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Post by dragonfan123 on Jul 22, 2006 20:55:16 GMT -5
hey ya'll yeah i'm writing again after a long time any this is about akira drake and shinsei's son so this is in the future jake and rose are married spud and trixie together and everyone except akira are 18 so anyway without further a do the story(ques music)
chapter one learning one's past and training begins
"No get away!" akira said screaming swing his pillow around and wakes up with a beads of sweat going down his face "DAMMIT not again, he said wipeing the sweat away still shaking "fourth time this month. why are they haunting me?" he said sighing "akira keep it down!" his father drake yelled from his and his mother's room "sorry dad." akira said softly looking at his clock and it read 12:00 "well i guess i'll go draw for a bit." he said getting up and walking to his desk.
"i wonder why i keep havein this nightmare?" he said pondering the thought as he got a piece of paper and pencil and started drawing" I guess it has something to do with those freaks that attacked me and my parents when i was five," he said remembering the hellish attack "well i don't need to think about it right now." he said nearly falling a sleep and hiting the desk"I really need to get back to sleep," he said yawning with some flame leaveing his mouth" OW what the hell was that?!" he said "AKIRA! I SAID QUIT DAMMIT!" Drake yelled from his room "sorry dad!" akira yelled back "ii'll ask them tommorrow." he said going back to bed ____________________________________________________
sorry if this was short but it's going to get better trust me on this
title was given to me by my bro lloyd the nightmare was given to me by hero ;D * note* i don't own the AD:JL characters nor shinsei that's SPs character all i own is drake and co-own akira with sp
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Post by Chaos on Jul 22, 2006 21:03:09 GMT -5
Ooh, very nice. VERY nice, I like it, next chapters seem excititng. You could spice it up a little and add some other people. ^^
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Post by dragonfan123 on Jul 22, 2006 21:04:27 GMT -5
thnx i'll try to update it tommorrow if i can
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shadowpelt
Jake's friend
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Post by shadowpelt on Jul 23, 2006 2:21:08 GMT -5
w00t! Me want more. And dang Drake. Go easy there.
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Post by dragonfan123 on Jul 23, 2006 11:21:28 GMT -5
lol sp and thnx alright the 2nd part of the first chapter
Akira awoke to the morning sun and the smell of pancakes"man i really need some sleep." he said geting up and walking down stairs and into the kitchen "morning akira." shinsei akira's mother said kissing him on the cheeck."morning mom," he said look for his father"uh mom were's dad?"he asked "Oh he went over to your uncle jakes place for a bit." shinsei said "oh ok uh mom is it normal for a 14 year old boy to breath fire?" he asked hearsing dishes crash " excuse me akira?" she said with a worried look on her face "Is it normal for a boy my age to breath fire?" he said again slowly "oh look at the time got to go to work but we'll talk about this when bot your father and i are home now go get ready for school." shinsei said leaveing the kitchen "yes mom." akira said going upstairs to get ready for school.
shinsei grabed a phone near the front door and dailed a number"come on pick up!" she said hearing the phone ring "hello?" a voice said through the other side"rose long speaking." rose said" ROSE!" shinsei screamed" shinsei no need to scream into the phone!" rose yelled back "rose look get drake i need to talk to him now!" shinsei said to rose"ok what about?" rose said "rose i think our son akira might have dragon powers." shinsei said a little worried "shinsei hang on ok i'll tell jake and drake and bring akira here after school ok?" rose said dealing with the surpiseing fact her nephew is a new dragon "rose i will and thank for telling drake." shinsei said hanging up
_______________________________________________________ ok that's part two again sorry if it's short
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shadowpelt
Jake's friend
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Post by shadowpelt on Jul 23, 2006 11:24:01 GMT -5
w00t! Wow. Both Rose and Shinsei sound as shocked as heck.
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Post by Chaos on Jul 23, 2006 16:25:07 GMT -5
Heh, that's funny. They don't even know Akira has dragon powers after 14 years. ^^
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Post by Tales_ Fanatic on Jul 24, 2006 8:35:11 GMT -5
Wow, great chapters Bro^_^ Keep it up. I can't wait to read more ;D
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Post by dragonfan123 on Jul 24, 2006 9:05:13 GMT -5
ok guys here's part 3 of the chapter
"Akira wait up!" Akira's friend Sidney yelled "huh?" Akira said stopping wait for his friend"Jeez Sid normal your able to keep up with me." he said laughing "you better watch it!" she growled "ok ok i'll stop but where's Mike?" Akira said looking around for him "He said he'll met us at school." Sid said "so anything new with you Akira?" she asked "well nothing much though." Akira said walking into a blacked hair girl "O My God you ok?" she said looking at Akira "yeah yeah i'm fine just fine I'm sorry for walking into you uh?" Akira was about to say "it's Ashley." She said shaking Akira's hand "Mine's Akira." he said seeing a dragon like tatto on ashley's neck "nice dragon tattoo." he said "Oh it's not a tattoo it's a birthmark." she said with a frown "hey i got one on my arm that looks like a chinese dragon with wings." Akira said left his sleeve up showing it to her "cool i'll see you around ok?" Ashley said leaveing "yes yes defeintely see you around." Akira said with hearts in his eyes "Yo Romeo get messin around school's starting!" SiD screamed at akira
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sorry if this is short my dad want's on
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Post by Chaos on Jul 24, 2006 12:37:31 GMT -5
I like it. ^^ Akira has a crush now! This is gonna end up like JakexHuntsgirl. ^^
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Post by dragonfan123 on Jul 24, 2006 17:28:55 GMT -5
hey guys i got ROTC training tommorrow so i can't update it til 3:00 tommorrow
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Post by Tales_ Fanatic on Jul 24, 2006 18:09:24 GMT -5
NIce work bro, keep up the good work. I wanna read more ;D
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Post by dominosowner on Jul 24, 2006 19:40:51 GMT -5
OK, since no'one else is going to say it, I guess I will. You need to have capital I's where they're needed. It looks really first grade when you put: "i told Danielle i would be there" You need to have paragraphs and space them. Capitalize names. Your story also confuses me a little. Can you kinda help me out here? Your story looks really good so far, so don't stop writing, these are just some things you could do to make your story look more professional and easier to read. I'm not trying to be mean or anything,really.
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Post by dragonfan123 on Jul 25, 2006 15:06:08 GMT -5
ok ok here's the update
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"Shinsei your not makeing sense." Drake said to her "Drake I'm telling the truth our son has dragon powers and maybe wolf powers aswell." Shinsei said to her husband "I doubt it hun," Drake said sighing "After 14 yrs there's no way." he said "Drake it's possible." Shinsei said "Now we need to arrange on who will train him." she said hugging her husband "Yeah your right call up Jake." he said
*meanwhile at school*
"And that class tells you a dragon has the brain the size of a pea maybe even a walnut." rotwood said and as he snaps his ruler in front of Akira"Mr.Long! what can you tell me about werewolves?" he said "Uh well werewolves can be half dragon?" Akira said hopeing he didn't get it wrong "NIEN! Dragons can never be half werewolf!" Rotwood screamed "And Akira this test comeing up is you know what 90% of your grade if you fail it you'll have the honor of see me Prof. Rotwood in the brumda shorts and flippy floppy sandels." he said to Akira "Meaning?" Akira satarted to say before Rotwood snap his ruler on his desk again this time breaking his ruler" SUMMER SCHOOL!" he screamed when the bell rang "Aw man." akira said leaveing
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ok there ya go guys the update
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Post by Chaos on Jul 25, 2006 15:29:07 GMT -5
Heh, flashback from Body Guard Duty. ^^ I like it, continue soon.
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