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Post by superdoglac on Jul 3, 2006 9:25:24 GMT -5
This is my first fanfic ever! It ain't that good but whatever. Takes place three weeks after the Hunted. Can also be read on fanfiction.net. Enjoy!
She has been gone for three weeks. She could of run away just so she wouldn’t have to face me. She could have been hurt or killed for her betrayal. What if she was sucked into a different dimension by a gelatinous space creature (Spud’s idea). Why me, why Rose.
Since she left Jake couldn’t stop thinking about what happened to her.
I had to be the American Dragon. She had to be a member of the Huntsclan. Why do things like this happen to me?
Jake was walking through Central Park. It was 9:30 P.M. and he was on his way home from his Grandpa’s shop, where Jake and his Grandpa had a meeting with the Dragon Council. Jake got to leave early because they believed he should get his rest.
It was only three weeks since the Equinox Hunt, the day Rose found out that Jake Long was the American Dragon.
Walking through the park Jake had and odd feeling, like he was being watched. With that he started walking a bit faster which quickly turned into a run. He stopped to catch his breath but he heard a weak voice behind him.
“Please don’t run away, I don’t want to hurt you.”
Jake turned around to see Rose. Jake felt his heart leap, it was her!
Rose pulled off her mask and whispered “Jake hurry we don’t have much time, the Huntsclan is after me! Please get us out of here!”
Jake was surprised and happy that Rose was still alive, for now. All he knew they had to get out of there, and fast.
“DRAGON UP,” he screamed.
Flamed surrounded Jake‘s body until what used to be a 13 year old boy was a large red dragon. Rose stood there half scared half amazed. It still was going to take a while for her to accept that Jake was a dragon.
“Hop on quickly” Jake said, and with that Rose ran over and quickly climbed onto Jake’s back.
Jake spread out his huge wings and began to flap them. In a matter of seconds they were high in the air able to see the fantastic sights of NYC.
Down below there were Huntsmen obviously chasing after something. Lucky for Rose and Jake, they weren’t spotted.
Out of hate Rose fired from her Huntstick and hit the Huntsmaster’s butt, which immersed into flames!
“Serves him right,” Rose muttered.
It didn’t take long for Jake to land on the roof of his grandfather’s shop where he let Rose slide off his back. For a few moments there was complete silence other than the annoying honking of cars below.
This gave Jake time to actually look at Rose for the first time. She was in her Huntsclan outfit but it had several tears. All over her body she had deep cuts and on her face was one that stretched from her left eyebrow to the right corner of her mouth.
The silence was broke by Rose who was staring into the dragon’s eyes. “I’m sorry Jake” was all she said before the warm tears started rolling down her cheek.
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Post by kashi on Jul 3, 2006 13:05:39 GMT -5
It was pretty good for a first fanfic ^_^
I enjoyed Spuds theory about Rose, it added some good comedy in the begining.
Hope you update soon.
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 3, 2006 13:24:06 GMT -5
I'll update right now!
Chap 2 I love you Too
Jake couldn’t stand Rose crying.
He transformed back into a human and kindly put his hand on her shoulder.
“I forgive you.”
There was another moment of silence because Rose had stopped crying.
“They’re after me Jake. I have been on the run ever since I let you go. The Huntsclan has one rule, Slay dragons or be slain. I was lucky to of escaped the first time.”
“What do mean escaped?” Jake asked puzzled.
They had me captured in the first week. They where going to torture me until I told them your identity or I died,” Rose said.
It seemed that she shivered just at the thought of what happened.
“Lucky for me I picked the lock of my cell with a bobby pin that I take with me everywhere. You never know when you would need it.” There was more silence.
“I love you Rose” said Jake.
“I love you too” said Rose.
They bent over and gave each other a soft kiss.
“I’m sorry to do this to you again Jake” said Rose sadly.
. Jake watched dumbfounded as she leapt onto the next building and ran away.
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Post by charles finley. on Jul 3, 2006 18:27:30 GMT -5
Cha! I luv it! Update soons!
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 3, 2006 21:57:22 GMT -5
Chapter 3 Captured
Rose was jumping from building to building She loved Jake but she knew it would be to obvious who the American Dragon was if she stayed with him. She and Jake would be murdered the second their guard was down.
Out of nowhere a ball of fire came near Rose and landed only a foot away from her. Two dragons flew above her and she fell down in shock.
There was Councilor Kulde, the Norwegian Dragon, and Councilor Andam, the Kenyan Dragon. A new Councilor hadn’t been found yet to replace Chang.
“Hello Huntsgirl,” said Kulde coldly
“O crap”
Jake was only on the roof for a minute before he revised what happened. He went back into his dragon form and started flying in the direction Rose went. It didn’t take long for him to hear screaming and he flew to that direction. He was shocked to see Councilor Andam holding a net containing, Rose.
Jake landed in front of them and said “What happened.”
“We were flying to back the Isle of Draco but we saw someone wearing a familiar uniform. It was funny but Huntsgirl didn’t fight back. She struggled a bit when we tried to put her in the net and tried to retreat but it was no problem. It is actually unlike a Huntsclan member,” remarked Councilor Kulde
“What if I turned over a new leaf,” suggested Rose.
“Doubt it,” he said ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Back at Lao Shi’s Shop
Rose was trapped in the green laser cage in the back room. She sighed.
“Was gonna happen sooner or later,” she muttered.
Jake waked over to Rose. The council was discussing what was going to happed to Rose on the roof.
“Wuzzup,” Jake said.
Rose stared at him.
“Jake do you know what the punishment is for being a member of the Huntsclan is?”
Rose said looking at the mark on her arm.
“Nope, what is it?” Jake dumbly said.
“It’s death”
“SAY WHAT”
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Post by txdragon on Jul 3, 2006 22:15:55 GMT -5
everything seems to be going against them doesn't it? Great fic, look forwad to the next update.
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 5, 2006 22:01:14 GMT -5
I just want to thank Kashi, American_Huntsgirl_Rose and Txdragon for reviewing!
Chapter Four: Iv'e got Nothing Jake and Rose stayed there silently. A couple minutes later Lao Shi came into the room followed by the Dragon Council.
“I am sorry Jake,” said Loa Shi, “There was nothing I could do.”
“Dragon Long, you are aware of the consequences of being a Huntsclan member,” said Councilor Andam.
“Yeah of course, who wouldn’t, it’s death,” Jake said confidently, yet sadly.
“Do you know how the enemy is executed?” Andam questioned.
“Well um no,” said Jake
“Well, it is a tradition for the Huntsclan member to be executed by the dragon whom usually fights it”
Rose seemed quite shocked at this.
“But that means I have to, aww man!”
Jake sat in his room quietly. Finally after three weeks he got to see the girl of his dreams. In one hour she was able to be captured and sentenced to death.
He had sat there on his bed for hours. The sun had even started to rise. He didn’t know how he was going to get her out of this.
He was told to arrive at the Isle of Draco at 3:00 PM that day. They were going to question Rose and try to get all the information of the Huntsclan out of her as possible. Jake knew she was probably going to tell them everything.
He decided he was going to call Trixie and Spud. They where a little annoyed in the beginning because it was so early but when he told them it was super important they listened. Jake told them to meet him in Central Park in 20 minutes.
Jake, Trixie and Spud were walking through Central Park. Jake had just told them everything that had happened.
“So let me get this strait. You found Rose, you saved her, she got captured and your going to have to kill her!” exclaimed Trixie.
“Yup,” Jake glumly said
“I could have sworn it had something to do with a space creature” said Spud.
“Do you guys have any ideas how I can save her?” questioned Jake, “because I stayed up all night trying to think of something but I came up with zilch.”
“Sorry Jakey, I’ve got nothing,” said Trixie
“Same here” said Spud
“Okay guys thanks anyways. I gotta go home and pack. See you on Tuesday.” Jake said glumly.
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Post by kashi on Jul 6, 2006 0:14:38 GMT -5
I like it so far, very much. I need to see if he gets Rose out of there, and if he does, then how?Update soon, I need to know how this turns out. ^_^
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 6, 2006 9:49:20 GMT -5
Haha I like torchering you with the suspence!
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Post by kimpossiblefan12 on Jul 7, 2006 20:32:51 GMT -5
Wow. can't wait to see what happens next.
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 8, 2006 13:44:16 GMT -5
Chapter 5 Why does everyone want me dead?
Rose was being carried in the net again by the councilors. All she could think about was that she was going to die. She figured it was better that to be captured by the Huntsclan because she knew they would give her the slowest and most painful death possible. She figured with Jake it would be was deep cut in her chest with his claws and that would be the end of it.
She felt bad for Jake also because she knew that he loved her. He had to kill her and there was nothing either of them could do about it.
“Jake don’t do anything stupid,” she thought to herself knowing he would try to rescue her.
She looked at the councilors. They must have been staring at her a long time at her because when she looked at them they quickly turned their heads.
They walked into a subway but no one was there. They walked over to an elevator. Andam pressed some buttons in what seemed a special order. The elevator opened and showed what looked like a troll.
It said “Welcome back councilors.”
“Hurray Edgar we have a Huntsclan prisoner” said Kulde.
Edgar snarled at Rose and then said, “Hold on Councilors!”
Rose couldn’t hold onto the railing because she was in a net on the floor of the elevator. While shooting through the earth, the pressure slammed her to the top of the elevator with a thud. Lucky for her none of her bones where broken.
After the short ride in the elevator she thudded back to the bottom of it and the doors opened. For the first time she had seen the Island on Draco.
“It’s beautiful,” she muttered not being able to help it.
“Yes it is,” said Andam, “Too bad the creatures that built it are the one’s you tried to slay.”
There was a small prison on the edge of the island. She was taken there by two ogre guards. The cells where not dirty and rats and sockroaches weren’t running around as she might of expected. Each cell had a small bed also.
She was dropped in her cell and has her net opened. The guards locked the door and left without a sound. She looked at her watch and it was 12:38AM in the morning and she was obviously exhausted given that on her run from the Huntsclan that usually she slept once every three days. She climbed on her bed and quickly closed her eyes.
The last ting she muttered before going to sleep was, “Why does everyone want me dead?”
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Post by kashi on Jul 8, 2006 13:53:15 GMT -5
I love the newest chapter! Their gonna kill Rose! NO! I need to see the next chapter and find out what happens. This one was great, and done very well. I can't wait to see the next ones ^_^ Keep it up.
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Post by Atlanta Dragon on Jul 12, 2006 21:13:15 GMT -5
Arrg suspense killing me! hurry and update Please! btw very good for a first fanfic you write as good as some of the more experieced writers
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 13, 2006 10:55:55 GMT -5
Thanks kimpossiblefan12 and antlantadragon for reviewing!
Chapter 6 Rose's Story
It was 12:00 in the afternoon and Rose was still sleeping. She was exhausted and hadn’t slept for days. The young teenager was curled up in a ball on her tiny bed and she was snoring loudly. She was awakened by a sharp kick in the ribs.
“Oww” Rose yelped to the rude awakening.
“Get up” said one of the ogre guards from the night before.
“Yo lady snores a lot!” said the other one, “You slept so late, you almost missed your questioning session”
Rose got up off of her bed and had her wrists shackled to chains.
She was led out of the prison and into the vast area of The Isle of Draco.
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Jake and his Grandpa were walking to the elevator. Fu was left behind because he said he had stuff to take care of. Jake wouldn’t speak a word.
“Young one I tried to reason with them,” said his Grandfather, “I told them the death penalty was too brutal especially because Huntsgirl didn’t do that much damage to the magical community. I was also fighting that you and her are still both children and killing and death isn’t fair. But the council wouldn’t hear it.”
Jake was silent for a few more moments and muttered, “Thanks for trying Gramps.”
The rest of the walk to the elevator was silent. When the door of it was opened, Edgar smiled and said, “Welcome t-”
“Shut it,” Jake interrupted irritably.
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When Jake and Grandpa walked off the elevator to see the wonderful structures of the buildings just ahead they saw the two councilors with Rose, who had her waist chained to a chair. She was the same as Jake last saw her, in her Huntsgirl outfit but with the mask taken off.
She sat there looking at Jake and then at his Grandfather the see if he wanted her to die. Rose saw by the look on his face answer the was no.
“Dragon Long,” said Andam, “You are to ask Huntsgirl questions about the Huntsclan that would be useful to us. If the doesn’t answer threaten her with this.”
Andam pulled from behind him Rose’s Hunt’s Staff.
Jake could have sworn he heard Rose mutter, “Wondered where that went.”
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Jake transformed into a dragon and asked the first Question, “Where is the Huntslair located?”
“73 Park Ave, New York, New York, 10016” Rose said.
“Why did you become Huntsgirl?”
The words spilled out of Jake’s mouth. It was obvious if he could he would take that question back.
Rose was silent for a moment until she spoke.
“I was born with this birthmark,” she said taking her glove off and showing it to the four dragons. “When I was little I didn’t understand it. I kept hearing my mom and dad keep yelling,
‘You can’t have her! She isn’t a killer!’ into the phone whenever someone called.
I remember a cold morning when I was four years old when a tall man walked into my room and woke me up.
He said, ‘Wake up Thorn.’
I told him that wasn’t my name, and that it was Rose and asked him who he was.
‘I am your uncle and new guardian. Your parents have just died in a car crash.’
I burst into tears and cried for hours. In that time my uncle found some suitcases and packed together my things. When I stopped crying he told me it was time to leave. While we walked to my uncle’s truck I noticed he had the same dragon birthmark.
‘Why do you have the same birthmark as me?’
‘Come Thorn, I will explain to you on the ride home, in New York.’
I was surprised that it was so far away from my home in Illinois. On the ride home he explained that magical creatures are existed and are evil. They are using their gifted magic for personal gain and will one day use it to over through the humans for dominate species. The birthmark meant we where suppost to kill them. I relised later that we hunted them for money. My uncle trained me and taught me all of my hunting skills. Eventually he hired a tutor so I could learn math and science and things. When my training was complete I begged if I could go to a normal school so I could make friends. He finally gave in and allowed me to go to the Millard Fillmore Middle School, which was ironically the school Jake attended to.”
The council looked at Jake surprised she knew the exact person he was.
“Continue” said Kulde.
“Obviously I fought Jake when we where in our alter egos. Meanwhile while we where at school we tuned into friends and maybe a little more. Eventually Jake found out who I was. He was avoiding me and I was confused. Then the Huntsclan captured him and featured him in the Equinox Hunt. I had Jake trapped and right before I slain him he screamed my name so I would stop. He showed me who he was and I let him go. It is a rule in the Huntsclan to slay dragons or be slain, so I’ve been on the run from them until the councilors captured me.”
When Rose finished her story tears started rolling down her cheek.
“That answered more than the question,” remarked Kulde.
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Post by gojake on Jul 13, 2006 13:58:42 GMT -5
very very nice! plz update!
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