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Post by ADJLFanatic on Jul 2, 2006 0:30:50 GMT -5
.. sorry if i didn't read right away. >.< Anyway, it was AWESOME. I'm bummed that I didn't get to watch the Academy episode tonight since I had stuff to do. -_- So, yeah. But reading this made me feel somewhat better a little. XD Well, update soon. ^^
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Post by Chaos on Jul 2, 2006 0:35:53 GMT -5
I willl.... After vacation. -_- I'll give some more info on more in the story.
- As for the most remembered man, think a man of Hunts, think a stepdad. (You'll know if you read my other fan-fics.) - A friend from a previous fan-fic returns, as well as an enemy. - This is the first time Shade will take off his bandana in a human form. I'm still working on getting his pic, i.e. waiting for a certain someone to finish the picture. ^^ - And maybe a little more...
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Post by kashi on Jul 2, 2006 0:36:59 GMT -5
Im sorry about the comic comment, I ment Fanfic story, I just about out of feul, no sleep and some pills.
The story was great, I hope you keep getting new chapters out soon. ^_^
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Post by Chaos on Jul 9, 2006 22:42:44 GMT -5
Alright, Mexico's sometimes boredom/plane ride/car ride boredom gave me great ideas, and a nice idea for another fan-fic.
Chapter 8: Huntsdad Returns
Huntsdad was just glaring at the gang ready to leave, as the green force field over them was starting to grow and get even more glowing. His newest understudy walked out form behind him.
"Attack!!" He yelled as the large group of Huntsclan members ran toward them. Florence just jumped off of Shade as he held out his hands in form of him. Florence just pushed off them to charge at some Huntsclan members, knocking them out. Shade laughed and froze some people throwing them at the force field, melting the ice and hurting them. Jake just jumped up and burnt some people, but they shoved him into the force field, making his spark up. Spud ran into the large Huntsclan mob and got punched right in the stomach.
"Spud!" Trixie yelled in worry, as Spud groaned and went for another attack, but he got electricuted by a staff, getting flown back into Jake's soft under-belly. He turned human. Trixie ran over and helped them both up, angry at them Huintsclan. She ran over and started to karate chop some people and kick them. Florence just grinned and ran over to her stepdad and kicked him hard in the head, sending his mask flying off.
"That's for being such a mean stepdad, even on my birthday!" Florence yelled to Huntsdad as his newest understudy ran over to hit her as she flew into the electric field and he hair stood up. She growled a little and fixed her hair, noticing she had a burn that was bleeding on her arm. Florence ignored it and sped over to Shade as he quickly turned human.
"Wh-What's wrong?" Shade asked, looking at Florence's burn. "Oh..." He muttered, pulling off his bandana. His light blue hair flew over his face in multiple spikes as he tried to pull it away from his eyes. Shade blew over Florence's burn as ice started to cover the burn. He tied his bandana over the burn and kissed Florence's cheek, running back into battle. Florence's eyes went half closed as she smiled.
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Post by Chaos on Jul 12, 2006 12:34:40 GMT -5
Grr... No one posted. Oh well, next chapter!!!!
Chapter 9: Meanwhile at the Old Battlefield
Aqua's body was still laying on the hard, deserted ground, the wind blowing. The face of his lifeless body was calming, eyes and mouth closed in a calm way, but his hands were curled up into fists fro his anger after his death. His water powers spirit was turned into Shade when he got his new look and new powers, but left Aqua, if he were to return, powerless. Yet, when Shade got his new look, the smal bit of life of evil Shin Quaza had given him when he turned evil was released from him and floating over Aqua. The little spirit entered Aqua's body as he got up, eye's closed, fists uncurled, and slowly opened his eyes half-way, then filling them with anger.
Meanwhile, in the town from the distance, Josh the elf was practicing his wind powers and flying around, laughing merrily with his other elven brothers and sisters.
"So, what was Shade like? How did he survive the huge fight with the menacing Aqua?" One of Josh's brother's asked.
"Well, Jake helped a lot, for Shade had a heart of pure, well, almost pure, heart against pure, well, almost again pure, evil. They were both able to survive in the end, but super weak and ending up for them both to die in mere minutes. So, with a one time limited power Jake got, he transfered Aqua's last bit of life, along with his water powers, into Shade, making him live again, giving him a new look, and giving him water powers." Josh explained in a long speech. His brothers and sisters laughed with glee that Josh was able to be there at the fight.
Shade started to glow ice in both of his hands and shot them at people, freezing them. Then Jake breathed fire to melt the ice and hurt the Huntsclan people, and then Shade controlled the water to smack them into the electric barrier. Spud ran up to Huntsdad's new associate and bit him in the arm and shoved him off, laughing.
"Yo dat's right Spud! You da man!" Trixie said, high-fiving him.
"We're almost done here!" Florene announced, happy. The barrier was almost gone as most of the Huntsclan members had ran off. All that was left were Huntsdad, his newest associate, and 5 other Huntsclan members, one evil person for the good guys.
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Post by Chaos on Jul 14, 2006 3:59:24 GMT -5
Ok, I'm gonna try this ONE more time. JUST ONE!!!! You evil people and not reading my story, it's like you hate me! Chapter 10: Sweet Taste of Victory or Defeat? "Aiya!" Florence yelled, charging at Huntsdad and kicking him in the stomach and then starting to punch him multiple times. Huntsdad swatted her into a wall with his arm swining over. Florence opened her eyes, but kept them hidden from sight slightly and pushed quickly of the the wall, diving into Huntsdad from the air, landing on top of him. She smiled and did a thumbs up, getting off of Huntsdad and running out of the Huntsclan's foce field that was almost dead. Gramps was going up against a Huntsclan member and swatted his tail into the person's face as he got punched back, but Gramps just flew back into the air and created a dragon dopleganger that punched the person in the back continueously while Gramps did the same to his stomach. Trixie noticed she was fighting another Huntsgirl (Like, another Huntsclan member, but a girl). "Eww! That outfit is so tacky!" The Huntsgirl groaned. Trixie just glared at the Huntsgirl in anger and grabbed her by the collar and threw her on the ground, jumping on her while she was on the ground. "No one calls Trixie Cassa Dia Donna Prima tacky!" Trixie screamed, eventually getting off of the Huntsgirl. Spud was just looking at Trixie oddly as she was attacking the Huntsgirl. He eventually turned back to his enemy and ran over, getting knocked back a little. Spud looked around and gasped, pointing into the sky. The Huntsboy quickly looked up as Spud just kicked him in the shin and threw him off by the shoulders. Shade, Fu, and Jake were the only one's left with Huntsclan members as they turned back in as triangle. "So... now what?" Fu asked. Shade just kinda shrugged, but he pulledout a water bottle and opened it quickly. "NO, Shade, now's not a time for a drink!" Jake yelled at Shade. He just looked at Jake oddly for a moment and then looked back to Huntsdad's new assosiate, throwing the water up and changing it into the form of a sword as he slowly froze it. He laughed alittle as he started to attack the person, and after he got hit a couple of times, Shade melted the ice and whiped te Huntsclan person across the face with the water and froze his legs to the floor. Jake easily used a tail whip on the Huntsclan member's legs to send him tripping and lit his but on fire, sending him running off. Fu Dog was able to walk close to his Huntsboy and he got knowcked out by Fu's stentch. "HHEEYYY!!! I don't smell that bad!" Fu yelled. So, the Huntsclan had been defeated n this battle as they all went back to New York through the Academy's portal... but this victory could lead to their largest loss later on.....
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Post by redemption on Jul 14, 2006 8:05:06 GMT -5
I shall review this story for the simple fact that I have fallen madly in love with your characters despite being quite confused at first. I'm going to have to see if I can hunt down some of your other fics to get a better idea of Florence and Shade, but I really like this. Update soon!
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Post by Chaos on Jul 14, 2006 13:35:47 GMT -5
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Post by kashi on Jul 14, 2006 15:05:20 GMT -5
Sorry, just got to read the last three chapters. It's a great story Chaos! ^_^ I loved the "Ring Around the Dragon" references in the last one. Lol. "Trixie Cassa Dia Donna Prima" ^_^ Keep it up!
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Post by Chaos on Jul 15, 2006 1:15:28 GMT -5
Hee hee, thanks. I just wanted to say that. ^^ So, this is the last chapter, then I'll inch my way on working with my next fan-fic. Thanks for actually replying now. ^^
Chapter 11: Next Mission Recieved
"Phew! I am so glad that you have come back!" Shade said to Florence, hugging her and untying the bandana on her arm that was his. Florence jysr giggled and hugged him back. After they stopped hugging, Trixie and Spud just looked at each other, smiling with hope in their eyes. Jake leaned back in his chair and sighed a bit, thinking of Rose. Fu and Gramps were in the back, just relaxing a bit.
"Fu... Are you positive that you bathed before we came heer? And how many times?" Gramos asked Fu, sniffing the air and pinching his nose.
"Yes, and once!" Fu yelled, pulling out a newspaper and reading it. He scoffed a little, muttering, "How many times have you bathed?... Pfft..." Then rolled his eyes.
"Hey, I've got a message for you." The delivery pixie said, pulling out a message and tearing it. The pixie left the back of the shop and left without anyone else noticing. Gramps was listening to what the person in the message was saying and quickly got up. Fu also got up as they went past the curtain into the main room.
"We have a new mission, in a distant land, so pack your bags." Gramps announced. They all stopped with the pure joy and happiness and looked serious, all nodding simultaniously.
"So, we shall follow Team Dragon and bring them down, able to destroy them." Aqua said to his newest accomplice, who were inside a building. The girl accomplice wore a long sleeved sweater that was baggy and way to big for her in the color of red. Her name was Saphire and she wore caprees with her pink shoes. Saphire grinned evily with her saphire colored eyes and neck long, curly, black hair. Next to her was a tied up Josh the elf with tape over his mouth. Aqua and Saph started to laugh and turned dragon, grabbing tied up Josh with them.
THE END!!!!
BTW: Saph's dragon form is like a saphire color and a Chineese dragon, but with six wings. Two near her arms, two on the bottom of her back, and the final pair in between both. Her claws were pink and under her wings was a dark blue color.
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