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Post by YFWE on Dec 10, 2007 9:20:33 GMT -5
First person to review. I totally win. So, you killed Shade again. Man, you sure love death, don't you? Not only with Shade, but with other characters as well! I mean, dang. It almost loses its novelty value after a while. It's like 'oh look, Ewan killed another character again. How did I not see this coming? Oh wait... I did.' Not that it's too much of a problem, though... I just figured we were due for that soon. ...unless Shade isn't really dead. I mean, Jack Coleman's character didn't die in Heroes even though it looked like he did. Stranger things have happened, son. But it definitely was a good chapter, worth the wait. Decently awesome length, too. And good dialogue, as you usually have. Once again, though, sometimes there is almost a little too much dialogue. It's not that big a deal, as I've said before, but sometimes getting a break from that is good--a much needed breather. So I hope you'll update soon! Of course, I am not one to talk, but I rarely am. Nice job, at any rate!
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Dec 10, 2007 18:20:15 GMT -5
ACK, Kevin's reply spoiled it for me cos I somehow ended up seeing the OMG SHADE DIED before I read it. But dangit you and your Shade torturing. He's like the other side of you; Ewan must hate his own character that much so he could kill his own twin. <_< Areutoieuoie. But now it's even WORSE. It's like a fate even badderer than shooting him off his throne and making him into giggly dark Shade. AND SACRIFICING AND STUFF. D: THIS TIME, HE GOT STABBEDED. Which was actually a bit gross, now that I think about that, but I'm mostly sad again, though. Thanks a lot. I'LL SAVE YOU, SHADEEE. *coughgagdies* His own uncley homonculus thing like totally took away his life too, um... AGAIN. Why do you always do that?!?! IT'S LIKE NEARLY REPETITIVE AND EXTREMELY SAD. Otyrytgdfg. Good thing Florence doesn't know about it. BUT I DOOOO! *tackle* D< Ahem... aside from that, I totally enjoyed that chapter. But eww, Dante really had the nerve to reach for Gluttony's tongue and like make him a green crystal. Gag, like fahdarealz. So now I know why Mistah Shadey's grandpa totally left them. Bahhh, at least he's not all being so tempermental about it and stuff. BAHAHA. I don't need to say it, but awesomeness with the action. And I'm glad how you didn't make me all dumboweirdo when I was battling with Toph, Kevin, and the rest. Dahaha. I admit that I got a bit lost while I was reading some parts with them (surprise, surprise), but I caught Shade and Hohenheim's part quite fully. Um I guess? Thanks fah giving the little complicated history thing behind him. That way, I'm not like seriously confused. Though I do feel dumb for not catching things quickly. I'd feel bad if I was Josh, being trapped in... thing, or whatever he's concealed in ands stuff. BAHAHA. My heart has completely fallen thanks to this chapter. Touching... and quite poignant, might I say?!?! Daha.. Um, I make no sense. But I mean it; great chapter. :] DON'T WANNA BE A COPYCATTER BUT UPDATE SOOONNNN. Fahdarealz. >D
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Post by Chaos on Jan 19, 2008 1:05:51 GMT -5
For the thousandth time, this is the LAST time I’m killing Shade and there’s a main reason for this, QUE LA. Anyway, here’s the last chapter of the first plot, enjoy. Chapter 12: This isn’t Our Last Goodbye “Shade?” Josh asked in a helpless way. Elaine was about to run over, but Dante, holding Elaine’s baby brother, grabbed her arm to stop her. “This will happen to all humans who get in our way; all humans in the world will die!” Envy yelled out. Dante gave him an evil grin while Josh and Elaine looked at him in a worried way. Gluttony continued to just look at Envy in an odd way, ready to go back to eat Josh. “Uhn…” groaned Josh with a worried look while Gluttony started getting closer and closer to him. Elaine tried to run out to see Shade, but Dante gave her an evil grin and grabbed her arm with the hand not holding the baby. “Where is Wrath? He should be here for this glorious moment!” Dante realized and then grinned again. Once Gluttony reached Josh, he opened his mouth to begin eating the elf and the crystal fused with him. However… Gluttony brought his face up and Envy, Elaine, and Dante were able to hear some unintelligible babbling. Josh had used the power of the crystal to destroy Gluttony’s jaw. “He used the crystal! Can he do that?!” called out Envy and pointing, making Elaine looked at him with a somewhat calm, somewhat worried face. As Gluttony was wobbling about, still mindless, Josh got up to see a bit of a changed person. The crystal had fully fused with him after he used the power of it and they were lit up with green, vein-like roots coming out from them around him. Some of these ‘power roots’ could be seen in Josh’s eyes as well, making him look powerful and slightly menacing. “Stop it! The crystal is very vulnerable and I can’t let you do anything to it- -” Dante yelled at Josh, ‘pushing’ Elaine’s baby brother back into Elaine’s arms, making her look at Dante in a scared way, but then back at Josh. “No! I’m not taking orders from you anymore! I know what I need to do…” his hopeful voice boomed into a whisper as he turned and looked at Shade before walking over to him, “Shade hasn’t been dead for that long. Look at his eyes; they still have color in them.” “Mmm…” grumbled Elaine sorrowfully and looked down before forcing herself to look at Shade’s dead body. Gluttony was the only one not looking, but not because of his jaw missing—he was now gone. Josh put his hand on Shade’s chest (namely near his heart) and took a deep breath with his eyes closed. Green glowing surrounded the room as Dante and Envy looked in anger and the usual worried expression from Elaine. The noise of the power from the crystal even silenced the new crying of the baby. Suddenly, Envy couldn’t take it. His yelling, “NOO!!” was drowned out as well when he ran in as a possible interference… OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO Jake and Kevin, after sneaking out of Pride’s office with the skull that was his weakness, were flying to where Raffi and Toph were still fighting Pride, which was on the roof. “We’d better finish this guy off soon, I’m getting tired of moving from location to location and these annoying Lai Di.” grimaced Kevin as he held the skull inside a mummy-like wrapping. “There they are!” Jake pointed out, showing what looked like Toph and Raffi slowly losing against Pride. The hard rain was slowly turning into a light drizzle, which was making Raffi unable to easily draw water for attacks. Once getting in their area, Jake was able to do a little stalling by shooting fire at Pride, which didn’t harm his homunculus body. “Did you get it?” Raffi whispered in question to Kevin as secretly as she could, Kevin nodding as lightly as he could. “Get what?” asked Pride forcefully, taking a large step forward on the ceiling. He saw the wrapping of his skull and sweat drops could be seen on his face, “RAH!” he yelled, speeding over and cutting the wrapping with his sword. The skull flew down the roof and landed in a bush below. “Oh no.” Toph whispered. Pride ran a little before forward flipping off the roof. Toph punched the air a few times to shoot large rock pillars from a tile on the ground to smack Pride away for as long as she could. Raffi quickly controlled the water that was in the gutters to go through the skull’s eye sockets and pull the skull up and into Jake’s hand. “Wait! He’s doing something odd…” the voice of Jake began to trail off as he pointed at Pride with his open hand. He started glowing with a fiery aura with his hands clasped together. Once he let go, fire shot all around him and he was now super charged with fire power; literally. “How are we going to get this skull to immobilize him without Pride’s fire destroying the skull?” Raffi asked in a way that seemed very unhopeful. “I don’t know, but we should probably stall him some more. Jake, you try to get the skull on him and we’ll distract him.” explained Kevin. The other three nodded as the distractions used their individual elements to take them safely to the grass below. “Where is my skull!?” yelled Pride, pulling out his sword that had just recently also gained immense fire power with it. “We put it in the garbage.” Toph simply answered, shrugging and pushing her feet to the ground to shoot a big rock at Pride. He cut it clean in half and the room completely combusted into many little rock pieces. “Hopefully this is my turn.” Jake thought, glaring at the little battle. He stayed in human form, but allowed his dragon wings to spike out from his back. Jake flew as slyly and as quietly as he could behind the battle and chucked the skull at Pride. Somehow, he knew it was coming and turned around, allowing the dull side of his sword to deflect the skull and send it flying. “Nice try…” Pride muttered, running to Jake and kicking him with the others. Once they all helped him up, they ran up in front of Pride and were ready to attack. Without another word, Pride ‘closed up’ a little as if he was in a standing scrunched up position. When he shot open, a giant wall of flame that split the building in half and completely blocked one side off from another arose. “Now what do we do?” Toph asked, still in a battle position. Kevin was unable to answer because suddenly, Lai Di agents surrounded the back of them and they were now trapped between the Lai Di and Pride, with Pride’s weakness on the other side of the impenetrable wall. What will happen to Toph, Kevin, Raffi, and Jake?OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO In a very strange and deserted area, a transparent, almost ghost-like Shade was staring ahead. A transparent version of Josh, eyes closed and free of all crystals, appeared in front of Shade before disappearing. “Josh?” Soon after, Envy (not transparent) showed up in front of Shade. “Wha?” Envy looked around, “What’s going on? Where am I, you worm!?” Envy yelled at Shade, putting his arm forward to show his anger. “The Mirror.” Shade answered, not moving and not changing his calm appearance. Envy gasped and turned around to see the giant mirror aimed down a little in front of them by showing a reflection of the mirror’s design. “So what’s on the other side of it?” Envy’s aggression calmed down a little as he half-turned to Shade. “I don’t know. For me, it was a place called the Twilight Realm. That’s what my grandpa reminded me.” answered Shade. “Grandpa? You mean Van Hohenheim?” “Yes.” “You’re telling me he’s still alive!?” Envy’s anger flew up to be red hot again. His voice let out a loud, but eager groan as he touched the stone mirror and stood in the middle of the reflection. “I wouldn’t do that. There’s no way to know where it’s gonna lead you.” Shade said, his calm voice still speaking. “Like hell there isn’t! I’m gonna tell them EXACTLY where to take me!” Envy barked. He stared up at the mirror, “I’ve come to kill him; take me to Van Hohenheim!” The mirror lit up and shined on him, causing him to pixilate from the feet up and cause the Twilight pixels to shoot him through the mirror. Shade just watched the mirror until the pixels vanished from sight and the mirror stopped shining to cause a dead silence. “Josh?” he asked once more, tears streaming down his cheeks before he asked this. Suddenly, he, too, vanished. Back in his body, Shade slowly opened his eyes to see a worried Elaine, holding her baby brother, looking down at him. The whole room was empty except for those three. “Shade? Can you hear me?” Elaine asked, calming down a little when his eyes opened. He was smiling slightly and still had the tears on his face that he had on in the paradox Mirror of Spirits world. “Yeah.” Shade blinked, feeling his tears run down his cheeks. He sniffled and wiped his tears on the back of his hand, “What am I crying for?” he looked at the water from his tears, “Josh?” Shade quickly shot from laying down to sitting up. “He used his powers to bring you back, Shade. After you died.” Elaine answered in her usual calm voice. Shade turned to Elaine and tried as hard as he could to hold back any more tears that he had. “He used the power of the green crystal to fix my body and pull my body back from virtual limbo between here and the mirror. But then what happened to him?” Shade asked to Elaine, who looked at him in a scared way, then looked away sorrowfully, making Shade gasp, “Don’t tell me, don’t tell me he’s gone, Elaine. Josh!” Shade called out after darting to his feet. “Josh! JOSH!” Suddenly, the baby in Elaine’s arms began once again to cry. Shade’s expression turned back to normal when he looked at the child, but he clenched his fists. “Can we finally go home? Can we, Elaine?” Shade asked in a tearful way. Elaine smiled as much as she got and nodded, as they both began to walk out of the room. OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO Dante was gone and alone in the elevator that connected this secret underground city to Pride’s office. “Damn that child.” Dante cursed, pulling down her shirt to look at her rotting in the reflection, “How could he squander the stone like that with my body in such terrible condition!? I’ll have to send Pride down there to teach those boys a lesson.” her shirt was pulled back up when the elevator rumbled. “Ahh…” a voice muttered. Gluttony had appeared by eating through the bottom of the moving elevator. “Gluttony, what are you doing here? I don’t have time for this!” Dante barked at him. “Augh…” Gluttony groaned, looking at Dante greedily and his tongue still hanging out from his jawless mouth. “You don’t understand me, do you? Just hold on, we’ll find you something to eat soon, okay?” Dante asked. “Uh, WHAH!” yelled Gluttony, charging at Dante. Thinking quickly, she clapped her hands together and planned a rebound attack. Once the elevator had made it up, Dante’s body had vanished, but Gluttony’s body was on the floor of the room, dead with green crystals thrown up on the side. Did Dante kill Gluttony and flee? Did Gluttony kill Dante before he was killed? Is Gluttony truly dead?OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO Still trapped, the gang of four watched as Pride opened slightly so that he could see the children. “This is your end. There is no way left to kill me and no where for you to run.” Pride said. They all looked around nervously and Pride chuckled, but ended up being cut off and suddenly fell to the ground. The fire wall vanished and the Lai Di held back their shock by standing in place. As Pride fell forward, his skull, with an arrow through it, was in the back of Pride’s head. “Who helped us?” wondered Kevin. Ahead was a brunette on the ceiling, waving with a bow in her hand. “He’s all yours, kill him!” the voice yelled. It was Florence! They had finally stopped fighting the soldiers inside the building and the soldiers on their side were ready to attack the Lai Di in case they would attack. “With pleasure!” The four of them called back. Toph raised a large rock, Raffi controlled gutter water, Kevin pulled out his sword and froze over the sharp part of it, and Jake made a fire whip. Jake attacked first, then Raffi and Toph, and in the end, Kevin stabbed his sword through the skull and Pride, completely dissolving Pride. “Sorry about being so late.” Florence said when she finally got to their area. They all turned around to where the Lai Di were. Silent, they all moved their hands and made rock holes to escape from and were all gone, leaving no tracks or trace. “You made it in perfect time, though.” Raffi said with a triumphant smile. They all took a large embrace, as friends would, and realized that, hopefully, these homunculi were gone for good. Where did the Lai Di go? Why did they leave without fighting? Are the homunculi truly all gone?OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO The wind blew hard the next day as the sun was very barely rising. It looked so much like sunset, even though it was obviously dusk. Elaine knew that it was time that Shade knew about his other friend’s death, so they visited Kabuto’s grave near the militia building that had been destroyed. Elaine sat on a bench while Shade was staring down at the gravestone. “Elaine…” Shade muttered, turning around to Elaine. His face was lifeless, but he wasn’t crying, “It’s so hard losing someone that you love.” “I know, Shade. You’ll get through it, though.” Elaine created a fake smile to try and cheer Shade up as she placed his right hand to Shade’s hand and sat him down next to her. “I don’t want to lose anyone else.” Shade said slowly after getting the lump out of his throat. “You won’t! Just because two have left this world doesn’t mean that they’ve left your heart.” answered the pink-haired girl, but Shade simply shook his head. “I couldn’t help them. I was gone while Kabuto was dead, and he died just trying to help end the terror. Josh sacrificed his life to bring me back. I’ve died so many times and this is my punishment for letting it happen. If I can’t protect myself… how can I protect the ones I love? When will it be that everyone around me that I care about all die?” Shade’s voice started breaking and he tried very hard to keep his tears back. “That won’t happen, Shade. Death is not a punishment. It has to happen sooner or later, and it came too soon for these too.” Elaine answered seriously, but tears forming in her eyes. “You can’t avoid death. I’ve died and come back, but death has still haunted me. And now, it all comes in at once.” answered Shade, “I don’t want to lose you, or anyone else.” Elaine just looked at Shade for a while and they both let tears run down their faces. Slowly, they got closer to each other and began to kiss. The sun finally rose up to shine on the deserted area where the lone gravestone stood: Kabuto Yakushi. Finally, it’s all over. End of Plot One
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Post by charles finley. on Jan 19, 2008 1:13:15 GMT -5
BAM. First reviewer to this chapter. Ohhh, that's ownage right there.
Very good, like always. I SEE FMA THINGZ LIKE WOAHHHH. Josh and Shade is the whole new Edward and Al. For sureeeee. XD; And the whole stuff with Shade and Elaine and the KISSY KISSY GO GO! XD
CAN I EAT HIM NAO?
... Update soon! :D
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Jan 19, 2008 3:31:38 GMT -5
Eep! So this is when Shade and Elaine kiss! (: Bahaha, but in a... friendly way, right? Nothing... serious? Okay, just making sure. I'm glad it's not all dramatically written and all something like homgheleanedcloserandshedidtoo, so maybe that was a bit of a hint that it just happened. Awkwardd. Shade really is pretty likeable. Boo for ladies men getting all the girls. Anyway, wow I still can't believe you updated! That made me even more excited since I just came home and like, wow, I'm doing something else that's like... totally exhilarating. (x But woww, there's a lot of pret-ty weird stuff going on around here. And that bolded stuff in the end looked like something you wanted to 'mentally point out to me' cos I'm dumb and don't get things right away. :( But oh well! Any chapter up is all I care about. :] Not that I didn't like it. Goshie, I practically loved it to pieces. It revealed all sorts of strange things needed "to be solved," but moreover with the fact that new stuff is developing as apposed to it ending, which is good since it'll basically be longer! And longer is always better, but that will mean complication for me. Bahhh, oh well. I love how it seems like things are about to come to a closing, but it apparently isn't over yet. Always sets up a new beginning and an even better ending whenever you get to finsihing the story. I clearly don't need to repeat this every single chapter, but as usual, the action scenes were put together quite nicely. And that battle with Pride seriously put me in a fix- I was wondering if they were seriously going to lose, until Florence showed up! :) And with Shade "dying" again, it just kind of struck me like... a ton of bricks. Baha, well, not only cos I cried when he died... again, but cos of the way he kept mentioning it at the end about how it was his fault about losing two people he really cared about and all that shaz. Ya feeeeeel? Anyway, I better stop cos if I keep on going, I might end up rambling on pointlessly cos I wouldn't know what to talk about. And I know how much you hate that. (: Just anticipate for a "longer, more making sense-ness" one next chapter so that it can give you something to look forward to- and ATN, too! <3
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Post by YFWE on Jan 19, 2008 12:22:45 GMT -5
Holy flatulence, Batman!
Great chapter, a great end to "Plot One" or whatever you call it. I see Shade was brought back to life, as well. That was good. Death is not cool unless someone everyone hates, like Madame Defarge from Tale of Two Cities, dies. (My apologies, I'm writing my paper on Tale of Two Cities while I type this. It all kinda gets mixed up at times.)
Did Elaine know that she was kissing a dead guy, though? Or, at least... formerly dead? That would kinda be a turn off for me. But since I don't have any plans of kissing Shade, or Madame Defarge (There I go again. But while we're on the subject, it'd be even worse to kiss Mme. Defarge. She's old. And she likes to knit. Knitters are bad kissers. Remember that for your later years.), I think I won't have to worry.
I kinda had a problem with the diction of the final sentence, though. Wouldn't it be better to say "Finally, it was all over"? Or perhaps I am not understanding what you were doing. It was just kinda weird, because you shifted from past to present there.
Plus, it ISN'T over, is it? This is just the end of plot one. It SHOULD'VE looked like:
Finally, it was all over. (for plot one lolz =D)
Some insightfulness there for you.
The bold typing at the end of scenes was interesting, too; reminded me of a commercial break. Like "What will happen next? Find out when we return!" or "Find out next time on... (insert show here)."
And, uh, yeahhhh... I so owned Pride with my awesome sword of truth and justice and whatnot. I was like "Oh yeah, I'm such a pimp. Bow to me."
Yeah, I need to work on and finish my essay so I can upload my totally awesome new fanfic. Nice jobbbb! =D
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Post by Chaos on Feb 10, 2008 4:09:41 GMT -5
I don’t really think Elaine was focusing on that, or even kissing Shade for the thrill or anything. XDD
Chapter 13: Decisions, Possibilities, and Worries
Shade and Elaine were inside Shade’s house, waiting for the rest of their little gang to show up. Elaine was laying on the couch in a way where she could see the door while having her head neatly rested on an arm of the couch.
“Think they’ll be coming soon?” Elaine wondered, fixing a cushion on her feet. Shade was in the kitchen, using his powers to wash the dishes.
“They should be here any minute.” answered Shade, putting away the final dish and walking into the living room. Almost right after, the door opened as Jake, Trixie, Spud, Florence, and Toph, who closed the door.
“Hey guys.” Jake greeted as they got in. Elaine got off the couch and they all got together.
“What should we do?” wondered Florence as she walked closer to Shade and smiled at him, getting a smile back.
“I’m a little curious on what my parents are talking to Megan about.” Shade brought up, making a possible choice.
“Then let’s go and find out.” Spud said and smiled. They slowly made their way down the nearby hall and got to a room where the three of them were, Megan simply sitting, the dad holding his head angrily, and the mum holding her stomach and drinking some ginger ale.
“I just don’t get it, Megan. How could be rejected out of three colleges that you applied to and then lose your job as a weathergirl? What do you have to say for yourself?” Shade’s dad wondered.
“I’m not pregnant.” she simply answered, the parents groaning in return, “Besides, how was I supposed to know I read the weather wrong and it destroyed one of our buildings in Miami?”
“What are you going to be doing with yourself?” Shade’s mum asked, setting down her glass of the half-full ginger ale.
“Don’t worry; I’ve got another college application on the way. Nothing can go wrong.” Megan simply smiled and walked out of the room, the group hiding for a moment when she left, but stayed to watch Shade’s mum and dad in the room.
“Hey, so how long have you had this stomach thing?” Shade’s dad asked, checking his wife’s face to make sure she didn’t have a fever, which she didn’t.
“Oh, it’s just like a stomach bug.” Shade’s mum answered, taking a second sip of her drink and setting it down again.
“Well yeah that or,” he began before clapping and then pointing at her stomach, “you’re pregnant!” they both started laughing and Shade’s dad left the room, but then Shade’s mum’s laugher slowly died. She picked up her ginger ale and left the room too.
“Oh wow.” Trixie muttered to Shade, who simply shrugged.
“Speaking of parents, mine are being all annoying. I’ve wanted to know what being drunk is like because I know so many people who have before and they won’t let me.” said Jake out of nowhere.
“That’s… that’s just weird, man.” Spud said with a smile which went away. He looked at Trixie oddly for a moment and then they all heard a sigh from Toph.
“Umm… do you guys think that I’m really not necessary anymore for you guys? I just feel like I don’t fit in with your social lives or events unless I’m doing something powerful or action… I just don’t think I can help you guys much anymore.” Toph told them slowly.
“Toph, you know that’s wrong and we’d all hate it if you left the group!” insisted Florence, shooting forward a little bit, but then Toph started walking to the door and opened the door.
“Sorry, but I have to go.” the door closed and Toph had left. A cell phone went off and Jake’s voice could be heard,
“Hello?” he answered, “Oh, Haley, what do you want? Huh? How could you hear people saying that they’re shutting down Dad’s factory? Listen, I can’t talk right now, I have to go.” Jake said, pressing the phone button and then putting his cell away.
“What was that all about?” Florence asked.
“Something about Haley hearing over the phone about Dad and his workers or something and his factory moving. Anyway, Haley said my parents want me home soon, bye.” said Jake and then he departed as well.
“I guess that we can leave as well.” Spud said, talking about him and Trixie. Another cell phone went off and Elaine answered it, taking the phone call into the kitchen.
“So my mum was telling me before I left the house to come here about some great news, and I’m a little curious, so I think I’ll take my leave. Bye, Shade.” Florence said, kissing Shade and then leaving last. Elaine came back from the kitchen with an odd face.
“Well what’s wrong?” this line was being said a little too much today.
“You know how a while back I was pretending to be the holy mother and went into hiding for a little?” Elaine asked, “Well the people from Riore are looking for me and want to get me sent to jail. They’ve found out that I live here in New York.”
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Florence walked back into her house and petted Dougal before trying to find her mum.
“So, Mum, what’s the good news that you were telling me about?” she asked when she went into the kitchen and found her mother. Florence found an apple and began to eat it.
“I found out that you have a grandmother!” Florence’s mum announced, making Florence spit up some of her apple across the kitchen room.
“No way! I want to see her, where is she staying?” Florence asked excitedly, not even asking if it was her mum’s gran or her mystery dad’s.
“Uh, Newsky Clinic. Do you know where it is?” she asked her daughter. Florence immediately nodded and grabbed the flowers sitting on the table before sprinting off. Florence’s mum sighed and pulled out a mop to wipe up the apple Florence spat on the floor. Once Florence finally got to the hospital and found her gran’s individual room.
“Are you Marylin Lindsay?” she asked the old woman who was lying in bed. She turned to Florence and nodded with a smile.
“Who are you, a new nurse? You should put your uniform on before you get in trouble.” the sweet woman answered.
“Uh, no, I’m your granddaughter, Florence.” Florence answered with a nice smile as she walked closer.
“Oh my gosh… I can’t believe it. I’m so sorry our first meeting has to be in a hospital, but I’m in fragile condition right now,” Marylin said with a few coughs, “Now come, sit near me, and tell me all about what I missed!” her frown went away and Florence sat down, immediately telling Marylin a lot.
Back at Shade’s place, he and Elaine were still talking about the upcoming issue.
“How did they find you!?” Shade asked in shock.
“Well, they are also a magic city. They could have been near Magus Bazaar when we were there a week ago looking over Kabuto’s grave…” Elaine answered, Shade worrying even more.
“Any other problems right now?” asked Shade.
“Well… actually, they were able to track my movements and they’ve found out where I am. They’ll be here any minute.” Elaine answered nervously, making Shade’s eyes shoot out wide in shock. Shade’s parents had left to go to two different places while Shade’s sister was still in the backyard. Suddenly, the doorbell rang.
“Oh no… quick, hide!” whispered Shade, Elaine now freaking out as well and nodding. She shot upstairs as quietly as she could. He walked to the door, debating on whether or not to answer the door again as the bell rang once more. His mum would probably be home any minute, but luckily, she left to go somewhere from the backyard and could get back to her room without seeing whoever would be at the front door.
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Jake was following his parents leaving the house and pulled out his vibrating phone, pressing the ‘ignore’ button before even checking who it was.
“Jake, it’s me,” Haley’s sister said when the phone went on voicemail, “I just went to dad’s office and found out that the company’s moving to Mexico! What are we gonna do, what’s Dad gonna go?” Haley asked on the phone, being in a file room of the building. A door opened and slight light shined on Haley, making her gasp at the door opening.
“Okay, Jake, we’ll be out for a little while, probably before you go to bed. Make sure that you do your weekend homework and good-night.” Jake’s dad said, leaving and closing the door.
“Now’s my chance.” Jake told himself, locking the door. He sped for the fridge and grabbed out a six-pack of beer, setting it on the table nearby. He pulled off one of the cans and opened the can, smelling the beer. Jake hesitated and held it back for a moment.
Shade’s mum got home with a small bag, seeing Megan sitting on the picnic table holding her envelope as she stared out into space.
“Is that your college acceptance letter?” she asked, Megan nodding, “Well remember, whatever happens, you can always stay here.” Megan opened the envelope, but then paused, holding it to her chest.
“I need to do this alone.” Megan told her mum. She nodded and kissed Megan’s forehead before leaving. Megan took another deep breath and pulled out the letter in the envelope. She unfolded it and held it to her chest for a moment and then finally built up the courage to read it.
Shade’s mum walked into the house and immediately went upstairs into her room, just as Shade figured.
“Okay…” Shade’s mum sighed, going into the bathroom. After a while, she got up from the toilet that she was simply using as a seat. Shade’s mum walked over to the pregnancy test that was on the counter and, like her daughter, waited a moment before reading the results.
Toph had written a letter about her possibility of leaving the group and the mysteries it had in it. She went to Trixie’s house and lifted her mail hole flap, but waited a moment and thought over putting the letter in or not.
Spud was back at his house, holding his cell phone and on Stacie’s number. He took a deep breath and then pressed the call button.
”Stacie? I need to talk to you for a moment, can you come over?”
Back at the hospital Florence and Marylin were laughing for a little until Marylin started a coughing storm. Florence let out a large frown and Marylin sighed after all the coughing.
“Florence, there’s something big I need to ask you.” she said.
“What would that be, Gran?” Florence asked in response, smiling now.
“Florence… I need you to pull the plug on my life support system. I’m way too old to handle all this sickness. Please, it’s the only way I can feel myself again.” Marylin said seriously, with a weak face and tone.
“Oh, no. No way am I doing that, I am sorry.” Florence said.
“Please, I’m dying here…” Florence’s gran said. Florence sadly looked at the plug and stood up, walking over and taking another look at the suffering face of her grandmother.
Shade finally decided to answer the door and two ‘magical police’ people answered the door. They looked just like regular police, but they wore a different badge.
“Uh, how can I help you two?” Shade asked.
“Mr. Chaos, we believe that you know the whereabouts of the woman who faked being a Godly figure in Africa, a Miss Elaine Flowaoral?” one of them asked.
“Uh, well I might…” Shade said nervously, scratching the back of his head and tightening his bandana, as he usually did in tough situations.
“Mr. Chaos, if you don’t tell us the location of Ms. Flowaoral, you are an accomplice. Do you know where she is?” the same officer repeated. Shade stood there for a little and debated for a while about answering.
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Yeah, it’s a very short chapter. =( Just think of it as a second prologue, I guess. Anyway, just read and review, it’s pretty late and I should get to bed soon.
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Post by charles finley. on Feb 10, 2008 4:16:08 GMT -5
SHADE'S MOM IS PREGG0RZ!!!!!! XDD;
Haha. Oh noesss. Cliffhangerss. D: YOU EVIL CHILD.
Update soon, so I don't keel you. Kays?
SHADE'S MOM IS STILL PREGG0RZ. XD
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Feb 10, 2008 12:31:29 GMT -5
Wow, that pregnancy test thing so reminded me of George Lopez when Angie took one. LOL if that's it, then I know what's going to happen! *claps* FOR ONCE IN MY LIFE! :] Um, that was a lot of suspense there, which ALSO reminded me of George Lopez. And the college acceptance with Megan and with Jake's dad losing his job... reminded me of that, too. Wowzah that's a ton of references in one episode that I actually noticed. The part with Florence and her grandma brought me back to a time with my own two years ago. :[ But also on a lighter note, I remember seeing it from, probably, another television show (I don't remember which one). At least I've come to notice a ton of stuff... and uh, made me realize... stuff. :] But yeeaah, this chapter was a great way to start off an entirely new plotline, I'd say, which is of course still a mystery to me. But we'll see for ourselves. ;D
But bah, I slept at almost nine o' clock last night (earlier than the weekdays). :[ I should've stayed up like way longer so I could've read it sooner. Especially since I just noticed while scrolling about on the forum. *shot* Now this makes me the person who hasn't updated the most recent out of you, Kevin, and myself. :] I better work on fixing that. So uh, that's all I have to say. Pointlessness hath ended. Farewell!
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Post by YFWE on Feb 10, 2008 17:07:08 GMT -5
I quite enjoyed that. =] I liked how you set up possible storylines for the next part, with various characters. This'll probably make it pretty complex, and I do like complex stories, so I think I'll enjoy it. The whole pregnancy thing was kinda weird, as was Florence's scene with her grandma... in a good way, though. It'll be interesting to see how that all pans out. Forgive me, but I'm not in an extremely talkative mood today, so I don't have much else to say about this chapter, at least not like last chapter. But I did like it a lot, rest assured.
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Post by Chaos on Feb 19, 2008 2:02:54 GMT -5
Ahh yeah. Cliffhangers. Anyway, here’s the second chapter of the second plot, where it answers all your questions. And no, Raffi, you’re probably ALL wrong.
Chapter 14: The Truth is Revealed: Shade’s Amazing Escape Theory
“Mr. Chaos, if you don’t tell us the location of Ms. Flowaoral, you are an accomplice. Do you know where she is?” the same officer repeated. Shade stood there for a little and debated for a while about answering.
“No. Elaine Flowaoral is not here.” Shade answered sternly. The two officers frowned.
“Well that’s too bad. We have here a search warrant because of our large thoughts on her being here. Let’s go.” one of the officers told Shade and then the other officer, holding out the search warrant. Elaine, who was standing on the stairs, gasped and sped upstairs as quietly as she could.
“Whoa, don’t I get any time to put away anything embarrassing?” asked Shade to stall.
“Step aside, son. If we find Elaine here, you two will be put to a prison where you will not be able to escape.” the second officer told Shade, making him gulp loudly.
“You know…” Shade said quietly, “If anyone wanted to escape, they would TAKE THE FLIGHT POWDER IN MY ROOM AND LEAVE OUT THE WINDOW!” he yelled upstairs. The officers knew that this was to help Elaine and one of the officers quickly covered Shade with a sphinx hair net.
“I’ll find the girl!” the first officer said as he started to run upstairs. Up there, Elaine had heard Shade’s words and nabbed the brown bag full of white flight powder. She quickly threw it upon herself and opened the window right when the officer got into the room.
“FREEZE!” the voice barked. Elaine gasped and sped out the window right before the officer could grab her and she started to fly off. It was late, but she flew up high so no one who would be out this late would see her.
“I have to round up the others and help Shade.” Elaine whispered to herself. Back at the house, the two officers were dragging Shade off in their vehicle to who-knows-where.
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After a while, Shade’s dad came back to the house to see Shade’s mum sitting on the couch, watching TV with her hidden pregnancy test to remind her.
“Hi, honey.” Shade’s dad said to his wife, kissing her when he walked over to the couch.
“Honey, I need to talk to you,” she said, “How would you feel… if we were to have another child?” she continued in a hopeful tone.
“Oh no, hell no. HELL no.” Shade’s dad automatically said, taking a handful of popcorn on the table, “Why?”
“Well… not too long ago, I took a pregnancy test… and it was positive.” Shade’s mum said, Shade’s dad spitting up the popcorn and glaring at his wife in shock.
“WHAT!?” he yelled.
“Wait, wait, honey--” she wanted to continue, but Shade’s dad continued to be going crazy about this news.
“I’M NOT ACTUALLY PREGNANT!” Shade’s mum was able to yell to get Shade’s dad to quiet down.
“How?” he asked.
“I had my period after taking the pregnancy test. So just to be sure, I retook the test and it was negative.” she explained to Shade’s dad, who nodded.
“Have you heard anything about Megan’s college letter?” Shade’s dad asked Shade’s mum.
“I’m about to go ask, I just wanted to tell you all this news first.” Shade’s mum answered, kissing Shade’s dad, “I love you.”
“I love you, too.” Shade’s mum walked into the kitchen and threw away the pregnancy test before going outside to where Megan was, sitting and looking like she was depressed.
“So, are you accepted?” she asked slowly to Megan, who looked up to her mother and setting down the letter.
“They accepted me.” Megan was able to say after a while, “But I don’t think I want to be accepted.” she muttered.
“Why?”
“Well, I’ve been thinking on how much I’ll miss this house and everyone in it! I’d really prefer to have a job and living here, like I did when I was a weathergirl.” Megan explained, “So can I stay, Mum?” Shade’s mum smiled.
“Of course! I’m sure we’ll all be so glad to have you here even longer!” Shade’s mum said, the last part of her sentence being said through her gritted teeth. They went together for a hug. In this hug, Megan looked at the acceptance letter once more and set it down, smiling and enjoying this embrace.
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Florence stood at the plug of the system that seemed to be keeping her gran alive. She held her hand out for a moment and then sharply pulled her hand away from the cord.
“No, I just can’t do this!” she spat out, “I’m not going to just kill the gran I just found out that I have.” Florence said, walking over to Marylin.
“But Florence…” Marylin began to say, but Florence simply shook her head.
“This isn’t the way to feel better. You just need to hope for the best and believe that you’ll recover.” Florence told her gran.
“But--” the grandmother was still trying to tell Florence something.
“I’ll see you tomorrow…” she simply said, walking to her gran and kissing her on the forehead before leaving. Marylin sighed and looked down.
Back at Jake’s house, he stepped downstairs when his parents got home, his mum immediately going upstairs. Jake had gone down with his sunglasses on.
“Hey, Dad? I need to do a report on being drunk for Health. What’s the cure for a hang-over?” Jake asked, showing that he had drunk the beer.
“Oh, there’s no cure. You start out with this massive, throbbing headache that follows you all day. You throw up… practically every hour, and there’s this terrible thing where you just spit out a large wad of spit and it just hangs there.” Jake’s dad explained, making Jake start to heave.
“Excuse me.” he was able to breath, speeding upstairs. Haley just got home not too long after.
“Hey, where’s Jake?” she asked her dad, who pointed upstairs. Haley thanked her father and darted up the stairs, meeting with her brother when he left the bathroom.
“Jake, it’s great! They’re not moving dad’s company anywhere or closing it down.” Haley told Jake, who let out a large groan.
“What are you talking about, Pipsqueak?” he asked, holding his head for a moment.
“Well, I tried to call you and left a message on your phone…” Haley muttered.
“Yeah, like I answer your phone calls.” laughed Jake until he groaned again and held his stomach with his open hand. Jake walked into his room and slowly closed the door, making Haley sigh and roll her eyes.
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Spud was still lying on his bed and had just gotten off a long conversation with Stacie. Most of it had been the usual business that they would talk about every night, but Spud had to end it in a different way.
“I can’t believe I just broke up with a cheerleader who likes me.” Spud groaned, “I don’t even know if I fully LIKE Trixie!” he let out an annoyed sigh.
“My life is so confusing.” Spud groaned. He thought about what he had said for a moment and then realized that this was the first confusing thing to happen to him. Spud sighed once more and flew on his bed to close his eyes, slowly passing into a sleep.
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It had been a while now and most of Jake’s hang-over had passed, so he took off his sunglasses. He heard a knock on his window, that had the emergency alarm off, so he went over and opened it. Elaine, Jake, Kevin, Raffi, Ash, and Florence were waiting there for him.
“What are you guys doing here?” Jake wondered, rubbing his eyes from being tired.
“Shade’s in jail, we have to get him out.” Florence quickly told him.
“We’ll explain later, come on!” quickly answered Elaine. She still had a good amount of flight powder for herself and Florence. They were able to keep up pretty well for first-time flyers.
“Do you know where this place is?” wondered Kevin as they made their way out of the New York border.
“No, but I do remember our rendezvous point where we would always meet if we got separated.” Florence said, looking at Jake, who also knew.
“Yeah, middle of Kansas, where the Mirror of Spirits used to stand. The sages still stay there to ‘guard’ the area and in case the Mirror is moved back there.” answered Jake, “I just have one question: wouldn’t Toph usually be with us?”
“Actually…” began Ash as they all sorrowfully looked down.
“Toph sent Trixie a letter telling us that she would just not be helpful enough in our group. She left us to join the Underground Railroad she remembers traveling on with me and Jake.” Florence was able to say.
Finally, after a long and silent fight, they were able to get to the Mirror Chamber, most of them having to endure the torture of the large heights of the tower.
(A/N: Haha, I remember this from PttSoW.)
“That was tiring.” sighed Raffi, looking around in the barren area. The only thing changed from this place was that the Mirror wasn’t there. The giant rock slab where the reflection would shine still stood there as well as the area where the Mirror would stand.
“Hey, that’s odd,” Kevin pointed at the stone that rose high that was slightly broken, “Why is that one different from the other five?”
“The sages told us about when Huntsdad killed that sage. Judging by the markings, it was the Water Sage…” answered Florence, looking around and completely remembering this area.
“More evil floats about, great heroes.” a group of voices said. The five sages appeared in front of them, bowing down and then up.
“We know, Shade is in jail and stuff.” Ash said a little impatiently.
“As tragic as that is, we have found an evil that far surpasses that. In the near future lies a giant battle that will ensue for an unknown region.” the sages began to explain to them, “A gathering of your enemies will cause the downfall of our world, but we see two new faces that shall be a great assistance.”
“Okay, so do you think we will be able to find them?” Elaine asked, a little slow to ask this, not knowing the sages.
“You will meet many faces in your trials, but only the specific two will help you. One will live near a giant jungle not too far from here in a giant kingdom.” one of the sages explained, pointing in that direction.
“The second is a magician who is part of a mysterious group who travel the Atlantic Ocean.” a second sage did the same thing. Both the jungle and the Atlantic were in the same direction.
“We’ll just have to sit here and wait for Shade then.” Florence simply said.
“If he can find us.” sighed Elaine, walking a different direction. The sages bowed down and vanished as many of the people in the group walked off in different places of the Mirror Chamber.
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Shade woke up with his hands chained together and brown clothing over most of his clothes.
“Wha… where am I?” Shade asked no-one-in-particular, holding his head. He was in a jail area by himself, except for the guards outside his cell. The jail area he was at had many other cells for other people, but he was the only one there.
“Keep all water away from this one.” one guard told the other as Shade began to eavesdrop on the conversation.
“We are, do we only have dry air being pumped in?” the second guard asked, the first guard nodding. Shade walked to the ends of his cage and noticed it was suspended from the ground and he suddenly gasped, remembering that terrible moment…
“The guards were always careful to keep any water away from us. The piped in dry air and had us suspended away from the ground. Before giving us any water, they would bind our hands and feet so we couldn’t control it. Any sign of trouble was met with cruel retribution.”
Hana.
(A/N: Yeah, I quoted Heaven’s Darkness. SUE ME. But please don’t.)
Shade sighed darkly, making the guards look at him for a moment and then back at each other. From where he could, he looked at the sky, but shook his head.
“I won’t use that power, I never will.” he muttered. Shade slowly stood up from being on his knees in the middle of his cell. Then, he walked to the front of his cage and glared at the guards, jumping back a little and shooting his hands in front of him.
“I can’t move!” the two guards yelled. Shade, looking down and his hair covering his eyes, showed a dark grin and both guards uncontrollably moved to the front of Shade’s cell.
“Which one of you has the key?” he wondered to himself, looking at both guards. The first guard had the key, so Shade controlled the second guard to smack into the cell and got knocked unconscious.
“WHAT!?” the first guard yelled, but Shade had now controlled him to pull the key out and free Shade. He glared at the guard and shoved him across the whole area into a wall. Shade pushed his hair out of his face once he got out of the jail where Hana had originally been placed in by the Huntsclan.
“The magical community must have found it and used it for another jail...” Shade muttered, looking around at his new surroundings. He was in a desert area with a large field not far off. A giant city was the only thing that kept him from freedom. Shade’s slow walk turned into a dizzy jog and then a run until he got to the field. Panting, Shade was able to control as much water out of the nearby grass, making him think of Hana even more. With the water, he moved his hands about even more and started using it to carry him toward the city.
“What’s that?” a voice from the city wondered as Shade drew closer.
“It’s that guy who was trapped in the prison!” a female voice yelled as many screams started. As Shade got into the streets of the city, he controlled the water to push him into the air, freeze on his feet, and make a ‘snowboard’ out of the ice.
“Now I can get back home in style.” Shade said. As he skated down the large slope of the street, he looked up at a sign on a building. This city was in Missouri, pretty far from New York. However, it was very close to Kansas, the rendezvous point for the group if they ever split up.
“Once I can see my shadow, I’ll call up Dark Shade to take me there.” Shade muttered to himself. He was surprised by the lack of guards here, but decided to take a turn into a hidden alley and called out Dark Shade from his dark shadow.
“What do you want?” Dark Shade asked in a tone that seemed annoyed.
“You’ve got to take me to Kansas, the Mirror Chamber.” Shade said, making his dark ‘opposite’ go into a little trance in remembrance of the place.
“I’ll… take you there.” he slowly said, pixilating Shade into the sky and he floated up with him.
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It had been a while now and they were still waiting in the Mirror Chamber.
“If we’re going to help mankind, we have to leave soon.” Jake said sorrowfully. Suddenly, they all heard a noise from above and looked up to see pixels dropping down and forming a figure, Dark Shade floating next to him before disappearing in his shadow.
“Shade!” Florence gasped, shooting to her feet and running to hug Shade tightly. He did the same and began to take off the prison clothing that was over his main clothing.
“How did you get out?” Ash asked as they were all in shock.
“I’ll explain later, why are we all here?” asked Shade in a response. The five sages reappeared.
“It’s time for you to set out to the jungle…” a sage said to them, Shade looking confused.
“And in your words, Shade, we’ll explain later.” Florence said, smiling and winking at Shade. This made Shade laugh a little. All of them began to leave… except Elaine.
“Aren’t you coming?” Shade asked Elaine.
“I’m still wanted. The magical police won’t find me here and the sages can protect me. I think it’ll be best if I stay here for now.” explained Elaine with a warming smile.
“If… that’s what you want.” Florence said, shrugging for a moment. Once outside the tower of the Mirror Chamber, Shade, Jake, Kevin, and Raffi turned into their dragon forms. Ash made her vampire wings appear and Florence rode on Shade’s back as they started their flight.
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Okay! Update! I could have made it longer, but… meh.
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Post by charles finley. on Feb 19, 2008 2:13:00 GMT -5
first to reply. again. i own.
LOOK MA I CAN FLY LIKE A BAT. *goes all bat like and flies* XD;
Awww. You made her not pregg0rz. You suck. So badly. XD; PREGNANT WOMAN ARE FUN TO WRITE! ... *looks down at the ground* Not that'd I know, but ... Okay, yeah, onward.
Prison. Haha. That must suck. XD
Yeahhh. UPDATE SOON. okay? got it? okay, good. =D
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Post by YFWE on Feb 19, 2008 20:16:45 GMT -5
First, let me say that I loved the chapter title. Hilarious. =D
So it's time to get Shade out of jail, like when Harold and Kumar escape from Guantanamo Bay. That part was pretty sweet, I must say.
I'm having a lot of trouble concentrating right now, so I can't seem to say what I wanted to say when I read it earlier, and I apologize for that. Perhaps someday, when I'm a little more right in the mind, I could add more.
But I did enjoy it immensely. I do hope an update is in the future.
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Feb 20, 2008 20:31:28 GMT -5
I know I probably shouldn't reply especially since I'm in an EXTREMELY horrible mood, but seeing as I'm sure you'll keep on bugging me until I do it, I guess I can just give it a shot; you know, replying and not sounding so negative at the same time?
Anyway, pushing that aside, this was an interesting, but somewhat strange, chapter. Shade's kidnapping was especially my favorite part; I'm not sure why. I surely saw the HD/A:TLA reference staring at me right in the face there. And it was especially nice how you added that ominous feel into that particular scene. Shade's escape was no different, sort of. It was pretty bomb. Just reading that can actually have me be able to picture him being held up against his will in some "jail" like that. Basically, all of the scenes in the chapter including Shade really got me on the edge of my seat. I didn't think he would get caught that easily, and that Elaine would be the one who's in distress. But I guess I should know you by now; you like to put the dame in that situation instead of the damsel. Or uh, something like that.
As for the rest of the scenes? Hmm, they were pretty alright, but to be honest, I didn't really feel that "vibe" in like most of them, if you know what I mean. I guess what I'm trying to say is, I expected it to be a bit more unexpected and weird or something, but I guess they weren't all that bad. I mean, it could've been worse, as I've read in like a ton of other stories and fics (not that I thought they were). But I guess small things will grow into even bigger and better scenes that will probably knock my socks off later. Sooo yeah, that's all I have to say and uh, keep it coming.
...Uggh, I don't HATE the chapter (in response to what you said on AIM). Aujhdflihas. I'm just saying that there were those parts I didn't really enjoy as much as I thought. Gosh, was my reply seriously that negative? :/ If yes, I obviously "failed at trying to be positive in an emo mood" then. I do hate to sound a bit, I dunno, stupid?- especially now. But every story has those "times," too, not that I actually thought it was a bad chapter, in case you still think that.
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Post by Chaos on Feb 23, 2008 4:47:33 GMT -5
Uh… I don’t know what to put up here. First chapter of the actual adventure, so have fun. OH, WAIT! There is a song that you need to listen to so that the piece can make sense, the link is in the title or it’s here: www.halleonard.com/audio/04002312.mp3Hopefully you’ll be able to follow along with the parts of the song and the chapter, even if the chapter probably moves slower. Chapter 15: The First Hero: River of the AncientsAll was silent as the heroes were traveling through the first and very easy part of the jungle. They were all traveling on a very sturdy raft that was moving slowly down the river by the powers of Shade and Raffi. Kevin was in the main front while Ash and Jake were more in the middle and Florence was close to Shade. “This is much easier than the sages foretold us.” Kevin said a little suspiciously, trying to see if he could look ahead. The trees on both sides of the jungle got in the way, though. “Calm down, Kevin. I think it’s kinda nice. It’d be romantic, but Jake is NOTHING like Lewis and he is a dating fraud.” answered Ash with a tiny grin. Jake groaned quietly and looked to the side. “I think this part of the jungle’s almost ending, we need to make sure we’re fine.” Raffi warned them casually, looking up from the water. Shade did the same. Kevin was able to see something on the horizon. “Look, it’s a giant castle!” he pointed at the giant splendor, but this was a bad thing. At the end of the jungle was a giant drop down into the main jungle, which was many, many feet below. The ‘castle’ stood on its own cliff at the end of the jungle. “We have a problem!” Jake yelled, Kevin looking at his surroundings. He then remembered the water below and turned to Shade and Raffi. “Raffi, control the water to go across this giant gap and I’ll freeze it to make a bridge.” Kevin told Raffi, who nodded and ran farther ahead on the raft. She began to do this thing for Kevin. “I’ll try to stop the raft from falling…” muttered Shade, doing the same thing as Raffi, only controlling the water below them to move the opposite way. Kevin had begun to freeze the ‘bridge’, and once it was done, the trio began to control the ice that was now under the raft to slowly take them across the ice bridge. “Oh no!” yelled Ash, pointing at one direction. They were only halfway across the bridge when a giant flock of giant birds came over, their big beaks sticking out. “They’re gonna crack the bridge!” Shade yelled, jumping off the raft and trying to run farther ahead. The others did the same, but they didn’t make it in time and the birds flew right into their bridge, cracking and shattering the thick layer of ice. “AHHH!!” they all slowly began to fall into the deep jungle below. “Is everyone alright?” Florence asked everyone, hearing multiple ‘yes’s or something along the lines of that. “Hey, it’s dangerous here.” a voice said, making all of them jump. They saw a gecko-type creature eying them, dressed in normal clothing though. This included brown pants, a matching vest, and white gloves with a jade green color over the finger parts. “Who are you?” Jake said suspiciously, making sure that this wasn’t an enemy. “I’m Giovanni, but I’m better known as Geo.” Geo told them, “Ever since those crazed birds appeared here, my species has gone about and killed everyone who comes here, thinking that they want to destroy the river. I seem to be the only understanding one in our tribe right now, but I’m sure they’ll find you soon.” “And why should we trust you?” Shade asked, crossing his arms for a moment. “Because I can show you where the stairs are that can take you to the giant city above, if that’s where you want to go.” Geo answered, smiling calmly. Everyone looked at each other for a moment and then nodded. A sound could be heard from a small distance. “What’s that?” Raffi asked, worriedly. “That’s them, we have to go. Travel by the river.” replied Geo, leading the way. OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO The others ran to follow him, watching the clear blue river flowing and rushing down the way. Sometimes, they had to make sharp turns in parts of trees, but they were able to make it through most of the thick jungle… until they got to one part. It was a clearing with two ways out: they way they came and a second way. “Our exit’s blocked off!” Kevin noted, pointing at the living plants that were covering the place. Once they were all in the clearing area, living plants sprouted behind them and they were trapped in. From the trees that covered them, many geckos like Geo came in. The sun had been down for a while and the moon was nearing the center of the sky. “So what are our options?” asked Florence as they all got into battle positions. “We have to fight, it’s our ONLY option.” Geo answered, running forward first. He pointed his right index finger at a few ‘warriors’ and sludge shot out and covered them. Shade and Raffi grinned, running forward and taking water from the grass below them to whip many warriors to the ground. “Freeze that water and toss it here!” called out Kevin. Shade turned and froze the water stream in front of him, ‘tossing’ it to Kevin. He began to control it to float in front of him with his left hand and then pulled out his sword, slashing the ice. This caused it to shatter into many pieces and attack the warriors. However, their best efforts were not good enough against the increasing number of gecko warriors. Shade was the first to notice the bright shining of the full moon above. “SHADE! There is one power you can do to stop them!” Florence yelled to Shade, trying to fight off a circle of warriors who were around her. Obviously, she was referring to the galaxy power that he learned from Hana. “I… I can’t!” he called back, freezing a few warriors by taking the water from a nearby tree. Shade noticed everyone else being captured and struggling. “You have to!” Florence’s voice called back, making Shade look up and then back down. He took some water from the grass below him and stuck to the cliffside that was part of the reason on why they couldn’t leave. (A/N: This part with Shade’s ‘comet’ control is really the calm, flute part of the song, if you… know what I’m talking about.)“Here I go.” he quietly sighed, moving his hands back and forth in a calm and light way. Shade blocked part of the moonlight, so they all had stopped fighting and the heroes were able to escape the grasp of these warriors, going to the safest part of the clearing. “Is he really going to…?” began Raffi, looking up sorrowfully. Florence was the most sorrowful, having to ask Shade to do something that he never wanted to do again. After a while, a very ice-coated comet burst through a little of the top on the cliffside and crashed into the clearing, the ice covering the comet doing the most damage. “Ohhh…” sighed Shade, feeling weak after this. He started to close his eyes and the ice over his feet keeping him on the cliffside starting to crack and break. Florence gasped and ran over, seeing as Shade would any minute fall down. Once he did, he landed safely in Florence’s arms. “You okay, Shade?” she asked in a very nice tone, Shade nodding. He slowly got out of her arms and got onto his feet, holding his head for a few seconds. “We have to go.” Geo said, pointing at the living plants that blocked their way. They had wilted and died due to the intense temperature change around them from the ice of the comet. “I have a little plan for us to help block them off.” Raffi said, trailing to the back where Kevin and Shade were. As they ran, she told them her plan and the nodded. Raffi and Kevin gained their dragon wings and Kevin pulled out his sword. As they got to a narrow part of the jungle, trees surrounding both sides, Shade and Raffi pulled water out from grass or nearby plants. Raffi began to fly over Shade and then Kevin flew over Raffi. “Go!” the three of them yelled. Kevin swung his sword back and forth while Raffi and Shade twisted their arms back and forth, making their water stream cut through the trees in the same manner as Kevin’s sword. All of the cutting being done made many trees fall down and gave them a good amount of time to get farther away. “We should almost be there.” Geo told them as they made a few turns away from the river and getting close to the riverside. OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO They ended up into another clearing, but this one was much larger and there was a location where something giant once stood. “What the heck is that supposed to be?” wondered Ash, pointing at the location. Geo had been looking at the place in shock. “They took the stairs! They pulled them off from here and took them somewhere else…” he sighed, looking down. Kevin walked over and noticed something interesting: the ground moved down where something large had been moved. “We can follow this path to take us to the stairs.” Kevin told them. Like before, a sound could be heard, but it was clearly fierce drum hits. “More of them are coming, they always bring along that kind of thing when it’s a massive attack.” Geo said. “Then we have to hurry.” Kevin said, putting his sword back into its holder. They all began the chase once more, following the trail of the ground that had been pushed down. Once they heard the drum beats getting closer, they ran faster and faster, seeing a few bodies of them. “Look out!” Florence yelled, pointing at a few that made their way in front of them. She shot an arrow at one and Kevin slashed the others, so they continued in a calm way, as the drum beating seemed to have subsided. “We’re close, I can tell.” Shade said, talking about his gut feeling. “Wait, they’re coming again…” muttered Geo, hearing drum taps. They ran even faster until they finally got to the giant stairs that went along the cliffside. Suddenly, a giant group of them popped out and surrounded them, many of them holding bombs. “Dark Shade, hurry! We need you to pixilate this set of stairs back to the end of this trail! HURRY!” Shade yelled, making his dark self appear. He nodded and shot in front of the stairs, starting to pixilate the stairs first. “Hey, hey, they’re lighting the bombs!” Jake began to moan worriedly. “I’m doing the best as I can!” grunted Dark Shade, the stairs now being fully pixilated away. The bombs had now been thrown, it was only a matter of time. “Dark Shade!” they all yelled and the bombs exploded. OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO Back at the clearing where the stairs should be, they all pixilated to the grass, lying down. “Ohh… we’re alive!” cheered Raffi when everyone got up. Dark Shade was still fully pixilating the bridge and slowly moving it into the right place. Everyone let out a deep sigh of relief. “There, another mission accomplished.” Dark Shade said, mostly in an annoyed and sarcastic tone. He returned to Shade’s shadow and they all looked around before looking directly at the stairs. “We have to go get the first hero now.” Florence said, looking back at the group, who nodded in return. “I’m afraid that I’ll have to stay here with my tribe. Maybe I’ll be able to explain the situation, but you’ll need luck on your way there.” Geo said with a smile. “Aww, you have to leave?” Kevin asked a little sadly. He liked Geo’s simple way of just giving orders or leading the way to places. Geo simply nodded. “You’re gonna want to NOT fall from those stairs and you’ll probably have to defeat those birds on the meadow that’s between the end of the cliff and the Rock City.” he explained, turning and starting to walk away. “Bye then…” Jake was able to mutter. Quickly, Geo stopped and turned around. “If you ever need my help, you know where I’ll be.” his last words came clear and he laughed, letting out a grin. After that, Geo had run off now. Everyone looked back to the stairs and slowly walked into that direction. OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO A little up the stairs, their walking on the mossy set of stairs turning into a jog and then a run, as they seemed very eager to get to this Rock City. “This… is… so… annoying…” Ash was able to say between breaths of being tired. Finally, they got to the top, the giant city looking even bigger in person. They all smiled triumphantly and started to run that way. “Here they come!” Shade said, pointing at the flock of giant birds headed their way. He kept his smirking face, almost as if he wanted the birds to appear. He and Raffi quickly stole the water from the grass below them that was flying in the breeze. “Help over here!” Kevin called to Raffi or Shade. Raffi ran over. “What do you need?” she asked. “Freeze over the blade of my sword.” he told Raffi, pointing at it. As Raffi did so, Kevin took the blade with both hands and then started to slash viciously at the birds when Raffi finished. Shade laughed and jumped into the air, spinning in a circle, which made the water move that way and smack some of the birds. “Jake, I need some flame arrows!” Florence yelled to the dragon who was slashing away some birds. He nodded and Florence pulled out a handful of arrows. Jake shot fire at the ends of the arrows, making Florence grin. “There ya go!” he said, waving and then turning back to the birds attacking, slashing more and more. “Thanks.” she let a grin show and she started to quickly use her flame arrows before they could let out or burn the handle part of the arrow. It was very odd how so much battling caused their want for even more battles. Once the final of the batches of birds were killed, they turned to the giant city and used their various flight forms and such to get to the building area. “Know what we’ll face?” Florence asked as they looked at the giant walls of the city. It was the wall shaped the city like a box, but a giant castle stood tall in the middle of it. “When do we?” Shade asked with a little laugh. He turned into his full dragon form and grabbed Florence, flying upward. The others came up behind him as well and they looked at the greatness of this new city that lay in front of their eyes. OoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO Oh, this chapter was fun and easy for me to make. Even if it’s a bit short, but you know, eh. You may simply write a nice or hateful review. Have fun now, see ya.
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