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Post by huntsgirls1fan on May 19, 2007 9:26:32 GMT -5
COOL!
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jun 9, 2007 23:15:05 GMT -5
I'd really appreciate more reviews.
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Jun 10, 2007 8:11:00 GMT -5
Lol, how about.
Great story!
LOL
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jun 10, 2007 8:57:55 GMT -5
I meant from other people. Thank-you for being one of the few people who keeps on giving me feedback.
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Post by superspud234 on Jun 10, 2007 9:37:07 GMT -5
you have to update its really good!
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Post by ` SAY WHA ?! on Jun 10, 2007 9:48:15 GMT -5
update soon!! it's really good!!
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
Posts: 1,938
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Post by fudogg on Jun 10, 2007 20:57:44 GMT -5
Okay, I'll update!
Chapter Six- 88 and 89's Revenge
Sun left a little while later, while Haley and Susan stayed with Jake. As she walked home, many thoughts filled her head. She had always known Jake to be an outgoing and pleasant person to be around, but this was just plain horrible. Even though she didn't know Jake that well, she still hated seeing him in so much pain.
As she walked by Canal Street Electronics, she heard someone call her.
"Pss, Sun."
Sun turned around to see Fu outside the door of the shop.
"How's Jake?"
"Not good. He tried killing himself last night."
"What?! Gramps didn't say anything! The phone rang and that must have been Susan, but Gramps didn't say anything. He just sat down and watched TV."
"Well, Susan said she called him. She said he picked up, but he never came."
"Oh jeez..." Fu complained.
"Well, I should go." Sun said as she started walking home.
Little did they know, that 88 and 89 were watching. Well actually, 88 was watching, 89 was drinking a slushy.
"Well, if it isn't dog man and dragon lady."
"I thought we were done with the Huntclan." 89 said.
"We are, but what are we going to do with the rest of our lives?"
"Umm, maybe something meaningful?"
"Can you hear yourself?! Slaying dragons is meaningful!" 88 yelled into 89's ears. "Let's go."
The 2 crept across the street and entered Canal Street Electronics.
"Hello?" 89 asked. Suddenly they heard talking. They recognized the voices as the talking dog and the elder dragon. The dog was yelling at the dragon for a reason, so 88 and 89 listened.
"How can you be so heartless?" The dog asked.
"I am not heartless." The dragon replied.
"You are not the same man I met 30 years ago, Gramps. That man cared about his family."
"I do care about my family."
"What about Jake? Jake cared about Rose and Rose was loyal to us! She was willing to die for Jake. Jake could have saved her, but you deliberately took the skull away from him and let her die! She didn't deserve to go like that and now you are leaving Jake to feel responsible! Yo knew Jake tried to kill himself, but you didn't care!"
"Jake disgraced the name of the dragon when he fell in love with a Huntsclan member! And you knew as well as I did that Rose would not get away with what she did before. You knew just as well as I did that she would meet the same fate as the Huntsclan. What's a Huntsclan member, always a Huntsclan member! And now she's in Hell with the rest of the Huntsclan where she belongs!"
"I don't believe what I'm hearing." the dog said. "Jake didn't disgrace the name of the dragon. You did. Jake is the perfect example of a dragon. He protects people and he fights for what he believes is right. Jake is a true dragon and does not deserve to suffer like this. Not only are you responsible for Rose's death, but you are also responsible for Jake's attempted suicide."
"Well, well, well. Looks like the American Dragon is in a position where he can't protect himself." 88 then pulled out a small ball like object.
"What is that?" 89 asked.
"I call it a Hunts-bomb." 88 laughed as he set it on the floor. "Come on, we got 30 seconds to get out of here."
Well, what did you think? Like it, love it, hate it? I think 89 got a severe brain freeze from that slushy. Please update, because I will absolutely not update until I get more than one review.
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Post by ` SAY WHA ?! on Jun 10, 2007 22:05:44 GMT -5
loved it!! update it soon again!! very nice story!!!!!
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Jun 12, 2007 15:01:33 GMT -5
Update soon!
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Post by justicez on Jun 16, 2007 7:40:29 GMT -5
Update soon as well,this is very interesting
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Post by superspud234 on Jun 24, 2007 14:30:37 GMT -5
keep going its awsome!
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Jun 26, 2007 17:42:06 GMT -5
Chapter Seven
Sun was walking back and forth trying to get her thoughts together. Suddenly, Sun saw the shop go up in flames. Sun ran to the remains of the shop. What she saw would haunt her dreams for the rest of her life. She saw Lao-Shi and Fu's charred corpses under the rubble.
"Oh my god..." Sun tried to keep her lunch down as she dragoned up and flew to the hospital. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Jonathan walked into the dark house.
"Susan?" He walked into the kitchen where he saw a note. It read:
Jonathan, Jake's depression was worse than I thought. I woke up a couple of minutes ago and saw Jake on the floor. He tried to kill himself. Come to the hospital as soon as you read this. Susan
Jonathan gasped and ran out the door. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Sun raced into Jake's hospital room.
"We have a problem." She spit out fast. "The shop caught on fire somehow. No one made it out."
"They're both dead?" Susan asked.
"Yes." Sun replied. "I'm sorry." Suddenly Jonathan rushed in.
"I got here as fast as I could. What happened?"
"I just woke up, came downstairs and saw Jake on the floor. He took all of your sleeping pills."
"Is he going to be alright?"
"Yes." Susan answered just as the doctor came in.
"How is he doing?" The doctor asked.
"Pretty good." Susan said. "He's asleep."
"When will he be able to come home?" Jonathan asked.
"Not for a while." The doctor answered. "Once he is able to stand on his own, he's going to a mental hospital."
"Why?'
"Mr. Long, you're son just tried to kill himself. He needs mental treatment so this won't happen again."
"What my son needs is to go home and take time off his stressful school life."
"According to your wife, this suicide attempt was because of the loss of a loved one."
"It was just his friend..."
"Whether it was a friend or girlfriend, it doesn't matter. We can't have this happen again."
Okay. That's chapter seven. I won't update until I get three reviews, okay?
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Post by ` SAY WHA ?! on Jun 27, 2007 0:57:08 GMT -5
ooh! nice!!
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Post by superspud234 on Jun 28, 2007 13:01:04 GMT -5
Awsome! Oh no Gramps and Fu are dead!!! NO!!!!!!
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Post by justicez on Jun 29, 2007 4:03:38 GMT -5
Good chapter,just very sad that gramps and fu are dead.
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