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Post by Juno on Jun 29, 2007 6:33:30 GMT -5
omg, good history. the last chapter was sad...
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jun 30, 2007 20:15:10 GMT -5
Thanks ;D. Any more reviews?
Oh, but Gramps deserved to die. He caused everything and he didn't care when his own grandson attempted suicide, I know Fu didn't deserve to die, but it would have been awkward if he had just left.
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Post by superspud234 on Jul 1, 2007 5:59:52 GMT -5
true. Please update i'm hooked!
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Post by ` SAY WHA ?! on Jul 1, 2007 8:00:46 GMT -5
*gasps* Gramps and Fu are dead! Jake is over the edge already! lol
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jul 1, 2007 21:58:00 GMT -5
Okay, well since you asked so nicely, I think I will update. Drum roll please: Chapter Eight- Hospital Break-in At about 9PM, the doctors insisted that Jonathan, Susan, Sun and Haley all go home. Susan didn't want to leave Jake alone. "Don't worry Mrs. Long. It's not like there is somebody who wants to do harm to your child." A doctor told her. They were able to get Jake's family to leave after a half an hour of sobbing from Susan. At about 11:55 PM, a nurse sat at Jake's door reading a book, but she was too busy reading that she didn't see 2 little boys sneak across the room. She also didn't see one of them pull out a pocket knife, well, not until it was too late and the boy slit her throat. The body hit the ground and the boy set the knife down. The boys were 88 and 89. They quickly snuck into Jake's room. "He's asleep." 89 complained. "Not for long..." 88 giggled as he grasped the water tank and squeezed it tightly making Jake open his eyes and grunt in pain. "Well well well. If it isn't our little dragon friend." 89 said. "You have a lot of guts killing the Huntsman..." "He deserved it..." Jake retorted as 88 let go of the water tank. "no. Huntsgirl deserved it." 89 replied. "And now you will suffer." "Go ahead! Kill me! Then you could do what I couldn't!" Jake laughed as he spit in 89's face. "We ain't gonna kill you, but once we're finished with you, you're gonna wish you were dead." 89 said. "I've wished I was dead since Rose died. Just kill me..." "What do ya think? Put him out of his misery?" 88 asked. "No. He's a dragon. Let him suffer." "Aww, screw that." 88 grabbed the knife and jammed it into Jake's stomach. "Now let's get out of here." Then the 2 left. Well, that was my 8th chapter. Please review. Because, the sooner you review, the sooner I update.
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Post by justicez on Jul 1, 2007 22:21:50 GMT -5
T.T,yet another sad chapter.But still good XD,update soon
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Post by ` SAY WHA ?! on Jul 2, 2007 21:07:39 GMT -5
*gasps* Now Jake's dead! update soon! its very cool!
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Post by superspud234 on Jul 3, 2007 12:55:10 GMT -5
Noooo!!!! Jake!!!!!! Whats gonna happen i wonder? Is he gonna meet Rose now that hes dead or has he survived?
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Jul 3, 2007 15:54:08 GMT -5
NOOOO! T_T
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jul 9, 2007 19:45:29 GMT -5
Chapter Nine- Too Late?
The next morning, the doctor came into the hall to see the nurse's body. The doctor rushed into Jake's room to see to see a blood covered Jake. Jake was awake and his breathing was raspy.
"Oh god."
When Susan, Jonathan, Haley, Trixie and Spud came to the hospital later that day, they were shocked to see paremedics in Jake's room.
"What happened?" Susan asked the receptonist. The doctor soon came to the group.
"Your son has completely gone insane." He told them. "He attempted suicide again and when we found him early this morning he said that 2 kids did it to him, one African-American and one white. He said they were wearing nothing but underwear."
"I believe him." Susan said.
"88 and 89!" Trixie gasped.
"There's something else." The doctor continued. "He killed the nurse."
"Oh my god!" Jonathan gasped.
"Jake would never kill anybody." Susan, Trixie and Spud all said at once.
"Well trust me, if we thought he was going to live, we would have had him taken away in a straight jacket." the doctor said before walking away leaving everyone but Jonathan in tears.
"Is Jake going to die?" Haley choked out, holding onto her mother tightly.
"I hope not." Susan said.
Oh my! Is Jake gonna live, will he be framed for what 88 and 89 did? Well, there's only one way to find out: review. I'd like 3 before I update again.
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Post by ` SAY WHA ?! on Jul 9, 2007 20:23:17 GMT -5
ooh!! I love it! update soon!!! TELL ME NOW!! LOL
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jul 19, 2007 21:46:18 GMT -5
Could I get some more reviews?
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Post by YFWE on Jul 20, 2007 15:27:48 GMT -5
Maybe if you tried harder and wrote longer chapters so people like me won't feel like they wasted however little time it took to read it. It was well-written, I'll give you that, but a lot of people don't necessarily want to read 15-line chapters. Just remember that before you start wondering where the reviews are. =P
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Jul 29, 2007 15:08:02 GMT -5
Duh he's gonna live. xP
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check it out yo, the amdrag is in da hizhouse[ss:American Dragon | Season 2]
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Post by amdrag1 on Sept 18, 2007 12:15:28 GMT -5
very sad but also good
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