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Post by redemption on Jul 13, 2006 16:10:03 GMT -5
Thought I'd stop by and check this out, as you've been kind enough to leave comments for my story, and all I can say is... whoa. I'm in love. ;D
Update soon!
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 17, 2006 22:54:57 GMT -5
Thanx Go Jake and Redemption! ;D
Chapter 7 Nightmare No matter how hard Jake fought for Rose to live the council wouldn’t allow anything of the sort. They just kept telling Jake that even though she let him go once it was because she was confused. They told him being born with that birthmark meant that person was born to kill. Jake couldn’t believe they still thought this way even after the heart breaking story Rose had told.
It was 10:00PM and Rose was starving. They hadn’t feed her a thing since she was captured. She was used to hunger given that she ate grass and sticks when she was running from the Huntsclan. She figured the wouldn’t bother feeding her since she was going to die in a few days.
Still she tried to fall asleep ignoring her rumbling stomach. She fell asleep eventually into a deep sleep.
It was dark, cold and damp outside, in the middle of the woods. Rose was running through it as fast as she could, with the small branches of the trees scraping across her face. She came to a stop when she saw the American Dragon, Jake, and the Huntsmaster, her Uncle, fighting viciously. Both of them had bloody cuts but it didn’t seem to faze either of them. Rose tried to run over to help Jake but was unexpectedly shot in the leg by her Uncle’s huntstaff. She fell down like a ton of bricks. Jake watched her fall and looked at her for a moment to she if she was okay. Unfortunately the Huntsmaster caught him off guard and shot a net out of his huntstaff.
“Jake no!” screamed Rose.
Captured, Jake watched frightened as the Huntsman walked over to him.
“Say goodbye dragon” he yelled as powering up his huntstaff about to stab it right into Jake’s heart.
Rose bolted awake, sweating and on the floor. The sun had just started to rise. She stood up, shaking; the dream had really scared her and it seemed so real.
“Rose are you okay?” a familiar voice.
Rose was so surprised that she fell backwards.
“Never been better” she murmured sarcastically, rubbing the bump on her head.
“I just came to try to get you out of here” Jake tugged and pulled at the door and nothing happened.
“Jake it’s no use, these cells are made out of unicorn horn so that no one can’t escape, not even a dragon.”
Jake transformed into a human sadly, “I guess I’ll be here to keep you company then.”
Jake and Rose talked for hours, sharing stories and talking about random things. It was until Grandpa came they finally stopped talking.
“Jake it is quite late it is time for you to go to bed,” said Grandpa looking at the faces of the saddened teenagers, “As for you Rose, I believe you truly changed and it is upsetting that you have this terrible fate.”
Jake looked devastated at Grandpa. He realized these where his last moments to speak with Rose, for the next day he would have to kill her.
“Jake, you have 5 minutes. I will be waiting for you outside the prison. If you are not back by then I will come and get you.” Grandpa said turning around and leaving.
They each rested their heads on the cells bars and streached their lips just enough for a soft kiss. They both knew this was going to be their last but they enjoyed every second of it. Jake broke it apart and looked at the floor. He left without saying another word.
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Post by gojake on Jul 19, 2006 8:32:44 GMT -5
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Post by charles finley. on Jul 20, 2006 1:01:47 GMT -5
Nice! I like it! Update soons!
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Post by navpilot1 on Jul 20, 2006 1:02:51 GMT -5
wow........i mean wow.......i read the first part for like 5 mins and i'm already obsessed with it lollll..well update soon!!!
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Post by redemption on Jul 20, 2006 21:11:35 GMT -5
AAAAH! You can't just end it there! That's the worst cliffhanger ever!!
I'm begging you, update soon! I'm dying here!
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Post by Atlanta Dragon on Jul 20, 2006 22:38:39 GMT -5
you like pulling our strings dont you?
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Post by superdoglac on Jul 21, 2006 13:18:44 GMT -5
you like pulling our strings dont you? Yes I do! Anyways here it is. Chapter 8 Helpless Rose didn’t sleep at all that night. She wasn’t about to sleep away the last few hours of her life. She sat in her cell staring at the wall; All of a sudden it sank in, she was going to die. She started to cry, with salty tears coming out of her ocean blue eyes. She cried for countless hours until she stopped and took a deep breath. Rose took her hair out of the mangled braid and used some of the water she was given to wipe the blood, tears and mud off her face. She didn’t want to die as Huntsgirl; she wanted to die as Rose. Rose was looking at the beautiful sunrise and some how it made her calm. The guards came a few hours later with the chains. She was led outside back to the same place she was questioned a few days before. Jake was already there looking quite sad. No one would blame him. He was about to kill the one girl he truly loved. Rose was chained against the chair by her neck, helpless. The councilors and Grandpa had walked over and she assumed that they were there as witnesses. Jake walked extremely slowly staring at the ground. Everything was quiet as Jake morphed into his dragon form; he took a deep breath and stared at Rose’s face for the last time. He looked at his claws; in the reflection it showed Rose’s face again but this time her eyes where squeezed shut, bracing herself for what was about to happen. Jake stretched his arm back about to swipe, but he was stopped dead in his track by a loud belch. All of a sudden an orange dragon flew bye, throwing smoke bombs and breathing fire down so no one could see a thing. The next thing Rose knew was that her chair was picked up and she went soaring into the sky. The first thing she heard was “Hey home girl! What’s crackilatin?” She looked up to see Trixie and Spud in a dragon costume that seemed to make them fly. Rose looked up, dumbfounded. “Yeah,” Spud said, “Fu put some magical stuff on this costume so when we went in it we would have dragon powers.” They landed at the magical elevator where Fu was waiting. “Kids hurry up! We need to get out of here!” The elevator opened and there was Edgar. “Where do you think your going with, her?” Edgar said pointing at Rose, “I’m going to report you!” “Ten bucks and you didn’t see anything” said Fu showing him a ten dollar bill. “Okay,” muttered Edgar eagerly snatching the money. During the short ride no one said a word. They didn’t want to say anything important in front of Edgar because they didn’t fully trust him. They ran quickly through New York to get to Grandpa’s shop. Everyone was staring at two people dressed as a dragon carrying another person chained to a chair. “Stupid teenagers,” an old man mumbled. To all those people that didn’t want me to kill Rose off, rejoice. ;D To those evil people that wanted me to do so TO BAD ! I’m going to have one or two more chapters to get everything settled. Didn’t see that coming did ya!
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Post by navpilot1 on Jul 21, 2006 13:30:13 GMT -5
yay an update!! ::celebrates and dances around:: yay rose isn't dead!! great so far!! keep it up! ;D
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Post by redemption on Jul 21, 2006 20:11:43 GMT -5
I shall rejoice now! ;D
Awesome that Rose is alive, but methinks that isn't the end of her problems, is it?
Update soon, please!
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Post by Atlanta Dragon on Jul 21, 2006 20:23:05 GMT -5
knew rose was to be rescued but couldnt guess how
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Post by gojake on Jul 31, 2006 13:15:37 GMT -5
Yes, something is definately in store for rose
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Post by superdoglac on Sept 5, 2006 11:44:28 GMT -5
They reached the shop and quickly got inside quickly and then everything was focused on Rose. She was injured, tired, and very hungry. Rose, who was still chained to her chair, was helped by Fu who put magical powder on the chains which made them disintegrate. She collapsed on the ground, being weak from not having food.
Trixie walked over with a meatball sub and handed to the famished Rose, “I found this on the counter.”
“That was mine,” Fu grumbled.
Rose grabbed it eagerly and ate the whole thing in about a minute.
She looked up at Trixie, Spud and Fu.
“Thank you,” she screamed giving them all a bear hug.
“It fine kid, it was no problem,” Fu said looking at all of his potions.
He picked up purplish liquid.
“Here kid, rub this on all of your cuts and bruises. But first I think you should take a shower cause no offence you is stanky.”
Rose suddenly released how filthy she was. Her hair was a tangled mess, she had dried blood all over her Huntsgirl outfit, caked mud was everywhere, and she hadn’t showered in three weeks. A hot shower sounded very necessary. Trixie led Rose to bathroom and handed her a bag filled with different clothing, and toiletries. “Thanks Trixie” Rose said taking the bag and entering the bathroom. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Rose exited the bathroom feeling nice and fresh. Her scares where gone, her hair was groomed and she didn’t smell like a dead animal. She walked into the backroom where Trixie and Spud where sitting around apparently board out of their minds.
“Where’s Fu” Rose asked looking around.
“He’s out front waiting for Jake and Gramps to come back. Spud replied. BUT WHAT IF THAT’S WHAT HE WANTS US TO THINK”
Trixie sighed and walked over to the refrigerator.
“Yo Rose want anything” said Trix
“Water please,” she said.
Trixie walked back with a two soda’s and a bottle of water. Trixie chugged her soda quickly and let out a loud belch.
“Pathetic” Rose mumbled
“What did you say?” Trix said surprised.
“Pathetic, and this is why. BUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUURP”
Of course that was the moment Jake walked in. He was surprised by two things. One, Rose was alive and standing right in front of him, and two that was the first time anyone had belched louder than Trixie.
Rose saw Jake and tackle-hugged him.
“Your alive, your alive, your alive” Jake kept repeating, hugging back.
Trixie just stood there mouth opened. She had been defeated.
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Rose was going to live at Grandpa’s shop in the spare room. Apparently the Dragon Council assumes Rose is dead, since it was an unknown dragon, and it acted extremely violent. The future for Jake and Rose actually began to look bright. Unfortunately, No one noticed the figure, spying from the window.
Running of he mumbled, “Thorn, soon your life will be mine, and also the one of your dragon friend.”
The End
Okay, I know you all are saying, ‘Wow it took you one and a half months to write one stupid chapter’ Normally I would come up with a good excuse but to be honest I’ve been lazy XD. Don’t worry, there is gonna be a sequel but I haven’t thought of a good name for it yet. Thank you everyone who reviewed and made my fic such a success ;D
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Young Warrior Dragon
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Post by dreamcatcher on Sept 5, 2006 11:56:08 GMT -5
YAY SEQUALS!!!!
great story
please get the sequal up soon!!!
BUUUURRRPPP excuse me XD
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Post by superdoglac on Sept 5, 2006 12:11:01 GMT -5
Thanks XD
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