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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 3, 2005 20:15:12 GMT -5
this is my ff for my character drake on ahr's site
my name is drake i was orphaned at birth so i never got to know my real parents. i was adopted by a minster hunter when i was five i found out he was the huntsmaster from the mythology books i read in the study he told me that there where magical creatures around the NYC and the world for the past eight years the huntsmaster train in two martial arts capoeria and jeet kune do and in the weaponry of the huntsclan. when i was 13 i was ready to slay my 1st dragon sense i was so ahead of my league the huntsmaster decide to let me slay the legendary dragon-x i knew what that beast could do to inexperinced hunters. when the hunts clan drop me off in the park at night i saw the beast near the trees i could see why they called it dragon-x it had a x on it's paw. the beast was a sleep 'this is gonna be easy' i thought to my self but the beast already knew i was there somehow before struck it swipe at me acrossed the leg the pain was unbearable but ignored it and struck at it's neck. the beast started to glow and after a blinding light it dissappaer i felt my head get heavy and my body went num before i hit the ground and blacked out the only two things i heard was a dragons heart beat and some1 saying 'somebody call the ambulance quick a teenage boy just passed out'
i'll continue after i get some reviews
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Post by stranger on Aug 3, 2005 22:17:18 GMT -5
pls continue, even tho i have read allot of it, but continue anyway
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 3, 2005 22:18:41 GMT -5
ok i just need one more review to continue
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Post by ripcurl101 on Aug 3, 2005 22:25:49 GMT -5
keep going its awsome!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 3, 2005 22:40:17 GMT -5
ok here the other part
i woke up around ten or something my sight was still blurry when i look around i could swear i heard a dragonsheart beat. my sense of smell heighten my stregth tenfloded it felt like fire was burn throough my mouth. my sight corrected about 2 to 3 seconds later i saw the huntsmaster smileing he said he was proud of me 4 slaying the toughest dragon of all he said the hunts council was gonna make me a huntsmaster i could beleive half of me was proud but the other half wasn't for some odd reason. back at the manor i went in to the study to read about the dragon-x it said it was a rare type of dragon to see but it was it's species was banished from the ilse of draco cuz it nearly killed a dragon council member but what i didn't get that the book didn't say why it glowed after i killed it just then the huntsmaster busted in the study which sarced me abit and yelled in anger that the dragon not at the park where i slayed it i tryed to protest but he didn't listen when he left and slam the door shut a book from the top shelf fell and hit me on the head i look at and said 'dragon-x powers' i skimed through i and found out why it glowed it had givin me it powers! it said after a victor had defeated this dragon it gives it powers and soul to the champ of the bout . i was shocked to find this out and i knew what would happen if the huntsmaster found out that i was dragon-x he would kill me.
thats what i got so far and i'll do the same as i did from the 1st part of my ff
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Post by mithos on Aug 4, 2005 16:13:36 GMT -5
Sweet stories!! Loved 'em!
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Post by blaze on Aug 4, 2005 16:15:47 GMT -5
Hey DF123, thats good, keep up the good work, I hope to read more about this BTW just a lil hint, try to use paragraphs, makes it easier to read and breaks up parts that shouldn't be on the same line Other than that, great work!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 4, 2005 16:17:38 GMT -5
thanx i'll have part three up soon
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Post by blaze on Aug 4, 2005 16:32:40 GMT -5
Kewl, cant wait to see how the story develops
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Post by magenta on Aug 4, 2005 17:01:02 GMT -5
Yeah, I'm looking forward to reading more, too!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 4, 2005 18:01:43 GMT -5
here's the 3rd part
i just stared at those words in that book where the dragon-x gives it soul to the champ of the bout. 'this just can't be happening' i thought to my self but it was true i remember that night as if it wear my birth day so i decided to leave the huntsclan before they found out that i'm dragon-x so when the huntsmaster left to tell the concuil of my failure to kill the legendary beast i snuck in the vault and stole $900 dollars and a weeks worth of food and a map.
later that night i left the manor checked the map to find where i was but it looked familiar to me it was the park where i slayed the dragon i knew that the hunts clan would come looking for me and r able to reconzie me in a sec so i went in to the syndicate urban streetwear and bought property of dtp athletics sweat shrit baggy blue shorts and rebock med wear red n white shoes. then i went in a jewerly store and bought a dtp pendent in platiuman with diamonds on the rim. when i left i heard some1 fighting on the roof i went to check it out.
thats what i got so far
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Post by stranger on Aug 4, 2005 18:08:22 GMT -5
not bad, at what part does ryu come in? or was he in a different story u were writing i forget.
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 4, 2005 18:09:27 GMT -5
he's in the other story stranger i'm putting up my old 1 first
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Post by stranger on Aug 4, 2005 18:12:47 GMT -5
i c, but arn't the two connected? cuz u could just make it one long story if it is
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Post by dragonfan123 on Aug 4, 2005 18:50:06 GMT -5
yeah i could but but i don't to cuz i'm still working on that ff still 2 do. before i continue does any one else have questions well since no 1 has any question on with the story i climb the fire escape ladder as fast as i could climb when i got to the top of the buliding i saw the american dragon fight a huntsclan member i swear i saw her before. in training of course she was the second best student to the huntscaln next to me 'give it up dragon you can't defeat me ' she yelled 'well that goes for both of use huh' the dragon said with a socky grin. since the americain dragon was fight huntsgirl he did'nt see the other hunts clan memeber come up behind him. something snap in side of me to make me jump over the rail and stop that huntsclan member. when he was about to strike the dragon i caught the end of it 'hey don't you guys ever fight far?' the huntsclan member was surpised to see me catch the staff with great speed 'you your the one the huntsmaster wants' 'o so he wants me dead then how about you go tell him then' with that i grab his arm and flip him over the edge of the buliding. after i tossed that member over the egde i looked at huntsgirl 'well well well looks like the huntsmaster made you best hunt student he you still can't beat me in a bout' i said with a smile showing up. the dragon looked confused 'uh if guys are on the same--' 'can it dragon this has nothing to deal with you!' the huntgirl yelled at the beast after she yelled at it she got in a tae kwon do stance 'well if a fight you want girl it's a fight you got' i got in a mix between my capoeria and jeet kune do styles a big fight scene in the next part
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