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Post by The Italian Dragon on May 3, 2008 17:17:53 GMT -5
Wow This chapter rocks all and Vince's story is jusst perfect. Know what ? When your fanfic is over, go to see someone in alibrary and publish it.It reminds me some Stephen King's novels and you write even better than him. Know what ? If they're going to make a fil m I'll suggest that you build up the story. Keep going in writting, that's an awesome fic !
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Post by The Italian Dragon on May 18, 2008 18:24:27 GMT -5
I have an idea : if you agree I can make some pictures basing on your fic (a nd all with my computer ). So have fun with your fic and keep on writting. I'm waiting imatiently the next chapter
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Post by Protoss Dragon on May 18, 2008 18:32:41 GMT -5
Ok thanks, but I might not finish the next chapter till after finals because, our physics final is this emensely massive project and im halfway through it.
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Post by The Italian Dragon on May 19, 2008 11:51:54 GMT -5
OK no problem Afterwards I have to work hard too cuz my final exams are not so far ( June 20th) so I don't know if I can do the artworks on thses months but this summer
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Post by Protoss Dragon on May 19, 2008 18:26:49 GMT -5
oh awesome, my high school gets out on May 30th and gets in on August 16th
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Post by Protoss Dragon on May 22, 2008 20:39:28 GMT -5
Chapter 6 Notes: Just PM me if you want your character in the story, also can someone please do artwork for this story if you want to, you don't have to if you don't need to but, I suck horribly at drawing. My homemade website is also up here is the link, this is for the book im writing which is different then this story, you can find out more about it in the book section of the fourm: experimentalarmy.googlepages.com/homemenuON WITH THE STORY... Note this chapter might contain sexual references. Fenix slammed the shower water button, water flowed over his nearly bald scaled scalp. He was the only one at the island base, this moment. Sophia had taken the Huey helicopter and flown about 100 miles to mainland New Zealand where she would talk to some long time friends who also had wack ass reptile powers. Tom and Scarl were doing some reconnaissance using jet skis, out in the ocean. Zarc had flown back to his own base in Siberia, Russia. Fenix was board today, he had already gone on his reckon mission and turned up with nothing. His wings ached in pain, as he turned the hot water off. He wrapped himself in a towel and dried himself off. Since no one was at the base Fenix, just walked outside completely naked. Even though he was a large reptile and no one cared if he was not wearing anything. The wind felt awkward between his legs without his camouflage colored army pants, that had a tail hole and tail cuff around it. Fenix also had a few bullet proof vests and a special suit called the “Flex Suit” It was light weight but, extremely versatile. The Flex Suit, completely covered his body including his tail through the use of an armored plated tail cover. The entire suit looked somewhat like a space cadets armor except all the steel plates were camouflage green and brown, the joint were very flexible. The suit could withstand thirty caliber bullets fine. it could also survive underwater, in space, hazardous nuclear radiation areas, and in very cold climates. The helmet it came with had a small heads up display on the inside visor, which could give, temperature, time and problems. The helmet had a build in radio system. The helmet was a lot larger and stronger then a normal space suit helmet. The helmets nose extended out to compensate for Fenix's large reptilian mouth, two griddles were on each side of the nose. This provided a direct air feed to his nose from the air recycling system. The visor was slanted to make him more areo-dynamic and to fit his head fine. The wing system was a complete Kevlar covering, that extended from the shoulder, it was entranced with armored plates. His wings would be fully comfortable and flexible wearing this suit. Fenix sighed as he slipped on of those air activated heating pads on his shoulder joints where his, shoulder branched off with his wings. His wings felt like he had a second set of arms, minus the fingers/claw things. Tom was out swimming in the ocean, testing his crocodile skills out that even Steve Erwin would be proud of (R.I.P, to the crock hunter). Scarl was spinning around on his jet ski wasting gas. A white flash of light suddenly came over the trio, they all either covered their eyes or jumped in the water. A small Shockwave collided with the base of the island, the explosion was contained to the water so little damage was done. Both jet skies were fried by the explosion, Fenix and the base were fine. “Guys get over here!” Fenix shouted from the island's runway (which was approximately 4 miles long), they both swam over to the shore and threw themselves up on the sand. “We need to move”, Phoenix said to them, “Good thing it was only a small nuke or we would be dead.” Even though his Flex suit could take a beating and survive radiation/fallout it could not survive a blast from a nuke, plus he was not wearing his suit, so it would do him no good any ways. “Ill are the high anti air silo” Tom said. “Ok, then Scarl follow me, there is another wing pack in the hanger, use that, and bring some kind of weapon.” Scarl did as he commanded and grabbed a small sick uzi from their armory storage that was right next to the hanger. Fenix took off into the sky using his powerful wings followed by Scarl and his wing pack. ----------------------------- Alright here is an updated chapter that I did because, I came home from high school early. I go to a school in Watsonville CA, and we had to be evacuated because, of the wild fires. Don't worry, my house is not in danger. It is so far away from the fire and about half a mile from the coast that it can't be reached by it. If you want your characters in here just PM me and I will try to fit them in. Also if you want to do artwork for this story then feel free to and I will probably compliment you.
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Post by The Italian Dragon on May 23, 2008 20:56:05 GMT -5
AS good as usual Protoss Drag'. And know what ? Your story is as breathtaking as an action tv show like 24 or all the shows like it. This chapter raises questoin: why the hell a nuke burst on their island. And who just dropped this I got also an idea: if you want to make people discover your book you can, cuz on some websites you send 'em your text and for a modic price ( something about 200 euros , soo cheap when you see the price of some books Oo) they print 30 copies. So, when I see in the library next my home a book called ''Midnight Army '' I swear that I jump on it and buy it whatever it costs
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Post by Protoss Dragon on May 23, 2008 21:07:30 GMT -5
Actually, with the other story dubbed "Experimental Army" I have decided to self publish it with the help of "Infinity publishing" and get this, they only publish it for $400 USD and you get 35% of what each book sells for . On top of that you get complete leverage and control of what if happening. But, to me this E-story is one of my hobbie works. You will have a heart attack when you see "Experimental Army" which is the book series. Also check out my website for the book in my sig.
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Post by The Italian Dragon on May 24, 2008 19:59:28 GMT -5
Okay, and tell me when your story ''Experimental Army '' is out because I really want to buy it, even if I have to do it trough internet
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Post by Protoss Dragon on Jun 1, 2008 0:30:11 GMT -5
Remember if you want your characters in just tell me via PM. You are free to also do fan art of this if you want to or use my characters for other fanfiction (Except for Vince he is property of “Italian Dragon” so ask him first. Also visit my website for my book im writing. Link is in previous post.
Chapter 7
“Do you know where we are headed!?” Scarl exclaimed, over the sound of his wing packs engine and the strong wind current. “Kinda, I think I see them up ahead about a hundred miles ahead, you see that little silver speck?” “No I don't.” Scarl replied. Fenix sighed, his black wings cut through the air like razor blades, or a knife and butter. Scarl twitched as he smelt the essence of burning lead from the mushroom cloud that rose fourteen miles high. “Follow me this way, we can camouflage ourselves in the mushroom cloud.” Fenix said and used his wings and artificial scale cells to accelerated him past mach one. They flew into the mushroom cloud that gave a dark brown ghostly color, the air in the cloud was not hot as they though it would be and was actually quit cold because, of the heat being circulated through the outer part of the cloud (I don't know if this is scientifically accurate, but hey its a story), it let the cold air fill the center. Shooting out the other side of the cloud they were blasted with the hot air. Their scales protected them like a suit of armor.
Meanwhile Back at base...
Jem landed with her wing pack followed by Vince. The nine foot tall black dragon looked around at the abandoned air force base that they were currently using. “You know this base doesn't look that bad.” He said in his deep voice. “It isn't, this base was built during world war two, to transport weapons, aircraft and G.I.'s, its abandoned now, except for us but, back then this was the one stop hot spot for all planes. Pilots would get bombs, missiles, rest, food and fuel here.” The newt replied in her softer voice. “Its amazing, it must have taken years to construct this.” Vince said in shock, while looking around at the hangers, and abandoned structures. They both raced over to Tom who was sitting next to an anti-air rocket silo with the controls in his hand. “What the hell happened here?” Jem said to Tom. “Some one tried to do a nuke burst on us.” He replied but, were all safe, the base is unharmed and Fenix and Scarl are after the aircraft.
At 25,000 feet up...
Scarl socked his micro SMG machine gun as they approached the slow fling air craft, it was a propeller plane because, of how slow it was flying. “You take the sockpit, I got the wings.” Fenix yelled over the noise of the propellers and the wind blast. Scarl ripped the sockpit to shreds using his micro SMG. Fenix acceded about a thousand feet into the sky. Ice crystals started to build on his chest, tail and wings. With a swift dive he accelerated himself past mach two, with a brutal blow he hit the left wing of the aircraft, the wing completely sheered off in a horrible cracking sound, his wings took the blow and Fenix took the pain, clinching his teeth and causing his draconic eyes to water a bit, wind rushed past him as he flew down wards followed by, wire, broken glass and bent steel. Scarl followed him down to almost sea level.
At da base...
“They destroyed the plane.” Tom said in a cheerful tone. “Lets hope so.” Vice said while staring at the huge mushroom cloud that was now fading away. ........ Ok guys and girls im tired and it is almost midnight where I am, so see you until next chapter, and I will always be floating around the American Dragon fourms. I know this chapter was shorter, but be warned the next chapter contains a sex scene, but before I go any further I want to know if it ok to post a sex scene, I will be sure to mark it in red so they don't need to read it if they don't want to. If they don't want to read it they can skip to the grey parts that are safe.
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Post by The Italian Dragon on Jun 7, 2008 16:57:43 GMT -5
Hmmmmm, Vince and Jem just arrived to the base. I feel fight in the air ^^ I'm starting to be dependant of this story XD Ah and I forgot, good night
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Post by Protoss Dragon on Jun 16, 2008 2:08:02 GMT -5
Chapter 8
Alright guys, this chapter will be long because, I don't have high school...Hooray. Also many things will go down in this chapter. As usual if you want your character in the story PM me with their specs.
This chapter is rated “Teen” ............................... Air rushed past the two. Fenix pulled up on his leathery wings and he shot over the water, waves came within inches of his underside spraying a refreshing mist in his face. This water was tropical so there was a low salt content, which made it even more refreshing then before. Scarl was high above cruising around with his wing pack. He slid the old slip from his micro SMG out of the bottom of the gun, the let his grasp on the clip go. The clip fell into the sea and sunk straight to the sea floor. He slid a new fresh clip on place and continued to scan the sky with his two reptilian eyes. Fenix circled around to the wreckage of the aircraft that was floating in the sea some meters away. All he could see were bent pieces of steel that were still floating, insulation foam, plastic, mangled wires and a black oil covering of the water that surrounded the four sinking engines. The bodies were no where in site, had they sunk with most of the air machinery, were they still in the cabin which was halfway under water only exposing the front windscreen that was torn up by Scarl's bullets? No one knew, Fenix rose with a swoop of air, out of the hovering state to rejoin Scarl in the sky. “Is there any survivors Fenix?” Scarl questioned him. “None I could see, anyways lets head back to base.” Fenix replied. Scarl followed him, flying across the sky and under the clouds, Fenix was fairly comfortable with his body, after all he was designed to fly. Scarl on the other had had some trouble at first, his body was designed for ground work and jungle warfare, in South America. His body shape was no problem since it was very close to that of Fenix, change the color, minus the wings and fire breathing. The wing pack was designed by a Russian company that went out of business due to the fall of Stalin, the company was closely orientated with the still running business that experimented with genetic modification and turned them all into what they are. Fenix stole three wing packs from the company during his escape, in which time he found Jem. Sophia on the other hand was a different story, little did any one know but, she was also a cyborg warrior along with a special trained solider. The only people that knew of this were Fenix. Even though she was still human and solider, almost 35% of all her body parts were cybernetic, they were small hitches such as, titanium re-enforced bones, a steel re-enforced spine, an increased lung size that allowed her to stay without air for longer periods of time, artificial cells that were interlinked to make up her skin and modified artificial mussels, that could allow her to lift almost five times her body weight. Tom was a bit more sill...I should say about his crocodile body, during a research project in Egypt with his father. But let me give you a small flashback to show you what really happened...
Tom rushed throughout the Valley of the Kings, it was dead at night, almost one in the morning. Tom stared at his digital watch with a cracked LCD screen. He could barely make out 1:03 under the dim moonlight, flanked by clouds. The wind, laced with sand rushed past his goggles, that covered his Grey colored eyes. His uncle had been killed just nigh a few minutes ago when a boobie trapped door crushed him to death. Ignoring the door he rushed out into the sandstorm being blind sighted by the over powering wind. He ran along the sandy rock with his hand shielding his eyes. Just then, “Bang!”, “Crash” the floor underneath him gave way. That was the last thing he remembered.
Okay enough side show, back to the story.
Fenix flew back to the base with scarl, he could see the massive mushroom cloud almost dispersed. Anything swimming below it would have been vaporized in a matter of milliseconds. “Poor, Poor dolphins” he thought to himself.
......In New Zealand.....
Sophia was taking a bite out of her sandwich, it felt weird eating now, especially with a cybernetic jaw and creak bones, she constantly felt that she had a large lump in her mouth, it was actually her titanium collarbone, hidden under her artificial skin. It would give hear head extra support and strength. Walking along the New Zealand paths was like a brisk in the sun, the temperature was warm and windy, it did not bother her though. She had hidden the Huey helicopter in a abandoned coastal battery that was used during WWII, it provided excellent camouflage for the five ton chopper from the publics eye. She laughed and continued along the path. There was an un-easy felling that was churning in her stomach. Knowing that she was strong and authorized to use leathel force, she grabbed the glock from inside her military jacket and aimed it at a tree. “Bang!” Birds fly out a tree and two enormous purple parasites pounced out also. Sophia emptied an entire clip into the parasites. Nothing stopped them, not even her depleted uranium rounds. A parasite jumped on her, with his slimy toung and knocked her to the ground, the parasite was just like a normal human except, there was huge clear bulging jelly sacs coming off of its body. “crap!” She screamed as she used all her power stored up, in her hidden artificial muscles. A blue tail out of no where came down over her, crushing the parasite's other deadly buddy, the one that was on top of here did not care and kept trying to bite her with its massive teeth. A blue reptilian claw grabbed the parasite by the neck, with a thunderous crack, the parasites neck broke, killing it. As Sophia lifted herself off the ground, she was relieved to see, “Heart, is that really you?!”
Okay guys its midnight and im tired, ill write more later.
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Post by The Italian Dragon on Jun 16, 2008 11:09:16 GMT -5
Nice chapter Protoss Drag' ! If you want some help for building the character of Sophia I a nhel pyou. Now inf Areostapce industry they use titanium ( like for Endeavour ). But a couple of month ago the scientists created a new kind of artifical diamond, 50 times , yes you read right 50 times stronger than the natural one. They also can use memory materials. Basically imagine just a piece of metal. If you bend it it stays as it is. But with a material like it you just have to put it on fire or on everything hot like a lighter and it cames back to its original form. So if you want Fenix can make for Sophia special enhancements with this material. And today I had the first part of my big test : maths . I'm really bad at it so.... Next part will come upt friday. Final part on July, the 1st . And after that it's VBACAATIONS !!!!! HOORAY XD. Your story is great buddy. Keep on writting I really love it!
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Post by Protoss Dragon on Jun 16, 2008 16:39:46 GMT -5
yes thanks, and sorry if this chapter kinda sucked because, I was up till 2:00 am playing Crysis
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Post by The Italian Dragon on Jun 16, 2008 20:28:19 GMT -5
Nah it's nothing . My clock says that it's 3:26 A.M. now so ... And on some weekends I keep on playing Call fo Duty 4 : Modern Warfare even sometimes at .. 5 A.M. S don't worry, I know how it is when you're tired Anyway I'm going to go to bed now. Have a good night and I'm sure that tomorrow you'll be fulffilled of energy!
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