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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 13, 2006 1:16:22 GMT -5
The names are not necessary to be original, just like you give the Imperial-class Star Destroyer as Huntsclan-class. Then the Interior Blockade Runner to replace the Tantive IV Corellian Corvette. Not to worry, I played "Star Wars : Empire at War" before, and I know what I can give you. I do have my Teen Titans version of Star Wars hosted here, americandragon.proboards60.com/index.cgi?board=OtherFF&action=display&thread=1152609477 . And you can see the difference for the character names, except the author said that both original and prequel trilogy will not be related to each other. For example : Robin plays as Luke Skywalker in the Original (Name as Rob Solowalker), and Anakin Skywalker in the Prequel (Robin Skywalker). Starfire plays as Leia Organa in the Original (Starleia), and Padme Amidala in the Prequel (Starme). Well, as for your fiction, it's your fiction, so the ADJL names can be used, it's not necessary to use back the Star Wars names, unless it's necessary or if you have no choice.
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Post by gojake on Jul 13, 2006 13:51:22 GMT -5
ok I under stand now.....
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 13, 2006 13:58:46 GMT -5
You may continue then, we'll be waiting for more.
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Post by gojake on Jul 18, 2006 21:51:10 GMT -5
Chapter 3: Bought! The robots are marched off towards a small and lonely homestead, from which two men emerge. One, Jake Longwalker, is called off by a female voice. The other, Owen Lars, continues off towards the scavengers. Aunt Beru: Jake! Jake! Jake: Yeah? Beru: Remind uncle that if he gets a translator, be sure it speaks Bocce!! Jake: Doesn't look like we have much of a choice, but I'll remind him. Jake rushes off towards Uncle Owen. Owen: (to pixie) Yeah yeah, show me what you got. Owen: (to Threepio) You! I expect you're designed for protocol and etiquette. Threepio: Protocol? It's my primary function, sir. Owen: I have no need for a protocol droid. Threepio: Of course you don't sir, that's why - Owen: What I need is a droid that understands the language of vaporators. Threepio: Sir, my primary job was to program binary load lifters, very similar to your vaporators. Owen: Ok, Shaddap, (to pixie) I'll take this one and the red astrodroid. Pixie: Jibberjabbergobbledygook. Owen: (to Jake) I want you to take these two and clean 'em up. Jake: But I was going to Toshce station to pick up some power converters. Owen: You can waste time later. Jake: Fine. Jake takes the two droids to the garage, but the red astrobot catches fire! Jake: Uncle Owen! Owen: Yeah? Jake: This one has a bad motivator! Look! Owen: (to pixie): hey, what you tryin' to push on us? Threepio: If I may venture my opinion, that blue astrodroid (pointing to Artoo) is in perfect condition, a real bargain! Jake: Uncle Owen, what about that one? Owen: (to pixie) We'll take that one. Little does Jake know, these droids will change his life, forever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 19, 2006 3:09:13 GMT -5
Ahh, the Jawa conversation, I kind of like it. Especially when Luke chooses R2.
Luke : Uncle Owen, what about that one? Owen : About that blue one, we'll take that one.
Not a problem, especially I love Jawas, they're cute.
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Post by gojake on Jul 19, 2006 9:49:16 GMT -5
Yeah, unfortunately, Lucas had to pull the Ewoks in Return of the Jedi, wich were inspired by Jawas. Any ways, here's chapter 4. Oh, and Princess Leia is a typo, its Princess Hayleia.(inspired from Hayley) And this chapter is somewhat different from the movie by means of dialouge, however events are the same (criticism will be okay, the dialouge is original for the most part LOL)
Artoo runs away... (cue beethoven's symphonies 0_0)
Garage, Lars homestead.
Threepio gets lowered into a tub filled with oil
Threepio: Ah, this oil bath feels so good. So good for my joints.
Meanwhile, Jake is playing with a iron toy of a Lambda-Hunter class shuttle.
Threepio: I've got such a bad case of dust contamination.
Jake: This is whack yo! Biggs is right, I'm never gonna get off this pile of crap of a planet.
Threepio: Can be of help here?
Jake: Whack no, unless you can change time or speed up the whacked up harvest or teleport me off this d*mn rock they call a planet.
Artoo: Beeeeeeeeeeeeeepbeep
Threepio: Sorry, sir, I don't know that much about these things, I'm only a protocol droid. Actually, after all we've been through, I'm surprised we're in good condition as we are. What with the Rebellion and all.
Jake: (suddenly intrested) You know of the rebellion against the Huntsclan Empire?
Threepio: That's how we got to this planet, if you take my meaning.
Threepio: Actually, I'm just an interpreter and not very good at making stories intresting.
Jake uses a wrench on artoo.
Jake: Well, my little friend, you have something stuck in here real good were you on some whack starcruiser here or somethin-
Jake falls back as a HoloNet projection of a beautiful young woman, the Princess Hayleia, Leia for short, is projected onto the dusty floor of the garage.
Hayleia: Help me, Lao-wan Kenobi, you're my only hope.
Jake: Who is she? She's beautiful!
Hayleia: (repeats previous line)
Jake: What is it, though?
Artoo: BleepdeBleep.
Threepio: He says it's some malfunction, a mix of all the recordings with a random woman put out saying the message.
Artoo: Bleepdebeeeeeeeep!!
Threepio: He say's it's a private message for Lobi wan Shinobi, a resedent of these parts.
Jake: Well, I know Lo Shinobi but nobody named Lobi Wan Shinobi. Old Lo lives out in the Jundenhiemland wastes, far across the dune sea.
Threepio: To be honest, sir, I have no idea of what he's talking about. (Note threepio had his memory wiped in Episode III, so he has no idea Darth Vader or in this case our Darth Dragon is his creator or anything in the prequel trilogy happened.
Artoo: Bleepdebeeeep.bleepwhistlebeep.
Threepio: If you remove his restraining chain, he will play the entire message for you.
Jake takes off the chain, and the message dissapears.
Jake: This is whack. Play the entire message!
Artoo: Beeeep?
Threepio: What message?! What message?!?!?!?!? The one you have in your rusty intestines, you simpleminded overweight glob of greasy oil! I'm sorry sir.
Jake: well, you can call me Jake.
Threepio: I see sir Jake.
Jake laughs
Jake: Just Jake.
Threepio: I am SeeThreepio: Human Cyborgs relations, and this is my counterpart, Artoo Deetoo.
Jake leaves the garage to go to eat.
Homestead, Dining area.
Jake is eating with his uncle, and aunt. It is quiet, so Jake starts a conversation.
Jake: I think that the droids we bought earlier today might have been stolen.
Owen: What makes you think that?
Jake: I stumbled across an old recording while I was cleaning the blue one, he says he's the property of Lobi Wan Shinobi, I think he might be related to old Lo Shinobi, do you know who he is?
Aunt Beru and Uncle Owen exchange dark looks.
Uncle Owen: That wizard's just a crazy old man. Tomorrow I want you to take the R2 unit to Anchorhead and have it's memory erased. That'll be the end of it, it belongs to us now.
Jake: What if this Lobi Wan comes looking for him?
Owen: He won't. Died around the same time as your father.
Jake: He knew my father?!
Owen: I told you to forget it. Our only concern is to prepare the droids for tommorow.
Jake: I think these new droids are gonna work out fine, no whack yo! I was thinkin about our agreement about me stayin on for another year. And if these droids work out fine, I think I'll submit my form this season.
Owen: This season is when I need you the most. Next year I'll hire some more hands, and you can go to the Academy.
Jake stalks off in anger.
Owen: Where are you going?
Jake: It looks like I'm going nowhere. This is whack.
Beru: Owen, he can't stay here forever, most of his friends have gone. It means so much to him.
Owen: I'll make it up to him next year, I promise.
Beru: Jake's just not a farmer. He has too much of his father in him.
Owen: That's what I'm afraid of.
Outside of the Homestead..
Jake gazes at the twin suns of Tatooine....
Inside Homestead, Garage.
Jake: Threepio! Artoo!
Threepio: I'm sorry sir, I told him not to go, but he did.
Jake: What whack are you talking about?
Threepio: Artoo ran away, Sir!
PS.... Ewoks must die.
PPS:... Ewoks must die.
PPPS: The one Ewok that dies at Endor is usually applauded more then the death of the Emperor or the destruction of the Death Star.
PPPPS: Why, you may ask? BECAUSE EWOKS MUST DIEDIEDIEDIE
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 19, 2006 10:39:46 GMT -5
Your PS on Ewoks are starting to startle me, better quit around with it, I already know that you don't like them, I did not hate them, it's just that Jawas are my favorite aliens. If you read my hosted Starfire Wars fiction, or probably can find the full version at the Robin and Starfire shrine. The so called "Ewoks" written by the author are actually not the Star Wars ewoks, is some sort of another alien named "Twoks". As for chapter, hmm, I thought Leia was supposed to be Rose, but no. As always, like the original trilogy, Leia and Luke are siblings, not couples. If you want to read the Starfire Wars fiction, you can find it here at www.robinandstarfire.com . If the site has a problem, I'll upload the Microsoft Word document for you. Which I do keep it as a collection.
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Post by gojake on Jul 19, 2006 17:35:00 GMT -5
sorry, just playing the Ewok thing for fun, i really don't hate them that much, but consider this: Ewok is a household name, even though it's not even spoken even once in the movie. Lucas was thinking about how much a ewok would translate into a Kenner toy rather than thinking how it would affect ROTJ. It's a cute little war where stormtroopers with weapons which would scare the hell out of Bush, are slaughtered by furry little primitives, and we're treated to only one dying Ewok. Originally, Endor was supposed to be a Wookiee world. If it was, ROTJ would be the most popular movie in the Original Trilogy. Anyways, lets get on to the good stuff.... Chapter 5: Lobi wan. Morning, Lars homestead.... Owen: Jake!.... Jake!.... Owen walks into the kitchen where Beru is preparing food. Owen: Have you seen Jake? Beru: He said he had to do something. He took the droids with him, at least the golden one. Owen: He'd better have the vaporators in the south range repared by evening or there'll be hell to pay. Dune Sea.... Jake Longwalker and Threepio search for the missing Artoo in Jake's rusty, trusty landspeeder. Jake: Look, on the radar, a moving object ahead..... It might be our little droid. Jake and Threepio arrive where Artoo is rolling. Jake: There you are. Artoo: Bleepdebleep. Threepio: We'll have no more of this Lobi Wan nonsense. You're fourtunate he doesn't blast you into a million pieces. Suddenly, a Dunesand raider (replacing the Tuskens) attacks Jake! Jake pulls out his blaster rifle and blocks, then shoots, but misses. The raider hits him in the head. Jake faints. Threepio falls 15 feet, severing one of his robot arms. Suddenly, an old man wearing blue robes, the stadard garment of a.. Dragon ... appears.... Lobi: Dragon UUPP! Lobi turns into a magnificent blue dragon. He breathes fire on one of the raiders, burning him to death, and slices the other one in half. Lobi gazes at Jake's body.He spots Artoo and becomes human. Lobi: Hello there!
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 20, 2006 4:21:21 GMT -5
The current wookie world is Kashyyyk (As seen on the Clone Wars cartoon and Episode 3), Endor is only a moon, not a planet actually. I know this fact when I was playing "Star Wars : Empire at War".
Ahh, the greetings of Lobi Wan Kenobi. May the Force be with you.
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Post by gojake on Jul 20, 2006 18:03:09 GMT -5
Ok about endor, if I didnt make myself clear I do now: in PREPRODUCTION of RETURN OF THE JEDI kashyyyk did not exist, and Endor was the home of the Wookiees. Eventually, Mr. Lucas decided to make Endor the home of the furry little fools we know today as Ewoks, because Ewoks (apparently) were more marketable than wookiees (a huge mistake by Mr. Lucas). Oh, and I have Empire at War, and the Emperor orders you to kick the rebellion's butt at Yavin. Which you do. Which never happened thanks to that one pilot that peed in his pants when Han blew up Vader's other wingman when he (Vader) was trying to kill Luke.
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 21, 2006 13:25:22 GMT -5
Yes, those Ewok teddy bears (Mostly I call them Teddy Bears) are not marketable or having any main characters in it, so it's a small fan favorite. But wookies are, we got Chewbacca actually, the only main character in that species. In the Top 10 favorite Star Wars characters I found from a website, Chewbacca is no. 4 on the list, followed with 1. Yoda, 2. Obi Wan Kenobi, 3. Darth Vader, 5. Boba Fett and so on, then Luke Skywalker is the last actually.
That's why in today's toy market, you see there are some wookie plushies or action figures on sale. That's why most of the fan favorites for animal species are wookies more than ewoks, but my vote goes for Jawas actually, followed up with the Gungan, the species which Jar Jar Binks is.
As for the fiction, any new chapters coming up lately?
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Post by gojake on Jul 22, 2006 18:32:39 GMT -5
Chapter 6: Here be dragons!
Lobi took Jake and his two droids (after repairing threepio's arm) to his hut, where he tended to them for some while. When Jake woke up, he started having a conversation with Lobi.
Jake: You knew my father?
Lobi: Yes, I was a Draco Knight, the same as your father.
Jake: But my uncle told me my father was a captain on a spice freigter-
Lobi: That's what your uncle told you.
Lobi: Your father was a good Knight, a cunning warrior and..... a very, very good friend.
Jake: Lobi, how did my father die?
Lobi hesitated for a moment.
Lobi:........ Well, there was a pupil of mine, Darth Draco (Dark Dragon has been scrapped all other posts have been modified for this). He took ahold of your father and murdered him. I then fought Draco on the distant planet of Mustafar, and I wounded him terribly. Now he is more machine then dragon, a twisted creation of the Emperor.
Lobi: Which reminds me......
Lobi walks over to a large sized chest and opens it.
Lobi: Your father's battle claws. They are blue, one of the most common of the battleclaw colors.
Jake puts on the battle claws. Suddenly, they glow blue and elongate to 3 to 4 feet. (hehehe enter the lightsabers)
Jake: Look! My hands!
Jake's hands are no longer human, instead, they are a magnificent red. Rapidly the rest of his body goes dragon too, until he is all blood red, with green and black spikes on his back, and strong, powerful wings.
Lobi: You must come with me.
Jake: For what?
Lobi: Well, to start your training of course!
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 22, 2006 22:24:50 GMT -5
Whow, good introduction on the lightsabres. And do I remember that the word Mustafar was in the Episode 4 film.
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Post by gojake on Jul 23, 2006 11:25:28 GMT -5
actually i added Mustafar as it doesn't hurt the big fat revelation in episode 5 (and apparently, in Battlefront two, a clone stormtrooper said they destroyed the planet after the great jedi purge, maybe with the death star prototype)LOL
Chapter 7: A Family Slain.
Jake: Say what?!
Lobi: You must come with me to Alderaan if you are to start your training.
Jake: Alderaan!? Look, I have to get home! I can take you to as far as Anchorhead. Then you can get a transport to Mos Eisely or Mos Espa or where ever you're going.
Lobi: You must do what is right, of course. But first I must see this video recording. I seem to have found it.
Princess Hayleia: Draco General Lobi Wan Shinobi, I come to you in greatest need. You served my father in the Clone Wars. I am unable to present his request to you personally, but technical readouts to the Huntsclan Empire's greatest weapon, the Death Dragon. It must be delivered to the Rebellion. Help me Lobi wan Shinobi, you're my only hope.
Lobi leaves the house with Jake; he will escort him to his house. Along the way, the stumble across the sandcrawler.
Jake: Look, there's gaffi sticks, raider clothes, footprints, blast points, just I've never heard of them hitting something this big before.
Lobi: They didn't, but we are meant to think they did. Look at the foot prints. They are ranked, unlike the raiders who ride single file to hide their footprints. Also, look at these blast points, to accurate for raiders. Only an Imperial Huntstrooper could have made them.
Jake: But if they traced the robots to here, maybe.... oh no..... HOME!
Jake runs over to his land speeder and drives over to his homestead.
Jake looks at the devasted homestead, which is spewing out smoke.
He sees the burnt bodies of aunt beru and Uncle owen, which have been stripped of most of their flesh, with some pieces hanging out.
Jake turns his head away, and (the force theme plays) stares in the other direction. He goes to his landspeeder and drives back to Lobi. No longer is there any peace for him now as he searches for revenge against the Empire, and he knows there is one way, only one.
To become a Draco Knight.
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Post by Kokusho the Evening Star on Jul 23, 2006 12:39:49 GMT -5
Another good chapter.
Ahh, I see that Mustafar was destroyed. But I checked at wikipedia and its cousin, wookiepedia, it appears that it wasn't destroyed at all.
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