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Post by mithos on Aug 4, 2005 20:10:43 GMT -5
Nice addition! (will I be in the story? If so make me a wandering mercenary. And btw, I have a sword to!) That's me. (anime form.)
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 5, 2005 5:11:35 GMT -5
may be in the after the next hero cuz me and stranger have one going and i nto finshed yet
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Post by dragonfire on Aug 5, 2005 5:29:57 GMT -5
great story! plz continue!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 5, 2005 14:43:44 GMT -5
thanx here's the big fight between drake and huntsgirl who do you thinks gonna win 'well i hope your ready fight o btw no weapons got it?' i said to her 'fine no weapons' after that she charged at me right before did a running strike i move my arm for grapple and caught her spun her around and land her back on my knee 'well hunts girl you can be very pradictable ya know' 'yeah you talk way to much' after saying that she got back up and grappled me then turn it to quick knee to the stomach she jump up to my shoulders and soccer kick me in the head as i fell backward she kick me in the throat while she was in the air then in my stomach then just drop with feet landing on my stomach it did hurt alot i guess she gots new moves for a fight. but i think i just might pull this next one off. huntsgirl picked me back up and did a high kick which was inches away from my neck inches away to hit me in the neck with a kick but i caught it and trip her. she got back up in a new stance that i never seen before while i just gazing at her she runs up and grabs me jumps off my in does a 160 degree kick then another kick when i hit the ground i bounce up and she land a drive karate chop my thoart then did a front handstand frontflip then aside flip then got back in her tae kwon do stance 'like that move ha i guess you didn't know that the huntsmaster taught me aikido' 'yeah but aikido is only know for kicks plus it's time i finsh this' after i said that i ran up to grab her then got her with my knee grab her again before she land on the ground swung her around in aquick spin on to my back then just busted her in two 'yeah see girl your not the only one with new moves'. i pick her back up and shove her in to the american dragon and yell' hey dragon hold her' 'uh ok for what' the dragon said after he said that just said 'throw her up in the air now dragon' he did what i said and tossed her up and i nail a kick to the back of her head she got up after that hit and just before she retaliated the huntsmaster appaer betweens us 'huntsgirl that's enough come back to the hideout now' 'but huntsmaster let finsh this--' 'i said now' the huntsmaster yelled at her she just nodded yes got next to him. then the huntsmaster turned to me and said this'you will pay for betraying me drake' i just looked at him then he teloported out of there after he left i felt num again like right after when dragon-x gave in his powers just as i passed out i saw the dragon transformed back to human.
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Post by blaze on Aug 5, 2005 16:04:15 GMT -5
Kewl, kewl. Cant wait to read some more, its getting good now, keep up the great work DF123!!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 5, 2005 16:07:46 GMT -5
thanx oh if guys are wondering where i got thos moves that huntsgirl pulled off was from defjam fight 4 ny many guys probably might not of heard of it tho but the 160 degree kicks is from snoop dogg playing as crow and it's call 187 and the soccer kick one is from havoc and that move is called hostilty o thanx for hte review blaze i just need two more reviews to continue
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Post by blaze on Aug 5, 2005 16:26:41 GMT -5
Nice to see you took my advice on the paragraphs it reads better don't you think? Anywho, I'll get BTT now
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Post by magenta on Aug 5, 2005 17:55:45 GMT -5
Hey! This is really good so far! I'm waiting for more! ^_^
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 5, 2005 17:59:56 GMT -5
thanx i just need one more review
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Post by mithos on Aug 5, 2005 18:03:32 GMT -5
Here it is. Please continue! Your stories are EXTREMELY GOOD!!!!! Keep goin' you're doin' great!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 5, 2005 18:56:51 GMT -5
ok here's the finally part
i woke up a hour later in some1 room 'hey so your finally up' look around to see who was talking to me 'yo kid down here' i looked down and saw a char pei standing on his hind legs and he was speaking to me 'ahh a talking dog from hell somebody help me' i jump 3ft in to the air and back down on the desk of what it look like a antquie store. 'i ya get from the desk boy i look at the back room dooway and saw a old man in a china outfit 'o i'm sorry but this tlaking dog freak me out tho' who fu dog don't worry about him ' i looked at him and was gonna answer back but the bell hanging from the front door. 'yo g is are vistor ok cuz he didn't look when i--' the boy just look at me and said ' hey your up already but you shouldn't be up after takeing those kicks to the head and why where--' 'just shut it kid and just how you know i was up there kid i bet your that dragon the red one' i yelled at him he just turned and look at his what it seems to be his grand father ' g he knows so don't even try to give him the magical erase memory potion ' ' dang jake you just had to say that i had it ready ' fu dog said with depresstion.
'so your jake i knew i saw you before ' jake just looked at with wth look on his face 'wait now i remember your from my school right wow i didn't know you could fight like that' i just rub my head i was about to answer when a sound of a car stop in front of it i reconzied the lincse plante. i ran to the back of the room lou shi jake and fu dog wonder whats going 'fu go check what's with drake hurry to before this guy shows up to the front door' fu nodded and went to the back room to see me in the bed looking very sick 'hey kid what the sam hill is wrong with you don't let that guy take me home fu pls he my adpoted father and the huntsmaster ' fu just looked shock like some just slap him 'what did you just say kid' i told him everything from the whole begining to up til now. when fu heard mr hunter leave the store fu ran in there told jake and lou shi every thing to them i looked at lou shi just waiting for he was gonna say 'well i can't help him with his new dragon powers i'm training jake well i guess he can stay at the magic bazzar for a while i just noded yes and i got my things to gether before i left i looked at jake and asked ' what did you say to the huntsmaster any way jake?' 'i told him you where in austraila so left for the airport to look for you ' i just smiled and walked away i guess i owe jake i thought to my self. when i got to the bazzar they had a fight club for people who love to fight make a living ya this turned out pretty good for me after all with that i just smiled and signed up for the next fight.
there's the end igot one started in where my character meets stranger's character ryu after i get that done expect another one where drake meet's hero' character
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Post by dragonfire on Aug 5, 2005 22:50:44 GMT -5
WOW!! nice one! ill read the whole story so it would be one hundred percent accurate on my next story, plz continue its realy nice!
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Post by stranger on Aug 5, 2005 22:53:25 GMT -5
hay, not bad!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 6, 2005 8:26:39 GMT -5
thanx i'm working on where drake meet's ryu i haven't made a title yet any suggestion plz pm me
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Post by Chaos on Aug 7, 2005 17:09:06 GMT -5
Wow! Really good! Excitement and action! Great job, can't wait to see more fan-fics!
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