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Post by Tales_ Fanatic on Sept 3, 2005 18:23:36 GMT -5
Nice. I like it ;D Continue please
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Post by Chaos on Sept 3, 2005 18:33:31 GMT -5
Nice chapters! Actiony! Please continue.
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Post by mithos on Sept 3, 2005 19:15:09 GMT -5
I agree fully! Please do!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 3, 2005 19:17:36 GMT -5
thnx i don't think i can get it up tonight but i'll try tommorrow tho
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Post by maromi on Sept 3, 2005 21:39:30 GMT -5
You wanted me to review this, It's AWESOME, no lies! ;D
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Post by dragonfire on Sept 3, 2005 21:39:37 GMT -5
i love the battle! its very cool when you picture how they do it all plz continue!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 4, 2005 14:06:14 GMT -5
ok here's the update
"the winner is hero!" the ref yelled at the top of his voice i jump put of the cage and went to the med tent to see feo and drake. i got there 5 minutes later "drake is feo ok?" i asked him when i got there"she's ok but she's need rest tho but where did sarah learn that move she pulled on feo?" drake asked me i shrugged and speaking of sarah i turned around to see her come in here "hero your drakes friend talk some sense into him and tell him to forget feo and be with me" sarah asked me "no sarah i'm sorry me and drake are best friends but i don't think he'll leave feo." i told heri turned around to see feo and geo standing next to eachother walking towards sarah i looked at drake "uh drake what's going on?" i asked him "i don't know but if i were ou you'd come right over here and stay out of there way." he told me as he duck under a table i did the same.
ok here's another catfight and geo's in it too and this is geo's pov
me and feo move towards sarah and we both punch sarah at the same time i pick up sarah and thre her to feo and feo grab her and slamed her to the ground both me and feo did a axe kick to her stomach i pick her up slap her 10 times backup ran up and did a killer axe kick to her head sarah was knock out.
back to hero's pov
i looked at geo and feo i knew those two where good at fight alone but together they seemed unstoppable
i'll continue with drake pov and i'll continue when i get reviews
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Post by dragon on Sept 4, 2005 14:10:06 GMT -5
Yes, I'm liking it! I've been enjoying the plot as I read it. There are grammar errors, but heck, story is still really good. Keep it up, I'm really liking it!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 6, 2005 17:35:42 GMT -5
ok here's the update and back at drake's pov
i looked at hero who was just as shocked as i was to see geo and feo fight sarah. i knew they carry a grudge but nothing like this "hey drake let's get out of here before they come over here." hero told me as he snuck out "right behind you hero." i said in a low whisper. " hey drake how about i show you around before the semis." he said to me i look at him confused "hero don't you want to see who your opponent will be in the semis?" i asked him as we walked around " i'll find out besides you already know you have to fight yui and i don't think we should go back there after that little catfight back there." he said "yeah your right," i said with a laugh"btw i been meaning to ask you this but do you ever get nightmares when you sleep in your room?" i asked him " sometimes but not much if your starting to get them you can talk to your parents about it or yuin." he siad to me but that parent thing hit me hard"uh hero i never got to know my birth parents." i told he laugh i could tell he thought it was joke"come on drake of course you have parents otherwise you won't be here." he told me "hero you don't know how lucky you ryu and luis got it! you guys got to know your parents i never did!" i yelled out i feel a tear drop roll down my face" see hero my parents ethier didn't want me or they die in a terrible accindent." i sad to him now completely balling my eyes out i flet put his arm now my shoulder " drake listen i'm sorry i didn't know and besides i say your lucky not to have parents cuz that way you don't know the pain you get when they die," he told me " and besides yuin like godfather." he told me " yeah i know but the only thing that is close to a family are you ryu jake and luis." i told him as we walked into his home for a bit
there's the update and i'm sorry it takes so long to update but this ff is the continue part from hero's ff
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Post by dragonfire on Sept 7, 2005 16:49:24 GMT -5
Luis: united we stand devided we fall, day or night not time itself could take us apart that part is very sad *snif snif* plz continue (wiping of tears) waaaaaa!! *crying*
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 7, 2005 17:55:15 GMT -5
ok here's chapter 3 the semifinals drake vs yui
when me and hero got in hero home i still felt a little tense from what i told hero "hey drake you ok? cuz if you need to lie down you can go into--." i inturpted hero " NOOO! i'm sorry hero but it's just that it like me witnessing the amityville horror close up every time i go in there it's not the room it's just that balcony you have out there i feel something horrorible has happen there." i told shuddering every word " it's ok that's where my parents where well ya know." hero replied. i could tell he didn't like thinking his past as much as i did "well anyway let's get somthing for lunch drake. cuz i don't know about you but i'm hungry." he told me with a smile. after we ate lunch we headed back to the tourny arena to see yui in the cage waiting for me "well drake good luck your gonna need it." hero told me i nodded i seen yui fight before besides me and him need a rematch from when i 1st met him and hero. i jump over the cage wall faceing yui " well drake it look like we get that rematch don't we" yui said with a smile. "yeah but i promise i won't go easy on you like last time yui!" i said to him and the ref yelled" you may begin!" after he said that yui charge me and i did the same. yui kick me in stomach then uppercuted me into the air he jump up grab me and brought me down in a spinning piledriver. the pain was unbearable i got back up ingoreing the pain"i guess you know some new tricks yui." i said to with a laugh he charged me again attempting to get me into that move again i jumped over him leapfrog on to his back punch him three times spun around in a defying gravity move punch yui 2 more times droped back into a handstand and drop yui into a brainbuster " i'll keep kicking your ass like in kung fu flicks!" i yelled to yui as he got up again
this fight is long so i'll update it when i can
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Post by dragonfire on Sept 8, 2005 12:16:33 GMT -5
take your time
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Post by stranger on Sept 8, 2005 15:15:35 GMT -5
yes pls do continue soon! i like the fights, very interesting.
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Post by Tales_ Fanatic on Sept 9, 2005 15:29:30 GMT -5
Please continue ;D
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Post by mithos on Sept 10, 2005 12:42:52 GMT -5
Please do! I love it!
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