Iron Hand
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Post by Iron Hand on Mar 16, 2006 19:50:42 GMT -5
Jeez! This is good enough for an ADJL show idea! I love this! The writing! Detail! Awesome! Lol.
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Post by The Pantheon Dragon on Mar 16, 2006 19:54:12 GMT -5
You have one heck of an imagination dude. XD Please continue!
LP
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Post by spyder on Mar 16, 2006 20:38:57 GMT -5
Thanks to all who are reviewing: Ironhand, Amdragon and Spyder. Spyder- My first time reviewers get a reward, I put them or their character in my stories, Amdragon has already been in dragons and glory (and he dies) Ironhand will Be in Long Days of fire (He will also be in a later Atecom story), So Spyder, I will put you in one of the Atecom the dragon stories, Maybe not the first but one of them. (There are 4 Planned) You're putting me in a story?! Hey thanx, that will be cool! Thanx!
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Post by Atecom on Mar 17, 2006 1:53:33 GMT -5
Yep im putting you in a story, I always give my reviewers good characters, as you can see Amdragon really liked his character even though he was a businessman who dies. Anyway.
Chapter 7- An anticipated Brew.
After following the old long dragon, we landed in the seclusion of the blue mountains, out west of Katoomba. Where we landed seemed to be the middle of nowhere, No civilisation in site for kilometres around, just trees, valleys and cliffs, but amongst the scrub there was a small country shack, obviously the residence of the dragon who had brought me here, for as of yet unknown motives.
He opened the door of the shack, then beckoned me to come in. I followed, so far, everything seemed normal. Once in the shack, the dragon transformed into a human, and I decided that, that would probably be the polite thing to do, So I changed into human as well. I* was a little overwhelmed by the darkness of the inside of the shack. I had to use dragon vision to get even the slightest idea of my surroundings. The old man disappeared into an room out the back. I heard something click, Then the lights came on. I was blinded for a second, I reached up and covered my eyes. I gradually lowered my hands as my eyes got used to the dazzling light. The old man then came out of the back room and pointed to a table.
“Have a seat” he said.
I walked over, pulled up a chair and sat down. The old man seemed to look at me for a bit. I have to say this, I felt really uncomfortable. I hoped that I was not going to be used as a medium in which he can unload his aged ramblings. He started to speak.
“So Atecom” He started. “You want more power? You wasn’t the ability to fight, be noticed?”
I didn’t know where this was headed. Was it a trick question, I was thinking about what to answer.
“Well?” He demanded a little impatiently.
“Uh yes” I replied.
“Well here I offer you a choice. One choice will give you at least 10 times the power and strength you already have. The other option, you can leave now, and do things your own way, as you have been doing now.”
“Uh I want the strength” I answered feebly
“Sorry?” He taunted.
“I want the strength” I repeated more confidently.
“Good” He responded. “I have an old technique of your grandfathers”
“My Grandfather?”
“Yes, Oh silly me, I believe I forgot to introduce myself. I am Dakon, consider me, a former.. Pupil of your grandfather”
“What?? He was a teacher, I never knew that”
“He was.. Lots of things, I cannot reveal all to you now. No more questions about that”
“But”
“Not listening, Not listening Lalalalalalalalala”
Wow for an old guy he sure acted immature
“OK” I finally gave in.
“Good, Now I have this formulae for a potion. After you drink it, you will be at least 10 times stronger”
I sat up at this. “A Potion, to get great strength all I have to do is consume a potion?”
“Well… Yes, But first, You have to prove to me that you are worthy of it.”
My heart sank a little. ‘Oh great I had to prove I was worthy of his damn potion I thought.’
“In order to consume this potion, After I make it, you will have to take it from me. That’s all.”
“So im supposing, you will try make it hard to get?”
“Oh yes”
“He he” I laughed, he’s just an old dragon, Ill get it easily.
“Ill go into the kitchen now and make it. You must not come in at any time. Before you start though, I want you to try chopping through this concrete block.”
He pointed to a 1M squared concrete block in the middle of the floor.
“You have got to be kidding” I replied.
“Just try, Or no potion.”
“Alright alright” I replied as I walked over to the block and turned dragon. I lifted my claw. I need to focus energy in my claws I thought to myself, as I raised it. Then I brought it down with all my might onto the concrete block.”
CRACK!!!!!
“OWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW F@#$@#@$@$@@$%^&$#$#$##%@@#*@#**$@#$**#*$#@!@@#@*#*$*$**#$#*#*$@*#*@$*##*#$*@#$*@#$*#*%@#*$@#**#@*##@*$@*$#*@$*#**@*$#@$*#@*#**@$##$@$*@##!*@$*@#*$#**$*@#*$”
I was hopping around the room. My claws hurt like hell. I held my claw with my other one and looked at the block. No damage to it whatsoever. My c;aws began throbbing.
The old man who was watching just laughed.
“Well that was mildly entertaining” He commented, then went into the kitchen.
Ill tell you even though he was about to give me a power potion, the old guy was starting to get on my nervs.
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Post by spyder on Mar 17, 2006 2:02:21 GMT -5
Yep im putting you in a story, I always give my reviewers good characters, as you can see Amdragon really liked his character even though he was a businessman who dies. Anyway. Gee thanx, maybe I should put you in my story in return? I'll have to think about it, anyway another great chapter keep it up!
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Post by dragoondart on Mar 17, 2006 11:22:06 GMT -5
XD, great ending. Keep it up dude. have you ever seen Remo Williams: The Adventure Begins? Hilarius old wise chinese dude.
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Iron Hand
Student
Get money.. by any means necessary..
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Post by Iron Hand on Mar 17, 2006 12:20:26 GMT -5
Haha, funny old man, ain't he? XD. Great chapter bro Update sizzoon.
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Post by Atecom on Mar 20, 2006 15:44:49 GMT -5
Chapter 8- The Desirable Brew
The old dragon emerged from the kitchen clutching a small flask in his claws.
“So are you ready to prove your worthiness of this potion now?” He asked
“As ready as Ill ever be” I replied
“Ok, lets go outside then”
The old dragon exited the shack. I hoped he wasn’t going to make me do anything scary, cause I would dislike that. I stood up from the chair I was seated in and made my way outside. Upon spotting me exit the shack, The old dragon Shot up into the air.
“Come get the potion” He called
“Right I replied” I dragoned up then shot up after him.
He waited till I got close then he shot off, For an old man, he could sure move. I took off after him.
“Ha, you’ll have to be faster then that” He yelled
I flew my fastest, but the gap between us grew bigger. I started to lose my breath, so I stopped for a moment Puffing.
“Out already?” He popped up from right behind me.
Damn, he was fast how did he get right behind me?
I didn’t give an answer, I stayed silent for about a minute, then suddenly I turned around and made a grab for the flask. But as quick as a flash, he initiated a dive, Damn!!! He was fast. I dived after him. He could even plummet faster then me. I started to concentrate on trying to fall as fast as possible, I tried to push myself, but he was still far too fast. Then at the last second just before hitting the ground, he levelled off, something I seem to lack the ability to do. I realised far too late and I went crashing straight into the ground.
“Ow” I cried as I rubbed my head. I felt a little dazed. I sat there while I regained my composure. The old dragon was hovering above me.
“Cmonn, you can do better” he taunted
I wanted that potion. Who would have thought that it would be so hard to get?
“Ok, You can try for as long as you like to get the potion, if it means coming back everyday for a year if you want. I think you’ve done enough today.”
“Yeah thanks” I grumbled back.
“See ya tomorrow?” he asked
“I guess so,” I replied weakly
“Sorry?”
“Alright alright, ill be back tomorrow after school.”
It was hard work, but I wanted that potion.
I flew home to read my Grandfathers logs, maybe I could gather inspiration from them.
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Post by dragoondart on Mar 20, 2006 17:31:24 GMT -5
Nice chapter!
“Right I replied”
XD whops!
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Iron Hand
Student
Get money.. by any means necessary..
Posts: 18
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Post by Iron Hand on Mar 21, 2006 19:07:21 GMT -5
Lol. This is getting funny, hehe.
Nice chaptah bro.
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Post by Atecom on Mar 22, 2006 5:46:17 GMT -5
Spyder- You will be in my third and 4th Atecom the Dragon stories, You will be a huntsclan member, but that doesn't necessarily mean you will be evil...
AmDragon- Only You could make soo many spelling mistakes, then pick up when I misplace inverted Commas XDDDDD
IH- Fair enouigh If it tickles your fancy
Chapter 9- Capturing the secret potion
The next day at school, I couldn’t concentrate. All I could focus on was that potion. I really wanted it. I wasn’t all powerful, but I should have been. Schwayne was at school that day which made me really happy, I had someone to talk to. It just kind of burned me up that I couldn’t tell him about my dragon powers. We were best friends after all how much could it hurt? I knew that he would come to support me while I was trying to get the potion, yet something, a feeling deep inside me kept me from telling him.
After school, I walked home with Schwayne, When I got home, I then walked into the backyard and turned dragon. I took off and headed towards the blue mountains for another shot to get the potion.
So that’s how things went for the next few weeks, every afternoon, after school, I would head over to the Blue Mountains. Then the old dragon would make me chase him for the potion. He would take me through thin valleys which I would have to carefully yet quickly navigate my way through, or I would crash into the side. He would also do tricky things, which I had to adapt to. I also started formulating plans in my mind, before and during the time in which I would try to get that potion. Although they never worked, they seemed to get better and better. During the times I wasn’t at school, or at the old dragon’s place, trying to get that potion, I would read my grandfathers logs, Train myself according to them, I also improved my skills using external energy.
Sometimes he would take me through certain obstacle course style places. Other times He would throw obstacles at me. At first, It was hard, but I soon learned to avoid the obstacles, or smash through them or zap them. During the second week, I noticed that I was slowly catching up to him in speed as well. On the fourth day of the 3rd week, I almost managed to grab it.
“Wup Nearly” He laughed as I missed it.
The blue mountains was the perfect spot for all this. Its long open plains and valleys, with little or no civilisation meant that we could traverse the great dissected Plateau with very little chance of being spotted. As the days went by, and I got closer and closer to my target, I aspired to obtain that potion more and more. I could imagine the power I would possess afterwards.
Then Finally on the 3rd day of the 5th week, I managed to tackle the old dragon to the ground. I had gotten to know many of his routines, and there was this one where he would go to dive, but only dive for a second, misleading me into a dive, then he would immediately pull up and be well clear of me. But this time I was ready for it. I pulled up when he performed this manoeuvre and I caught him off guard. After making impact with the ground, he dropped the potion. I immediately got up and dived upon it. I felt increadable. After five long weeks, I finally held the key, to make myself stronger then I could possibly ever imagine. The old Dragon looked up.
“Congratulations, Young one, You do indeed deserve that potion”
“Thanks” Was all I could say, I was still a little breathless, and a little bit overwhelmed that I had managed to take the potion. I opened the lid of the flask and smelled it. It didn’t seem to have a distinct taste. Then I put the flask up to my mouth and I started to drink. I downed it on in an instant.
“Wow, I can feel the power coursing through my body” I yelled
The old man just smiled and chuckled.
“Wow the power is overwhelming” I exclaimed. “What was in that potion?” I asked
“Do you really want to know?” He asked
“Sure” I replied
“Ok, Ill tell you then. The ingredients to the potion are…”
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Post by dragoondart on Mar 22, 2006 16:55:04 GMT -5
YOU ARE EVIL!!!!! J/K Good cliffhanger. (five cents says its a laxitive.)
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Iron Hand
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Post by Iron Hand on Mar 22, 2006 19:41:22 GMT -5
Dude, I bet the potion does nothing. That it was just a motivational tool. Lol, I'm right aren't I? XD just have to wait..
Which means, UPDATE! XD
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Post by dragoondart on Mar 22, 2006 22:38:59 GMT -5
Or perhaps the next words are "my urine!"
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Post by Atecom on Mar 23, 2006 1:33:31 GMT -5
Amdragon-The old guys a little eccentric, not a psycho
IH- Congrats, you win a miilion nothing for guessing correct
Chapter 10- The secret Ingredient
“The secret ingredients to the potion are… Water”
“WHAT?” I replied
“I said water, ordinary water”
I was in disbelief, I thought that guy had tricked me
“WTF? You mean, I spent 5 Weeks, half killing myself just so I could drink water?” I asked angrily
“Don’t you understand?” He replied
“No, Obviously I don’t, Or maybe I do, You have a sick little mind, that you like to get young dragons to chase you all day, all so you can give them water. Does that give you a laugh?”
“No, You see, The water was just a placebo”
“All I see is that I’m not 10 times stronger”
“Ok, Il admit that, Your at least 25 Times stronger now”
“We.. Uh What?”
“Don’t you see, all that time I was getting you to chase me, I was improving your mind, your physical abilities, your reflexes, your speed. You are so much stronger now then when you began. You could make a great warrior now. It would take normal Dragons months to accomplish what you have done in 5 Weeks, with this Training Program.”
“Uh, Well” I feebly replied, I began to feel quite stupid.
“Wait here” He said as he went back inside his shack. He emerged again with the concrete slab he asked me to hit earlier on.
“Try again” he insisted.
“But”
“Just try again, trust me, yourself and try again”
Well I was probably going to injure myself stupidly somehow anyway, I thought, I may as well try again. Once again, I began to concentrate all my energy to my claws. I focused like I learned to do during the last 5 weeks. I positioned myself, then raised my claw above my head. Then as quick as a flash, I gritted my teeth, shut my eyes and brought it down as hard as I could upon the concrete block.
“Uh..Ow@#$#@#$&*$#” I exclaimed, It still hurt, but nowhere near as much as before. I opened my eyes, There instead of a concrete block, there was a pile of concrete dust.
I was overcome with joy. “Thank you so much” I told the old dragon.
“Don’t worry about it, consider it a favour for a friend” He replied warmly.
“I will never forget what you did to me, because of you I now have a rekindled spirit and a newfound confidence in life.”
“Just take care” He said.
“I will” I replied.
I then took off. I was very happy on the way home. I didn’t care about dragon rules anymore. This weekend would be it. I decided. This weekend I would reveal my dragon secret to schwayne.
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