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Post by gojake on Jul 13, 2006 18:04:23 GMT -5
Chapter one.... Death's Head
The four dragons flew over much of the world, until they came to an uncharted (by humans) island right off the coast of the United States.
Mar: I guess we're here.
Jake: This place looks familiar.
Ali: Try looking at the signpost.
(pans over to signpost)
Signpost: Welcome To Atlantis, the Magical Disneyworld!
The signpost was hacked and had a huge gash in it.
David: More like Hellhole now.
Looking at the old, abandoned resort gave Mar an urge.
Mar: Why don't I blast this Island to hell and be done with it?
David: Patience, Mar. We can't do that. Firstly, the superweapon wasn't an island, secondly, it didn't have much of a magical aura. This island does, so you could blow off a couple of chunks, nothing big. Thirdly, if you could decimate the entire island, then humans would pick it up. And finally, your blast would create a tsunami, and you know what happened in the 2010 tsunami last year, don't you?
Mar: (sighs) Yeah....
Ali: Look out! Hostile at 12 o clock!
A flying creature with a skull for a face flew towards them firing green and black blasts at them.
Jake: Necro energy, D**m it!
They fought with the creature until Mar kicked it's head off.
Mar: Easy as pie-
Mar's witticisms were stopped short as a new head popped out. Undaunted, Mar elongated his claws and stabbed the heart of the creatures.
Mar: Hmm.. that's strange.
Mar cutts off the head of the creature.
Mar: Look, it doesn't have a brain. That means the heart is the main system, and probably the only organ.
Mar cuts open the stomach of the creature.
Jake: You're right, there's no lungs, or liver or intestines.
Mar: We have to report this to the council. This is a larger threat than the Dark Army.
And the four fly off.
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Post by kashi on Jul 14, 2006 2:27:53 GMT -5
Great sequal so far ^_^ These new creatures seem like they may cause some trouble. I like the new direction it's going in. Keep it up, and update soon!
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Post by gojake on Jul 18, 2006 17:50:20 GMT -5
Chapter Two: Heirs Mar and Jake touched down at the Summit. Councilor Omina and Kulkulkhan greeted them quickly. Kulkulkhan: You must come with us immediately. It us urgent. David Long and your other companion will give us reports later. Omina and Kulkulkhan lead Jake and Mar into a medical facility, the same one in which David Long was revived. Ameera and Rose approach them in their human form carrying- Mar and Jake: Children!? Ameera: Yep. While you two were away, we had your children. Jake, you got 2 children, a boy named David and a girl named Rose. I have one boy, and I haven't picked his name yet. I wanted Mar's opinion- Mar: Lao. Name him after Grampa. Ameera: After General Lao Shi? Mar: Yeah. Jake: Good choice. Fu Dog walks in. Fu: I'm an uncle! Goo goo gooo! Nice choice of a name, Mar! David Long walks in. David: Even better, I'm a grampa! Everybody laughs. David: I gave the council the report. We're sending an army to kill this alien infestation. Mar: Did you tell them the only way to kill them is to destroy their hearts, Dad? David: Yeahhhhh.... Wait NOOOOOO! I forgot! Mar: Jake and I will go. (To Ameera) Keep Lao safe. It's bad timing he had to be born in these times. Jake: You too, Rose. Keep them safe. Ali walks in: I'll go with you. Let's kick some alien @$$!
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Post by gojake on Jul 31, 2006 13:04:16 GMT -5
No responce so I'll add another chapter..... Chapter 3: Clones Suck. As Ali, Jake, and Mar fly back to the abandoned resort, they are intercepted by a dragon, a black one that looks very much like Mar. : Who is Mar? ? Mar: I am. Come with me: I have some information that may yet still be useful to the dragons. Mar: OK, try me. : Firstly, I came from the future, where all is devastated. Humanity no longer exists. Dragons are on the brink of extinction. Those aliens you encountered at Atlantis, they will unleash a superweapon- Mar: Hey, we already blew up Andam's superweapon, how hard can this be? : LISTEN! The superweapon is not just one thing, it is an army of Mar and Andam clones! Mar: How'd they get my DNA? : Remember the hand you lost fighting the Dark Dragon? Mar: Yeah.... Wait a minute.... How did you know? Only Ameera, Rose, Jake, and Dad know! Because, I heard it from my grandfather. Mar: And he is? : David Long. Utter silence. Mar breaks the silence. His voice is calm and controlled. Mar: Name? : It's Damas. Mar: My son's name is Lao. Damas: I'm your second son. Jake: Well, I hate to break the family reunion, but don't we have to kill some aliens. Damas: No! Their clone army is too large. There is only one way to defeat them. Ali: And that is? Damas smiles wickedly, and points to a light in the sky very much like the sun, but is green. Damas: Blow the worldship......
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Post by midge1 on Aug 21, 2006 10:38:00 GMT -5
its coool
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Post by gojake on Aug 25, 2006 15:48:26 GMT -5
Ok time to update,
Son and Father
Mar: Yeah..... you know yoda, this is getting a little bit too star warsy for me. And I never really liked Attack of the Clones. Crappy 2002 special effects.
Damas: I'm not joking!
With a yell of rage, Damas lunges out at his father. The two start fighting. Mar although in his prime, is constantly pushed onto the defencive. Finally he gives up. The others stare in disbelief.
Mar: hhahahah! I can't believe you beat me! Oh well, looks like you got some of Jake's, you're mother's, Gramps, Dad's and my power. Bound to happen sooner or later. I wonder how powerful Lao is?
Damas: Lao is dead, dad.
Mar: What!?!?! How?!!
Damas: Somebody called, er I think it was Andam.
Mar: Andam's dead. I killed him, you know.
Damas: Looks like those bloody Dark Makers rebuilt him.
Mar starts to glow with anger.
Mar: I'm gonna kill that b*stard.
Jake: What's a Dark Maker? Oh, and I think you're dad's really pissed.
Damas: It's er, those creatures. They really do bioengineer stuff. Their cannons, worldships, weapons, they're all made out of organic sh*t.
Mar: Interesting. really interesting.
Damas: Well, whadda you think about the worldship?
Mar: Uhghh.... I'm really tired of blowing some stuff up. But if it means killing Andam, it's all cool.
Damas: Then we have to gather up an army. Not too many veterans from the Shadow Army War are still alive from the point in the future I came from. Some are Uncle Jake, Aunt Rose, Mom, Dad, and Grampa (that would be Mar's dad, not Jake's Grampa), and a guy named Fred Nerk, and some other people. I think there were 102 left.
Mar: Lucky for us, there are still 2000 or so left. (adressing everyone else) Let's go back to the Council! And let's hope we can beat these dark makers!
Chapter 5, Lao Shi's advice.
The week before the attack of the Worldship, Mar slept fitfully. First, he had dreams about dying in the battle of the Worldship. Then he had an even stranger dream, in which Gramps visited him.
Gramps (lol it has been so long since grampa talked.)
Gramps: Maaar..... Maaar.....
Mar: Gramps?!
Gramps: The world is at an end. Andam is not the only one behind this atrocity. I sense a great evil. And this great evil will overtake you. It will destroy you. But beware, if you destroy the evil which is behind this, you will become it...... beware......
Mar: What do you mean?
Grampa: Did I ever tell you when Jake created his dopplegangers?
Mar: Yeah, you did.
Gramps: Well, unknowingly, he created a doppelganger of you. Through a magical connection known as the Syntaxis Brothership, for every doppleganger he created, he created a part of yours. And when he created Yang Jake, he created the final part, the heart. That is why I believe that the Master of the Dark Makers is your doppelganger. And since his heart is that of Yang Jake, he is almost pure evil. Not pure, for some is good. Like your father, except there is not enough good to turn your doppleganger to the "good side."
Mar: So what do I do?
Grampa: Through my death, I visited the Sileth World, the world in between hell and heaven. There I found the soul of your ancestor, Leeda. He is the only one who can help you. You must bring his soul to here, were councilor Omina can revive him. But he cannot do the job for you. You must have great faith in yourself, and great compassion.
Mar: (despairing) I can't do this!
Grampa: You are my grandson, and I believe you can. You are the son of one of the most powerful dragons and brother to another. Remember.... you are his son..... remember.....
grampa fades away...
Mar: Grampa!!!
Mar wakes up with a start.
Mar: I've got a sh*tload to do, and only a week to fit it in. *D*mn writer*
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Post by kashi on Sept 2, 2006 9:57:17 GMT -5
Great new chapters! ^_^ This is the first time I've even had time to looka at this really. Love everythings that's going on, even though it's looking grave for Mar... Jake... the kids... the other dragons... oh and The World... o.o Keep it up! ^_^ Can't wait to see them find the rebuilt Andam, and the Yang Mar!
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Post by gojake on Sept 2, 2006 20:34:12 GMT -5
Caladchold:
Oh, the death of man even God cannot ban The Sileth world is ruled by a king who holds his power in a golden ring Caladchold be his name With the living he has gained little fame Dark is his mood which foul's the living's food. His anger is the living's hunger In rage he warmongers In fury he kills Pools of the dead's blood he fills.
THE LAY OF CALADCHOLD
Mar looked at the poem with a strange mood.
Mar: Geez, now I have to face a Dead King. How fun.
Jake: Well, It can't be all that bad.
Mar: Shut the f*ck up, b*tch!
Jake: Whatawhooda!?!?!
Mar: I'm sorry, Jake, it's just that these Dark Makers are getting on my nerves.
Jake: It's all right, I understand. It's just war stress. Maybe shellshock? Friggin Vietnam politicians? Bloody communists? Anything? Money problems? Did doctor phil say something bad (whoops scratch the last part)
Mar: Heh, no, Its just, I can't imagine Lao dying. I have to get Leeda back soon, and I think the-
Doctor: Hey, Mar? I think you should come to the hospital, quick.
The Doctor guides Jake and Mar to the hospital, into a small room labeled "Birthing Room," where Ameera lays, with a baby in her hands!
Ameera: Mar look! Our new son! I think I'll name him Damas.
Jake bursts out in laughter. He rolls across the ground.
Ameera: What, you think it's funny, Jake?
Mar: No, he's just high. I told him the thing he bought in Chicago was crack. He bought it from Brad Morton anyways. And the Budweiser didn't help matters either. Bloody Chicago drug dealers.
Mar and Ameera kiss, and Jake becomes really sober.
Ameera: What's up with him? Did some Dark Maker give him some kind of beer? Darkweiser?
Mar: You're so funny. Why I married you is no mystery.
Jake: (He's already seen Damas, so that's why he acts like he just got some pot from Brad) Yeah, so don't we have to go to the Sileth world.
Mar reluctantly breaks away from ameera.
Mar: I'll be back (and now I'm quoting Terminator. Damn budweiser)
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Post by gojake on Sept 6, 2006 20:35:35 GMT -5
Ok, now time for Chapter, well, I ll just give it a title.
Half Brother...
2 days before the attack of the WorldShip, Sileth World.
Mar: Hey, Jake, who is this Caladchold?
Jake: A relative. He lives with his wife, Miranda, in here, where he's the king of the Dead. used to be a lord, but a adventure with something called a Twisted Blade, apparently his sword, changed him and brought him to sucsession. Lol, I could also sucseed him, but he's a vampire.
Mar: And is he related to me?
Jake: You're illegitmate, but he'd be you're half brother. Born a year after you.
As they aproach, a figure clad in spiky armor comes up to greet them.
Cal: Hey, Jake, wazzup bro?
Jake: Sup, Caladchold?
Cal: Who's your friend?
Jake: Your other half brother.
Cal: Didn't I tell you we already had a really messed up family? Did you have to make it more messed up?
Mar: Nah, it gets worse, I'm illegitimate.
Caladchold pretends to faint.
Jake: Were here on buisness. We need to get our ancestor, Leeda, to the Upperworld before the attack on the worldship ensues.
Cal: I'ts mar, isn't it? You added a lot of people to the Underworld with that little nuclear blast of yours.
Mar: What can I say? I'm a Hun.
Leeda: Yes, you are.
Leeda walks into the group.
Leeda: You have made me proud, my descendant. You too, Jake. You can really make an ancestor proud. I am happy with your exploits in the world. Yet your time draws near, Jake. The only thing that can prevent it is catastrophic. It is the death or fall to the Dark Side of Mar. Either Mar's doppelganger will kill him, or Mar will fall to the dark side. Mar will eventually kill you later, but if Mar dies after killing the Doppelganger, and Andam, he will be redempted, and rule with Caladchold here.
Mar: I will die, If I have to.
(Oh boyo, I really have a tragic, and yet happy ending to this story, influenced by the book Ptolemy's Gate)
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Post by gojake on Sept 11, 2006 16:30:23 GMT -5
Chapter, well, i lost track so ill give it a title again. Oh, and remember 9/11, and the heroes who died for us.
Leeda's Revival. (This is just a talk chapter, so i'll add another one.)
Leeda: Now, Lao Shi told me that you would come and revive me for a day, no?
Mar: yeah, you'll fight at the world ship with us.
Cal: Hey, Mar, um, If you do die, you can always hang out here, you know.
Mar: An offer I'll think about. I doubt I'll go to heaven, I killed to many people, so I'll just come, when I'm dead. Something I'll think about when I die. Not now, anyway.
Jake: Well, we'd better be off! See ya, Cal!
Cal: Come back anytime! Sorry Miranda wasn't here. If she arrives in time, we may fight at the worldship with you.
Mar: We'd appreciate it! Thanks!
with happy smiles, they leave the Sileth World, and come back to Dragon Summit. Leeda, is of course dead, so they have to carry his body. As he arrives into the world, he slowly becomes to look younger and more like Mar.
Omina: (starts to mutter Chinese incantation).
Leeda gasps with the force of a spirit entering his body.
Leeda: I'm..... alive? Wahoo! (starts to whoop hun war cry)
Mar: Hey, ancestor. You were sleeping for such a long time, we couldn't decide wether to wake you up or not.
Leeda: Sup? Party in da woot woot house, my homie!
Jake: WTF?
Mar: WTBS (bs is bull sh*t)
Leeda: Sorry, somthing I learned from a dead canadian dragon.
New Chapter.... Heroic Death: FINALE! THIS WILL BE A FINISHER TO THE MAR SERIES!
?: Mien Gott in Himmel! ?: What in the name of Allah?!
Screams like that were common across the battle field. A fireworks display was going up. That day was when meteors and balls of fire fell from the sky. Apocalypse. It heralded the coming of a creature more powerful than any other ever seen: Yang Mar. The battle raged furiously. Dragons fought with skill, killing thousands of Dark Makers, yet the Dark Makers kept on coming. The Dragon lines were wearing out. Fred Nerk was already dead, and Rose was badly wounded in her arm. Coucilor Kulkulkhan was dead as well. A day of great sorrow it was. However, an unexpected force soon joined the battle: Miranda and Caladchold. They came with an army of living dead, slaughtering many Dark Makers. The sky rained red blood that day, and the clouds themselves were bloodied. Cal fought with a frenzy unseen in many dragons, with Miranda by his side. Eventually, Mar broke through and got to the worldship. With a mighty blast, he destroyed the entrance into the worldship, and entered, with Jake, Leeda, Damas, and Cal by his side.
Mar: That was fun. I killed 306, Jake, how many did you kill?
Jake: 292.
Cal: 626
Damas: 298
Leeda: 3125
Mar: What? You killed that many?
Leeda: too bad you weren't trained by a Hun.
At that moment, Jonathan (David was rong, it's Jonathan) walks in.
Jonathan: Never got around to it. Sorry, Leeda.
The group of six fought their way through the worldship, killing hundreds of the garrison, until they arrived at a door, which was bigger, badder, and more rich looking than anyother. As they arrived, they were greeted by surprise.
Yang Mar: Good to meet you, Mar.
Mar looked at his counterpart in surprise. Ironically, although Mar was good, his hide was black, and Yang Mar's hide was white, although he was evil.
Andam: And don't forget me!
Andam looked unbelievably grotesque. His entire body was robotic. His face was left untouched, but it was scarred, deformed.
Mar: Radiation. America never learns. Poor Hiroshima and Nagasaki. DRAGON UP!
Everyone else:(besides andam) DRAGON UP!
And then a fight begins. Jonathan and Leeda are the first to get knocked out, and then followed by Damas, then Cal. Mar fought his counterpart, as Jake fought Andam. Andam was much weaker than before, however, and Jake easily twisted both his arms off, then his legs, and then he ripped his face, and that was the end of Andam. Yang Mar, however was another story. Mar had already come close to death, and was inching closer, even with the help of Jake. Jake was nocked out of the fight, and Mar was left alone.
Parry, attack, parry, fire. The pattern continued. The battle was being waged still, outside the worldshipe. Mar, then, saw the only way out of this predicament.
Mar: Jake! Take every one else out of the world ship!
Jake: But-
Mar: Just do it!
Jake: Alright!
Jake takes the others outside of the ship, where they are taken to the medical camp on the field below.
Mar: Yang, why do you want to kill the world?
Yang: Because, it is my purpose, Mar. As yours is to save it.
Mar: And only through sacrifice will that happen.
Mar engages a bloody energy blast, at the same time Yang does. The two collide, and the strain on Mar and Yang's face is apparent. A ghost, a vision, arrives at Mar's side. Grampa
Grampa: Mar! Come on! You can do it!
The faces of his family, Jake, Jonathan, come unbidden to his mind. He even get's a glimpse of Susan and Hayley, although he has never seen them before. To himself, he smiles sadly, knowing he will never see them again. He really wanted to meet them. The ghosts help with his blast, until both blasts explode. Before the blast explodes, he gets a fleeting glimpse of his clones being sent out to war. Good thing the blast exploded now.
Outside.....
Jake's POV.....
The worldship exploded with enormous force, eliminating all dark makers and clones coming out. I couldn't believe it. Mar, my friend, my brother, was dead. I think Cal took it hard too, although he hardly knew him. Most shocked were Dad and Ameera. Ameera cried softly on Dad's shoulder, while Dad supported her from falling. Typical Mar, he didn't tell me any last things. I felt my spirit with him then, and I knew, through all ends and means, what he thought anyways.
THE END
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Post by gojake on Sept 13, 2006 21:06:29 GMT -5
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