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Post by Chaos on Jul 19, 2006 12:56:58 GMT -5
Ooh, they're gonna be mad at each other. -_^
Chapter 5: Torn Apart
"Um, Jake? How are you gonna confront the evil demon from... that evil guy Rose?" Spud asked Jake, confused slightly on what he was saying. Trixie just looked at him ocnfused and then turned to Jake for his answer.
"I don't know, but I know she knows about Trixie kissing me, and that will set her off..." Jake muttered, glaring at Trixie who just looked up into the sky sadly. "Ok, here we go.." Jake thought, walking into the hotel and going up to his room, which was empty except the default room, the luggage, and Rose, who was just laying on bed and turned to Jake who took in a deep breath.
"Rose! Why did you kiss Spud!?" Jake yelled at Rose, who just sped off of the bed and ran closer to Jake.
"What are you talking about? You and Trixie locked lips at breakfast!" Rose yelled, starting to cry. Jake just looked at Rose in the eye clearly, very clearly.
"That Rose... wasn't this Rose." Jake thought, just glared at her wide-eyed and then went back to normal. "Well Rose, the Mac Daddy Jake is going downstairs to train a little more for the next battle." Jake statded, smiling a little and leaving the room. Rose wiped her tears away and watched Jake leaving, confused.
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Florence, Shade, Gramps, and Fu were in the lobby, until Shade left to go to the bathroom. Florence smiled as he left, but when he returned, Shade looked from Florence, who looked over at him, waving, to Trixie, who was close by. he ran over and he put his arm around her and kissed her, then ran off back into the bathroom, but Gramps was able to watch, from the cornor of his eye, this Shade starting to mold into somethign else, but it was hard to tell what. Once Shade returned once again from the bathroom, he walked over to Gramps.
"Shade, someone has been taking your place, and-" Gramps tried to explain, but was cut off by a kiss on the cheek by Derceto, who quickly swam away.
"You were saying?" Shade asked, but the kissed made his a bit dazed as he sat down next to Florence.
"Shade! You kissed Trixie!" Florence yelled to Shade.
"What on earth are you talking about!? I was in the bathroom!" Shade explained, confused with Florence's statement, but she stormed into the elevator. "Fl-Florence, wait!" Shade pleaded, runing to the elevator, but before it closed, Florence was just glaring at Shade, as the elevator doors closed. Shade sighed slightly and walked out of the suite, turnign into a dragon and flying up.
"Well Trix, that's two mistakes YOU'VE made!" Spud yelled at Trixie, runnign into the elevator as Jake left the one Spud was going into.
"Hey.. What did I miss?" Jake asked. Fu just groaned and smacked his hand into his head, sitting down next to Gramps.
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Jul 19, 2006 14:32:14 GMT -5
o__o dang... so much lying and deceit. So confusing. XD
I know! The rabid muffin told me that this isn't going to end well... or is it just his rabid evilness telling me that? XD
Anyway, loved it! Update soon! ^^
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Post by gojake on Jul 19, 2006 17:37:35 GMT -5
WOW MAN.... THIS IS ONE OF THE STRANGEST YET BEST FANFICS IVE EVER SEEN
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Post by Chaos on Jul 19, 2006 20:46:34 GMT -5
Yes, the strangness will stop here, so people who haven't read chapters 1-5 yet, DON'T READ THIS! It's a spoiler for what has been happening.
Chapter 6: Rewrite the Past
Shade as a dragon was flying around the city, waving to people with a fake smile on his face. Then, he saw two people in a nearby ally, that weren't mermaids, so he was curious. He flew down and saw one of the people was Florence, but she was leaning over and kissing the other person who was hidden in the shadows. It... Was... Aqua! Shade just flew away in anger and shock at the grinning Aqua and Florence.
"Wow, we've really been fooling them!" Aqua said to Florence, who nodded and then started to morph back into who she really was, Aqua's new accomplice, Saphire! She was evily grinning as she and Aqua ran into the concealed building as looked evily as Josh.
"I can't beleve that dragon's shapeshifting would cause so much problems for our enemies!" Saph said, morphing into Rose, Derceto, Florence, and Trixie again before turning back into Saph and her shapeshifting was gone. Aqua did the same but turned into Spud, Shade, Jake, and Fu Dog. He still had some shapeshifting power.
"Ok, one last job." Aqua said, shapeshifting into Josh the elf and speeding out of the concealed building, grinning evily and then giving a calm and normal face. He walked over toward the hotel that they were all staying at.
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"Florence kissing Aqua! I didn't even know he was still alive!" Shade yelled.
"He isn't... Is he?" Jake murrmured as Josh the elf entered their room. "Josh, good to see ya!" Jake said, smiling and showing his glimmering dragony teeth.
"You guys... I came heer to explore about Aqua the dragon who can control water again and his newest accomplice, Saphire." Josh explained, waiting for Jake and Shade to come with them. Fu and Gramps were going to be gone all day to discover the attackers. Rose and Florence were having lunch, and Spud and Trixie were just in their room. They were both let to the conceiled room where Aqua and Saph were hiding and keeping Josh.
"Ok, why are we here?" Shade asked, ready to fight. Josh just grinned as he morphed back into Aqua, his powers running out for shapeshifting. Saph, in her dragon form, was next to Aqua, who just turned dragon. Saphire burnt both of them as they fell over unconcious in human form and Aqua used water to make a rope to tie them together.
"Hah, this is going great..." Saph muttered, sorta bragging as they prepared for the ultimate attack on Atlantis.
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Jul 19, 2006 23:18:41 GMT -5
Gasp. Florence kissed Aqua...XD I mean.. uh, nice! Again! >.> I always love your chapters. lol. Anyway... I love it... Gaaah, so much more deceit. I hope they get put back together... So sad... Anyway, update soon!!! ^^
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Post by charles finley. on Jul 20, 2006 0:34:07 GMT -5
*gasp* NOES!! ROSE MUST KISS JAKE NOT SPUD!! NOES!! XD
^^Im so hopless..XD XD
Anyways: Woes..Thats Really good! I luv it! Update soons!
-Ash
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Post by Chaos on Jul 20, 2006 2:00:36 GMT -5
Sorrie. Well, there's gonna be big make-ups. ^^ You know, because it wasn't even ROSE who kissed Spud, or trixie who kissed Jake...
Chapter 7: I Need You
"Yo G, Shade and Jake have been gone for a long time with Josh!" Trixie said to Gramps as he finally regained conciousness.
"Because those people kissing each other... Wasn't even each other! Shade didn't kiss you... Rose didn't kiss Spud..." Gramps muttered, remembering when the fake Shade ran into the bathroom, already in mid-morph.
"Then, that means!... What does that mean?" Spud asked confused.
"THAT MEANS, head in the clouds boy, that the odd kssing incidents weren't real, they were to mess with our trust!" Fu yelled at Spud, speeidn on his four legs into the elevator to get Rose and Florence. Spud just gasped, finally understanding.
"Then come on! What are we doing, standing here?" Spud asked, grabbing Trixie's arm and dragging her out of the hotel, but Spud and Trixie stopped, glaring at something on the horizon. Florence and Rose ran past, not noticing the abomination they were staring at. Fu and Gramps ran out, but Fu and Gramps also stared at what Trixie and Spud looked at.
"Oh, my, fuhoogiegoogie..." Fu muttered, covering his eyes with his paws and stepping back with his hind paws.
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Florence and Rose sped past everyone who was staring up and went into every building, trying to find them, but was unsucessful... Until they found the torn up and tied together building, which Florence and Rose easily broke through and confronted Aqua and Saphire, who were grinning and glaring at them.
"HEY!! Let them go!" Florence yelled, clentching her fists and ran up to Aqua, uppercutting his chin and kicking his soft under-belly so he was sent back into a can. She woke up Jake and Shade as the water rope fell down into the floor and she found Josh tied up, and cut loose his ropes and freed him. Josh nodded as thanks and flew out of the building to help with the coming force.
"hey, you are ruining our plan!" Saphire yelle,d shooting pink crystals form her mouth as Rose, who jumped from the wall to go under her wide open legs and tisted Saph's arm backwards and kicked her in the head, swining her by the tail so she flew into the wall. She smirked and ran over to help the others.
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"Ok, let's get ready, come on! We can all stop a war from happening if we all trust each other and fight for love!" Jake and Shade announced. Florence and Rose enoded, smiling as they all left the building for unconcious and human Aqua and Saphire.
"Holy... oh... wow..." Josh said, pointing up to the giant force. It was rouge mermaids, giant and medium jellyfish, Kracken, and multiple other evil underwater menaces. They loudly burst the buble as water flew in and broke all of the buildings quickly. Everyone was not prepared for the this... but a war was going to happen. The war to save the Lost City of Atlantis!
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Jul 20, 2006 3:11:26 GMT -5
SHOCKING! XD And omgosh, they figured out the plan. lol. I thought they would figure it out later on in the story... but this is still SO awesome. ^^;; Can't wait for your next update!! And I can't wait to see what they'll do to... SAVE THE LOST CITY OF ATLANTIS. GASP. And how does it all end? Only you know.. but we have to find out later. Ebbbil. >.> Anywaaaays. Update soon.
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Post by gojake on Jul 20, 2006 18:08:47 GMT -5
*drool* need i say anymore?
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Post by Chaos on Jul 21, 2006 1:33:29 GMT -5
Yes, I know... But what if I don't even know yet? ^^ You will get to see some new powers too, but later on.
Chapter 8: A New Rivalry
Inside what was the building, Saphire got up, but Aqua was lying on the floor. Saph just looked at him and then jumped out of the remains of the house. She just looked over and watched Florence, hiding behind Shade. A couple of giant, evily fish started swimming over to them.
"Uhhmm... Shade!" Florence yelled, pointing at the fish. Shade turned dragon and created iceballs in his hands and threw them at the fish's fins, so they froze and the fish all fell to the ground. He just flew over and sliced them with his claws, but going so fast,a large and sharp scale of him flew off and went in Florence's direction. She just watched it land next to her and looked into the reflection and saw herself and her large, grown out, and well-cared for hair. She hadn't been training or fighting in a while.
"Heh heh, she seems to be the weakling, hiding behind everyone." Saphire thought, just looking at Florence, sitting on her knees.
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A few medium sized jellyfish swam over to Spud, Trixie, and Fu Dog.
"Ueh... Some plan might be good here, ya know?" Fu asked them both, who looked at each other seriously and smiling. Trixie grabbed Spud's arms and swung him around a few times, then let go so he ran into the jellyfish, sending most of them flying back into the floor and getting scraped up. They high-fved each other as Fu looked at the last one.
"I will do something!" Fu thought, running up to the jellyfish and biting off some tentacles and jumping off of the head of the squishy fishy. He was stung a little on his hind paw as he didn't really notice it.
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Two giant squid flew at Gramps, Rose, and Jake as Jake and Gramps turned dragon.
"Ok, Rose, I'll throw you at one of them and you can do what you want." Jake explained to Rose, who nodded and jumped up. Jake grabbed her shins and threw her at a squid, diving threw it very fast as it started squirming around in pain.
"G, now!" Jake ordered to Gramps, who nodded and ran up to the top of the squid and kicked it with the tip of his claws as his toes, scrathing the squid as it fell down.
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"I...I can't do anything!" Florence thought sadly ad Saph saw her chance to do something. She ran up and clentched most of Florence's long hair hard and started leaning on it. "YA!!!" Florence yelped in pain, twitching her eye. Saphire just grinned at Florence, shaking her around slightly by her hair.
"If you have enough time to care for your hair, train more!" Saphire yelled at Florence. She was growing out her hair to seem more appealing to Shade to make sure he noticed her. "Trying to be sexy?" Saph asked as Florence groaned slightly.
"I... can't move..." She muttered, slowly reaching for the large scale and aiming it for what looked like Saphire, who just glared at it, giving a normal look on her face.
"You know that won't work on me." Saphire muttered, watching Florence turn and evily look at Saphire.
"What are you talking about?" She asked, aiming the very sharp scale at her hair. Once again, slowly, she started to send it through her hair as Saph fell over on her back, still holding all of the hair. The headband that she usually wore flew off and to the ground as she dropped the scale and stood up.
"From now on, dragon, we are rivals." Florence said to Saphire, glaring at her and saying dragon evily, like she used to with Shade/Freezy the Dragon.
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Jul 21, 2006 3:06:40 GMT -5
*stuttered gasp* XDD Like, dude... Just awesome. lol. Sorry, I was kinda... caught up with the stuff so I didn't get to read and review right away. ^-^;; Anyways, update soon! Awesomeness must pursue!
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Post by gojake on Jul 21, 2006 13:00:29 GMT -5
LOL Saphires witticisms are funny. Plz update soon
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Post by Chaos on Jul 21, 2006 14:30:37 GMT -5
Thank ye all for talky stuff. ^^ Everyone's gonna either get something that makes them better or do something that makes them better, like Florence's new look, or at least haircut.
Chapter 9: New Acts of Redemption
Florence just looked at Saphire seriously. She jumped and flipped up, watching Saph throw the hair next to Florence's hairband.Saph turned dragon and flew up as Florence jumped off a lamp post into Saph's belly as her eyes widened with pain and she fell over. When Florence landed, she landed on top of Saph's legs painfully. Then, she opened her outh widly, biting hard on Saph's right arm.
"OOHWW!" Saph yelled, punching Florence on the top of her head to get her off, but she didn't move. Florence started to bleed on her head as she got up, still biting, and kicking Saph's stomach then up to her chin.
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Aqua started to stir and got up, slowly opening his eyes. He clentched his fists and turned dragon, getting up and ready to fly off. Then, Shade just looked at a group of jellyfish that had surronded him. He was in fright as they got closer.
"Ughm... Jellyfish..." Shade muttered, thinking of one time when he was found, snorkling. A suprise attack of jellyfish had stung him all over, sending him in pain. As he got back to the present, the jellyfish got closer. Fu turned around to see Shade.
"Oh no! The kid's in trouble!" Fu yelled, stretching the rolls of wrinkles he had on his face down. One of the giant jellyfish threw his largest tentacle at Shade, who ducked. But, of course, it cut through his bandana so it broke, but it also got his hair so it stung all over him. Shade kept thinking about what was going on now and in the past, and then durned dragon, glaring at the jellyfish, but he looked a little different... Well more than a little.
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Jake looked at a group of Kraken glaring at him. He grinned and flew up, flying down again. The Kraken were confused that Jake was charging them head on, but they didn't know Rose was behind them. Jake was about to breath fire, but then he realized fire wouldn't work while they were in water.
"Oh, right, that..." Jake muttered. He spun around in a circle to stun them a bit with his tail as Rose jumped up and span around, with her leg held up high. She started kicking the back of the Kracken's heads to they fell back.
"Jake, I think we should be more careful, you could've gotten hurt by forgetting about fire not working here." Rose warned Jake, who nodded and turned human to rest slightly, even though there was still a giant army of enemies.
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(Author's Note: For this point on, I think you should listen to Breaking the Habit by Linkin Park over and over, reading this. ^^)
Shade's eyes were shapred like icicles and covered with ice, his teeth grew with fangs, shrouded with ice, his claws were sharper, his scales were slightly silver as well as the normal light blue, and the old light blue swirls of ice in his right hand and red swirl of fire of his left hand came back.
"Aiya! That form of Shade has come back!" Gramps yelled, looking at Shade, who simply blinked, making a large blast of ice come from his eyes, freezing and destroying the kellyfish that surrounded him.
"That power... Of Shade... I never ever got to see that... And I need it!" Aqua yelled, looking at Shade greedily. Shade just turned and looked at Aqua evily.
"I will kill you." He said seriously, flying quickyl over, all the water he past freezing over in ice. Aqua just wide-eyed Shade.
"I think I can't do this..." He thought, ready to block with his arms as Shade cut through Aqua, who yelled loudly. Then, Crazed Shade used water to whip Aqua and then he punched his own fists, sending Aqua in a block of ice.
"Yo, that Shade has always been so tense and thinking of the past... He must'a just snapped." Trixie explained, Spud noding. They all just watched as Shade fought Aqua very hard.
(I'm running out of time to keep working on this... so it wou'd've been longer, but I had no time, sorries!)
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Post by charles finley. on Jul 21, 2006 15:48:45 GMT -5
*gasp* Hehehe I just happened to be listeing to Breaking the Habit when I read this..XD
UPDATE SOONS OR BE POKED TO DEATH!!!XD
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Post by Chaos on Jul 22, 2006 0:19:37 GMT -5
Heehee... Funny. Ok then... Next chapter, Shade's crazed form continues to wreak... ^^
Chapter 10: Blast of Everyone's Hearts
Aqua blasted through the ice and just panted, looking into Shade's cold, frozen eyes. Aqua tried to think quick and looked at Florence, just standing up and watching the fight. Her messy hair was flowing with the water.
"Heh..." Aqua laughed slightly and quietly, speeding over to Florence and grabbing her as she half closed her eyes and just looked at Shade. He looked over and growled a little, about to fly but being cut off by a voice.
"No, Shade. You have been the one saving me, me watching your back." Florence muttered, clentching. "So everyone, please... Watch my back." She finished, evily speeding out of his arms and kickign Aqua's face and jumping behind his and doing a roundhouse kick to send Aqua to the ground, pinning his arms. She walked over next to Shade, noticing he was still in his crazed form.
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Spud looked at Trixie and then the large army of evils.
"Um, I think that we should really do something." Spud muttered, waiting for everyone else to notice.
"Come on, we have to do something!" Jake yelled, flying over to Shade and Florence, as well as everyone else. Saphire started to get up, but Josh sped over to her and used wind power send her and an unconcious Aqua into the evil group of jellyfish.
"It's all clear." Josh stated, running back over. They all formed a circle around Florence and Crazed Shade, who just looked at each other. Shade still seemed evil, but Florence just sadly looked at Shade, starting to cry and just leant up and kissed the Crazed Shade. He slowly turned normal and send an odd light blue barrier over everything near and in Atlantis. Everything seemed blue as everything had been surrounded.
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Jake, Rose, Spud, Trixie, Shade, and Florence were all in a place of white.
"Wha... Why are we here?" Rose asked, looking around. All that was there was a large screen, them, and white everywhere else. The large screen read,
'To escape the seal of pure lust, you all need to have pure trust.' They all just looked at each other oddly.
"Trust... That's what Aqua and Saphire were trying to break, our trust!" Florence said. She and Shade were very weak.
"Then, it must not be all together again?" Trixie asked, slightly confused as Jake nodded. They all sighed slightly, thingking that they all had enough trust in each other but would never be able to leave.
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