a member of the Huntsclan.
Huntsmaster: You will in due time Huntsboy. But first, we shall let our dragon friend come to us.
*He looks out the window to see Jake flying away from the building.*
Huntsmaster (In an angry tone): What are they doing?!
*Activates a communication system on everyone’s Hunts Staff.*
Huntsmaster (yelling): Get the American Dragon!
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*Trixie gets up and looks at Laoshi*
Trixie: Yo, I am going to go look for Jake.
*Walks out of the shop with Spud.*
Laoshi: I just hope that he isn’t in any danger of any kind.
Fu: Don’t worry Gramps. If the kid could survive something like the Grand Equinox Hunt, I am sure he shouldn’t have too much trouble if anything comes up.
*Laoshi sighs*
Laoshi: I just hope that you are right Fu.
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*Jake avoids more arrows and tries to attack some of the Huntsclan members.*
Jake: What do y’all want with me?
*Jake then gets hit by a chain and falls to the ground*
Trixie (voice is distant): When we find him, I swear...
*She sees Jake on the ground and Huntsclan members approaching him*
Spud: Let’s save him!
*He tries to charge at the Huntsclan but Trixie holds him back*
Trixie: If the see us, it could be dangerous for Jake and his identity.
*Huntsclan members wrap strong chains all around Jake and they bring him into the building*
Trixie: Come on Spud! We got to tell his grandfather!
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*The Huntsmaster smiles in victory as the American Dragon is set on the table. Unfortunately for Jake, he is unconscious.*
Huntsmaster: Your time is coming Huntsboy. Soon you will be a part of the Huntsclan!
*Huntsboy approaches the table and smiles down at the dragon.*
Huntsboy: Soon, he will be in the way no longer.
Huntsmaster: Take him to the dungeon!
*The Huntsclan members take him to the dungeon where they throw him in and lock the door. He wakes up a few minutes later and realizes he is chained.*
Jake: What happened? Why did they do this to me?
*Tries to break free of his chains*
Jake: This can’t be unicorn horn again!
*Jake continues to struggle in his chains.*
Jake (thinking): I got to get out of this.
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Laoshi: What do you mean you lost another bet?
*Fu looks guilty and puts on a small, fake smile*
Fu: Well, you see...I was betting on...
*He is interrupted as the shop bell is heard and Trixie and Spud run in*
Spud: Jake...he is in trouble.
Trixie (out of breath): Huntsclan...chains...captured...
*Laoshi looked at them and then back at Fu.*
Fu: What does this mean Gramps?
Laoshi: It means that the Huntsclan is back.
*Fu just stares at Laoshi.*
Fu: What do we do though? What about Jake?
*Laoshi has a look of worry on his face*
Laoshi: If we don’t help him, it may be too late.
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*Jake struggles and then hears something being dragged along the ground outside of his cell. He looks at the door just as the lock clicks. The Huntsboy walks in with the Huntsmaster behind him. The Huntsboy is dragging an ax against the ground.*
Huntsmaster: Now Huntsboy! Go fulfill your destiny!
*The Huntsboy walks towards Jake with the ax.*
Huntsboy: I will master!
*Jake stares at the Huntsboy with a look of horror and fear on his face.*
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Preview for 2/2/06
*The Huntsboy pulls the ax back to kill Jake.*
Jake: No!
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*Laoshi continued to fly alone to the Huntslair.*
Laoshi (thinking): It may be too late.
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*Trixie pressed her head against the front door.*
Mya: I held out for you, never dating another guy! And this is how you repay me?! By going out with some s*ut?! ------------------------------------------------------------------
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Post by crazy17 on Feb 1, 2006 9:56:36 GMT -5
Wow! You really are good!
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Post by adjlfan4life on Feb 1, 2006 16:46:59 GMT -5
Me like!
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Post by dave on Feb 2, 2006 7:42:27 GMT -5
Thank you for the reviews so far! Here is today's episode!
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2/2/06 Chapter
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*Laoshi gets up from the couch.*
Laoshi: I think it would be best for you guys to go home. I don’t want to risk putting you in danger.
*Trixie and Spud looks at each other.*
Trixie: But we want to help you!
Spud: We are useful because we can like, walk fast and like, stuff.
Trixie: Spud, do us all a favor and keep your mouth shut.
Fu: Well, I am going to stay here.
Laoshi: You are coming with me.
Fu: No thanks. I like my pretty face and I don’t want to risk it getting ruined.
*Laoshi gives Fu Dog a cold stare.*
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*Mya, Trixie’s mother walks to the kitchen and opens the refrigerator when she hears a door open and shut.*
Mya: Who is there?
*She walks to the living room to see who came in.*
Mya: Hello?
*She then was grabbed from behind. She gives a scream when she feels a kiss on her neck.*
Mya: It can’t be...
*Mya turns around to see that is was who she thought it was.*
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*Jake struggles against the chains as the Huntsboy gets closer to him with the ax.*
Jake: Please stop! Don’t do this!
Huntsboy: This is my destiny!
*Huntsboy stops for a moment and rests the ax against his side. He pulls off his left glove to show the mark of the Huntsclan.*
Huntsboy: See! I am marked!
Jake: Why does everyone tell me they are marked? If I get a mark of the huntsclan and the magical creatures getting along will you stop hunting them?
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*Laoshi is flying over the roofs of the buildings. He has a look of worry on his face.*
Laoshi (thinking): I am worried about him, especially after that incident...
(Jake thought he had the Huntsclan beaten. He flew off only to have a train come at him, hitting him. He later awoke to find himself on a vehicle to the Grand Equinox Hunt.)
*Laoshi sighs and continues to head towards the Huntslair.*
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*Mya turns to face her husband, Jamal.*
Jamal: I missed you baby.
Mya: I missed you too.
*They kiss each other*
Jamal: It is nice to be back. Do you mind if I go take a shower?
Mya: Of course, I waited this long for you. I can wait just a little longer.
*Jamal smiles and goes upstairs into the shower.*
*Mya smiles at him and goes into the kitchen again.*
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*Trixie walks away from Spud’s house.*
Trixie (thinking): Why would he be worried like that unless something serious was going on? I am worried about Jakey...
*Trixie continues her way home.*
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Huntsmaster: Ha, like that will ever happen. Huntsboy! Stop hesitating and kill him now!
*Huntsboy holds the ax in his right hand again and continues to walk towards Jake.*
Jake (with panic in his voice): Please, don’t do this!
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*Mya hears a cell phone go off. She walks to the living room to hear the shower still running. She answers the phone.*
Woman on phone: Hello baby, how are you?
Mya: Who is this?!
*Mya hears a click and she closes the cell phone and slams it down in anger. She hears the shower turn off.*
Mya (thinking): Oh, he is going to get it when he gets out.
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*Laoshi continues to fly towards the Huntslair.*
Laoshi (thinking): I hope that it is not too late...
*He flies higher into the clouds to avoid being seen.*
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*Trixie is standing in front of her house. She walks to the door and stops for a moment hearing something.*
Trixie (thinking): What is going on in there?
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*Jake struggles against his chains.*
Jake: Please, I am begging you, don’t do this.
Huntsmaster: Show us your human form and we shall let you go.
*The Huntsboy stops for a moment to allow Jake this opportunity.* ‘ Jake: Okay. I will do it.
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*Jamal comes out of the bathroom and sees an angry Mya.*
Jamal: Is there something wrong honey?
Mya: You better believe something is wrong.
Jamal: What is wrong?
Mya: Your cell phone went off and I answered it to hear a woman come on calling you baby.
*Jamal just stares at Mya.*
================================================================== *Trixie presses her head against the front door.*
Mya: I held out for you, never dating another guy! And this is how you repay me?! By going out with some s*ut?!
Trixie (thinking): What is going on?
*Trixie turns the door handle to open the door.*
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*Laoshi continued to fly alone to the Huntslair.*
Laoshi (thinking): It may be too late.
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Huntsmaster: So, you are going to reveal yourself to us?
Jake: No, I am going to incinerate you.
*He shoots a fireball at the Huntsmaster.*
Huntsmaster: Very unwise American Dragon. Finish him off.
Jake: Stay back!
*Jake struggles some more as the Huntsboy finally stops in front of Jake.*
Jake: Don’t kill me, please.
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*Laoshi sees the Huntslair in front of him.*
Laoshi: I got to save Jake before it is too late.
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*Trixie opens the door and walks in to see her mom slap her father.*
Trixie: What is going on in here?!
*Jamal and Mya stare with expressions of shock at their daughter.*
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*The Huntsboy pulls the ax back to kill Jake.*
Jake: No!
*The Huntsboy swings the ax forward.*
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Preview for 2/3/06
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Laoshi: Jake! No!
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Faye: Haley, your dad can’t know about you having dragon powers.
David: Did I hear right?
*Faye turns to see her husband.*
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*The person picked herself up off the ground.*
Person: It is nice to see you again.
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Post by garththewerewolf on Feb 2, 2006 13:39:45 GMT -5
Gah cliffhanger >_<" I can't wait till tomorrow. Great job btw ;D
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Post by dave on Feb 2, 2006 15:03:49 GMT -5
Thanks and if you think that is a good cliffhanger, wait until you see tomorrow's!
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Post by dave on Feb 3, 2006 7:53:48 GMT -5
February 3, 2006 Episode ==================================================================
*The Huntsboy brings down the ax upon Jake.*
Jake: NO!
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*Haley walks into the kitchen to see her mom trying to make cookies.*
Haley: Mom?
Faye: Yes?
Haley: Where is dad and Jake?
*Faye sighs and continues to make her cookies.*
Faye: Jake is off doing his training and your dad had to run out for a minute.
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*In Portland, Maine*
*A girl was getting on a plan heading to New York City. She sat down in her seat and thought about going to New York City. She was both excited and nervous.*
Girl (thinking): I wonder what will happen there.
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*Laoshi enters the building of the Huntslair.*
Laoshi (thinking): I have to find him now.
*He then hears Jake’s scream in the distance.*
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*Jake stares in shock as he finds out the ax missed him and hit his chains instead.*
Huntsmaster: What did you do?!
Huntsboy: I missed!
*The Huntsboy draws back the ax but Jake gets up and smiles.*
Jake: Good luck hitting what you can’t hit.
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*The plane took off from the airport and she was excited as she could be.*
Girl (thinking): I can’t believe I am going there.
*A woman takes her seat next to the girl.*
Woman: How are you?
Girl: I am fine, how about you?
Woman: I am great. So, you are heading to New York?
Girl: Yep. I got someone special to meet up there with.
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*Faye put the rack of cookies on the oven.*
Faye: Haley!
*Haley walked into the kitchen.*
Haley: Yes mom?
Faye: Do you mind cutting up the vegetables for tonight?
Haley: Of course I don’t mind!
*She transforms her arms into claws and goes to chopping up the vegetables on the counter.*
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*Laoshi finally arrives at the Huntslair and sees Huntsclan members. One turns around to see him.*
Huntsclan Member: Get the dragon!
*The members attack him but Laoshi makes quick work of them, defeating them in mere seconds.*
Laoshi: That was not a wise move.
*He transforms to his human form and walks to the other side of the room.*
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*Jake flies into the air as the Huntsboy tries to attack him. Jake smiles down on him*
Jake: See what I mean, you can’t hit me.
Huntsman: But I can!
*Jake gets shot with the Hunts Staff and hits the ground*
Jake: Ugh...
*The Huntsboy draws the ax back for what appears to be a finishing strike.*
Laoshi: Jake! NO!
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Woman: So, who are you meeting?
Girl: I am meeting my sister and brother.
Woman: That sounds great! By the way, my name is Sharron.
Girl: Nice to meet you Sharron.
Sharron: Same to you. Now, I better get moving, while I am dressed like a passenger, I have to help out on this flight too.
*Sharron winks at the girl and gets up.*
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Haley: Mom, when can we tell dad about us having dragon powers?
Faye: Haley, your dad can’t know about you having dragon powers.
David: Did I hear right?
*Faye turns to see her husband.*
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*Laoshi knocks the Huntsboy down and Jake gets up slowly and they fly away.*
Jake: Thanks G.
Laoshi: Yeah, now go take the rest of the day off.
*Jake flies and transforms back to human form in an alley while Laoshi flies back to his shop.*
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*The girl is off of the plane and a taxi had taken her where she needed to go. She got off and that is when she noticed two dragons in the sky.*
Girl (thinking): Can this be actually happening?
*She runs to where she saw one of the dragons land.*
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David: Did I hear you right? Is there something wrong with the power?
Faye: Oh, no. Nothing is wrong with the power.
David: That is good. Let me know when those delicious cookies are done.
*He walks away while Faye gives a sigh of relief.*
David (thinking): What did she mean by dragon powers?
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*Jake walks out of he alley and runs into someone.*
Jake: I am so sorry!
*He looks down at the ground to see who he hit.*
Jake: I can’t believe it.
*The person picks herself up off the ground.*
Girl: It is nice to see you again.
Jake: I can’t believe this.
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Preview for 2/6/06
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David: I want you to tell me the truth and tell me now!
*Faye looks with worry at David.*
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Mya: You can just sleep outside!
Trixie: What is going on?!
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Jake: Why did you come back?
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Post by crazy17 on Feb 3, 2006 11:26:35 GMT -5
Sweet! Sc**w "Days of Our Lives", this is just as good!
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Post by dave on Feb 3, 2006 12:32:25 GMT -5
NO! Don't screw Days Of Our Lives!
A. I am using it for inspiration
B. I like that show lol...
Yes, you heard it here...a guy likes Days Of Our Lives.
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