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Post by mehdi5 on Oct 10, 2007 13:21:29 GMT -5
Here's my new Fanfic it takes place 4 years after Hong Kong Longs Rated: R for intense fighting sequences and intense horror scenes.
Extinction: Chapter One It was a dark and rainy day at Dragon Summit as every dragon in the world entered the main conference hall of the island. "Welcome dragons of the world" greeted one of the council members. As Jake stood somewhere in the crowd he couldn´t help remembering the horrible events of the past week.
Flashback Jake as usual was fighting off magical creatures. But then 5 loud roars wer´e heard. The magical creatures and Jake stopped fighting as suddenly a bright light could be seen appearing. "Say what?" Jake said but then the sky got darker and it started raining. But then Jake saw a huge creature appear in the light. Jake wasn't moving, but then it happened. A huge dragon like creature with 3 heads came from the light. "Run for your life" Jake yelled. Jake flew away as soon as he could. But Jake then stopped and mid air and looked back at the sea. "What the?" Jake said. A huge wave came from the ocean. People on the streets tried to escape, some made it, some didn't. Jake flew as fast as he could the other way but from that direction a huge flame of fire was shot. Jake then made a turn to the other direction. Jake got to a street where he was temporarily safe but as he looked around it seemed not only water and fire wer'e the elements destroying the city. The street was covered with sand and ice. "What's going on?" He said. Luckily this was the street where Lao Shi's shop was located. As he stood in front of the shop he saw it was filled with sand and ice and the front part was burned down. Jake removed bricks and wood that wer'e in front of the doorway to the back. To his horror he saw his grandfather under a pile of rocks and wood. "Gramps" jake yelled. He got Lao Shi out of the pile. "Gramps, are you okay?" He asked Lao Shi. "Jake is that you?" Lao Shi replied. "I'm here gramps, please don't die" Jake said with tears in his eyes. "Young dragon, my time has come, can you promise me something?" Lao Shi asked. "Yes gramps" Jake said with even more tears in his eyes than first. "Protect your friends and family and don't ever leave anybody behind." "I will gramps, i will." Jake said back. "Farewell young dragon, you have made me proud as a dragon." wer'e Lao Shi's last words. Jake didn't say anything, he just couldn't believe he was dead, the dragon that teached Jake everything he knew. "It's time to keep my promise." Jake said with anger in his voice. When Jake arrived at his home he saw his family was still alive and so was Fu. In the 6 days after that things only became worse. But he was happy his friends and they're family's wer'e still alive. End of Flashback
"We have declared a state of emergency, our species and those around us are under attack by a force with power none of us can defeat, now if you all can step of the dragon symbol on the floor." The man said. Everybody stepped off the round dragon symboll as a round platform rose up from the ground. "Now can Jake Long please step forward?" the councilor said. Jake stepped forward with a confused look on his face. "Jake Long, can you tell us more about the attack that destroyed New York City?" The council member asked. "Ehmm sure" Jake said. "Well it all started exactly one week ago, well i can't exactly describe it it all happened so fast it was like hurricane the worst hurricane in the world 1 million times worse." Jake said. "At what time did the attack begin?" He asked. "If i remember right 3:35pm" He answered. "Do you have more information, Jake Long?" He asked. "Well he used fire, water, sand and ice in the attack and there was a bright light before the attack" Jake said.
30 Minutes Later...
"The Council has decided, we are going underground till this matter is solved, all dragons must go to the Underground base under Chicago, no exceptions" The Councilor Said. Jake realised this creature could mean the end of all, but he couldn't forgive himself for leaving Rose at New York. "Everyone must depart inmediatly to the base" the councilor said as final words. Everyone left Dragon Summit that same hour and so did Jake and his family.
To Be Continued...
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Post by mehdi5 on Nov 25, 2007 7:56:41 GMT -5
Sorry for the lack of updates i don't have much free time lately. Extinction: Chapter Two In the ruins of what use to be the city of New York stood 10 people, not just any people but the feared dragon hunter called the Dragon Slayers of Kardas. This group of dragonslayers was formed by 10 dragons that wer'e banned from the magical world and taken away they're powers by the Dragon Council 20 years ago. That was done bu the council because of the crimes these people commited to the magical world. They wer'e traitors, they worked for the Kardas Dragon and killed every dragon when they got a chance, secretly of course. These ten people are named: Tom Draconus(Age 29, Ice Dragon, North-America) Sarah Walker(Age 19, Wind Dragon, North America) Ryan Stevenson(Age 32, Fire Dragon, England) Drake Myers(Age 25, Water Dragon, North Africa) Mya Thomas(Age 26, Magma Dragon, North America) Ali Draconus(Age 23, Sand Dragon, Morocco) Jessica Thomas(Age 18, Serpent Dragon, Australia) Harold Kingston(Age 29, Earth Dragon, Russia) Tom Ryan(Age 20, Fire Dragon, France) Sean Towers(Age 21, Serpent Dragon, North America) After they wer'e taken their powers they dissapeared, to never be seen again, at least the magical world thinks that. "What now?" Sarah said. "We must have patience, the dragons jave made departure to the secret base underneath the city of Chicago." Drake commented. "How do we get in, Most of the guards will inmediatly recognize us if we try to get close." Ali said to Drake. "Who says they'll recognize us, it's been fifteen years Ali, a lot has changed in this years." Drake said with a concerned tone. "What are you saying? that they'll open the gates and welcome us with open arms? if that's the case your brain has seriously been damaged these past years" Jessica said. "That's not what i meant. A few years ago when the Dark Dragon attacked the American Dragon and made him evil he made a doppelganger of Jake and his future son. Jake's doppleganger was reabsorbed but the one of his future son wasn't, he could be the key to our victory." Drake said. Sarah walked to a nearby bench that wasn't destroyed and sat on it. "I don't think we have a chance Drake, without our powers and the Kardas force we are doomed" She said. "Sarah listen to me, Mehdi's doppleganger has the ucrono hourglass, we can travel to the future and capture the future Mehdi at 19 where he has his Kardas powers and we can use them to destroy the dragons." Drake explained. "How are we going to find him?" Harold asked. "The gatekeeper of the hourglass will know, Mehdi's doppleganger has quite a reputation in the magical underground." He said. Some time later in Chicago... "We can survive this, right?" Jake asked Fu. "I don't know kid, there is no dragon or other magical creature that can stop this." Fu replied. "Fu, who is doing this?" Jake asked with tears in his eyes. "Kid, i swore to gramps i would never tell you this" He said. Jake hit Fu in the face. "Tell me Fu, now!" He said with hate. "This is the work of Magmus Kardas." he said. "What is Magmus Kardas?" Jake asked. "The first Kardas had two sons, the Dark Dragon and the Magmas Kartesian. Before he was destroyed Kardas put a spell on the Dark Dragon and Magmas Kartesian so that 20 years after he died the Dark Dragon and Magmas Kartesian would get the power of Kardas and create a bigger and more powerful dragon names The Magmus Kardas." Said Fu. "But i thougt the Dark Dragon was hundreds of years old." Jake said with a confused voice. "I can explain that, that happened thanks to the hourglass and the Dark Dragon was sent to the past but the hourglass broke when he arrived." Fu explained. "I'm starting to get a headache from all this." He commented.
At a secret location...
The group of 10 people walked towards the gatekeeper. "Who is there?" The Gatekeeper asked. "Don't you remember us Oxtorn, us the Dragonslayers of Kardas" Ali said. "Welcome back my friends, what is it you seek in the magical underworld?" He asked. "We are looking for a Yang Doppleganger named Mehdi." Mia said. "Haven't seen him in a long time, you might find him at the airportterminal of Chicago, he is more active in the Magical Underworld in Chicago." Oxtorn said.
To Be Continued...
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Post by YFWE on Nov 26, 2007 22:02:14 GMT -5
Not bad. There is room for improvement, but the potential is there. I would suggest that you try and separate your paragraphs better to make it easier to read and give it a bit more professional look, although this is completely up to you.
Either way, though, the premises behind the story sound good. Update soon, if you can. =]
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Post by mehdi5 on Nov 27, 2007 16:50:06 GMT -5
Here's the third chapter. Exctinction: Chapter Three
"When will the magical world finally find peace" Jake asked himself while sitting on a bench in Chicago. "I guess the magical world isn't mean the ove peace."
"That isn't up to the world Jake, there's just someone that has to be there to make a difference" said Jake's father. "I haven't known about the magical world for that long but Jake, peace isn't just there, it is made by the ones that fight for it and protect it with they're lives."
"I guess your right but i don't think there's any chance of restoring peace in the magical world, there's global panic, it's a miracle the normal mortals haven't found out about our world, it's just i don't know what to do dad i can't do anything to stop this." Jake told his father with a sad face.
"Listen Jake it's not up to me to say this but i will, you have power inside you but you just don't believe in that one person can make a difference, even if he or she is weaker than the enemy, but that is not true it doesn't matter if you have power or not it matters that you believe in yourself."
Just then Jake started to have major thoughts, did he believe he could make a difference or was the faith of the world set and was the magical and human world set to be destroyed. But then he remembered a thing his grandfather said to him once "There's a hero inside everyone of us, we just need to believe in ourselves and never give up hope." Jake felt worried about his friends and Rose, how could he have left them without looking for them and making sure they're alright.
Somewhere in the backstreets of the magical underworld of Chicago...
The 10 people walked into a bar somewhere in the middle of the busy street. Inside they walked up to a teenage boy about 15 years old with black hair, green eyes, black jacket with white shirt and brown trousers with black Nike shoes. "What do you want?" Asked the person.
"I know who you are Micheal, or should i say Mehdi, we have a deal for you that you can't refuse." Drake said while ordering a drink at the bar. "WIll you take it." Mia said.
"Depends on what the deal is about, and hurry up i have a very busy sqedual as one of the crime lords of the streets." Mehdi's doppleganger said with an evil voice. But at the same time Mia noticed the red fire like looks in the eyes of Mehdi.
"You will go with us to the future to get the 19 year old Mehdi to the past and restore our powers so we can ressurect Kardas and take over the world." Mia said but it didn't look like Mehdi's doppleganger was really liking the plan.
"Nice plan but there's one problem, why should i help you take over the world and stuff while there's nothing in it for me, and what is stopping me from destroying you right now right on this very spot." he said with a threatening voice that even scared Mia and Drake a bit.
"We know what kills you Mehdi, we know one of the weaknesses of a Kardas doppleganger, and we know you have almost none of the Kardas powers so you are no more threat to us than a normal stupid dragon." they said without being afraid.
"Well your right there but i can still beat you without even lifting a finger, but i guess i will take the deal, but there's one problem we will first have to find two objects, the Ucrono Hourglass and the sword of Symphonaria."
"Why do we have to find the sword?" the two dragonhunters said.
"Without the sword we can't go to the future because when i used it last time the timebreaker was destroyed and we have to use the power source of the sword to make a new one, that us our first priority." He said.
"Agreed, Mia will help you to the find the sword while the rest goes to find the hourglass."
"Agreed" said Mehdi.
Somewhere in a far future...
"Yet again our future is changing, i'm curious of what happened this time." Mehdi said to himself. But this was not a minor change the world was changing into a destroyed pile of ruins.
"Mehdi, i'm worried what if this time it's lethal, we don't know what is going to happen to the world" Mellissa said with a scared voice.
To Be Continued
The realt action scenes and stuff won't be featured till chapter 5 the first few chapters are like telling the story of the beginning not yet showing the real action. Comments and ideas are always appreciated.
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Post by mehdi5 on Dec 12, 2007 14:59:02 GMT -5
Here's the next chapter. Extinction: Chapter Four Jake was on the Internet on a computer at the secret hiding place of the Dragon Order searching for news about New York but then he suddenly saw a picture of memorials of various people but to his horror he saw something he could never forgive himself for.
Rose Hunter 1993 - 2011 Arthur Spudinski 1993 - 2011 Trixie Carter 1993 - 2011
"It's all my fault" he said with a voice filled with anger. "I should have protected them, i shouldn't have left them to they're faith." But then he heard a loud sound from next door. He ran out of the door and saw some people on the floor next to a destroyed wall.
"Mom, dad." He yelled. his parents we're heavily hurt and had to be moved to the Chicago Hospital.
5 hours later...
Jake returned from the hospital, his parents we're still alive but they weren't sure how much time they had left. He suddenly had an idea, he wasn't sure if it would work but it was worth a shot.
He grabbed his dreamcharm and went to sleep. "Now to find that door." Jake walked into an old and dark hallway in the dreamworld, Rose told him once that the world of death lies beyond these doors, but only the pure hearted can go through these doors. Jake wasn't exactly the perfect person but his heart was pure enough to go through. But then he realized Rose also said that there is no guarantee of returning.
He walked to Lao Shi's door and entered and saw his grandfather.
"Welcome grandson, i haven't seen you in a long time." Lao Shi said.
"I need your help gramps, i don't know what to do I'm losing everyone i care about, i feel so helpless." Jake said.
"Death isn't the end grandson just look at this place, people live beyond death." He said.
"You don't even know what I'm talking about, you don't understand, you've never understood and you never will." Jake said angry.
"You think i don't but you are the one that doesn't understand Jake, you've always thought you know everything about life." Lao Shi said with an angry voice like he never used before.
"I guess i have no business here, i shouldn't have come." Jake walked out of the door.
"The young one doesn't understand what is happening, this was just the beginning."
Several hours later in East Chicago...
"So what got you in the crime business?" Mia asked.
"Well there's not much an evil doppelganger can do in the past, why do you ask?" Mehdi's doppleganger said.
"Can't a girl be curious?" Mia said.
"You ask many things, but you don't ask about your past, or should i say future." He said with this time a not so evil voice.
"What are you talking about?" she asked concerned.
"This is not the right time Mia, and i don't have all the information you need, you will have to ask my future self for those answers, I'm sorry." He said.
"Guess your not so evil as everyone thinks." She said with a playful voice.
"Mia, my time has almost ran out, I'm just a doppleganger, i only have a limited lifetime and I'm rethinking my actions, maybe i should have just returned to the future." He said.
"Micheal, i mean Mehdi, if you could fix your actions would you do it?"
"I'd give everything for a second chance, but you don't understand Mia there is no hope left for me."
To Be Continued... Sorry this chapter wasn't so long i am looking for more inspiration but i just don't have so many inspiration at the moment.
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Post by mehdi5 on Feb 27, 2008 8:16:30 GMT -5
Sorry i haven't updated in a while. Extinction: Chapter Five
For the next couple of days Jake hadn't talked to anyone, nor had anyone seen him. he was in his room for 5 days since his parents had died. He could still hear the last things his parents said to him before they died.
Flashback
"Jake, take care of your sister for me" His father said with a weak voice.
"But dad, what do i have to do, even gramps is gone, i have nobody to help me." Jake said with tears in his eyes."
"Your wrong Jake, as long as your heart is in the right place there will always be help from the people who love you." His mom said.
But then his hopes wer'e lost, his friends, parents and grandfather had passed away, who could he go to for guidance.
He knew he wasn't ready.
End Flashback.
The past 1 and a half weeks there wer'e no attacks on site.
"Wait i have an idea" Jake suddenly said. "Hey Fu, do you know where our family in China lives?" Jake shouted.
Fu walked in and said "Yeah i do, always keep a map to the places with me in case of emergency, but you are't suggesting that we?" Fu said nervously.
"I'm afraid so Fu" Jake said, he thought he had finally gotten some hope, maybe there was someone that could help him fight this.
"Fu, do we still have my battle suit?" Jake asked to fu.
""Yeah managed to save all the important stuff, but why can't you just use your dragon form?" Fu asked.
"Too risky, gramps told me that the most powerful creatures like this have a kind of anti-dragon mechanism in some cases." Jake said.
Jake couldn't risk using his dragon powers so they had to take the old-fashioned way to travel to Hong Kong, by plane.
Some time later in Hong Kong......
Jake and Fu walked up to an old-fashioned styled house that looked like it had been abandoned for some time.
Jake knocked on the door to see an old chinese man open the door a minute later.
"Who are you and what are you doing here?" The man said.
"Are you Zhai Ming?" Jake asked the old man.
"Yes that's me, who are you?" The man asked.
"I'm Jake Long, the grandson of Lao Shi." Jake said.
"Jake, hey i almost didn't recognize ya, so you've gotten big, how are your parents and my good old brother Lao Shi?" He asked.
"Well i'm sorry to say but they died some time ago." Jake said with a miserable tone in his voice.
"I am sorry to hear that Jake, any news on how to stop the beast?" Zhai Ming asked.
"Not really, more cities are getting hit every day and week." He said.
Suddenly Jake felt a huge pain in his arm and he fell on the ground.
"Jake!" said Fu and Zhai Ming.
Jake was knocked out but for some reason his left arm was his dragon claw.
Some hours later...
"Where am i?" Jake asked himself.
"Don't worry Jake your safe, seems it has already taken you over." Zhai Ming said.
"Taken over by what?" He asked.
"Your true dragon instinct, although we dragons are protectors now that doesn't mean we always wer'e protectors. A long time ago dragons couldn't even turn into a human form. They wer'e no more than predators, born killers. But later on evolution came that created dragon/human hybrids. But they didn't immediatly turn into protectors, at the time dragons we're exactly the opposite of that. Dragons had the destruction of the humans as they're goal but that ended when some of they're most powerful dragons betrayed them. Your true dragon instinct is what had driven the first dragons and gave them they're beast like abilities and behavior. Some say that part has been passed on to dragons after that and that every dragon has it in they're DNA but only a few know how to use it. Some say it's trigered by anger. Zhai Ming said.
To be continued...
End of 5th Chapter.
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