fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Feb 19, 2007 20:31:40 GMT -5
***Before you read any further, if "Homecoming" made you cry, this one might just have you sobbing*** Premise: This is what would have happened if Jake wasn't able to save Rose at the end of "Homecoming". Chapter One: The Destruction of the Huntsclan "By the power of the Pantheon of Aztec Skulls, I hereby wish for the destruction of all..." The Huntsman began, but before he could get any further, Rose zapped him with her staff knocking him out and the skull landed in her hands. "The destruction of all Huntsclan!" Rose finished. Jake lied there helplessly, for he was bound and gagged as the love of his life wished for her own death. Loa-Shi, Haley, Fu and Sun also stared in shock. The marks of the Huntsmen glowed as they were lifted into the air screaming in terror and pain , a second later, they were gone, never to be seen again. Rose unchained Jake, who stood up. "Why?" He asked her. "I told you there is only one way for this to end and this is it: the destruction of the Huntsclan." Rose replied. "But you're one of them... That means..." "I know what it means, but this is how it has to be. Even if we destroy the skulls, the Huntsclan still know your human form. They could find your family like they did mine. This way they'll be safe. They'll all be safe." Rose finished as the still unconscious Huntsman floated into the air and disappeared forever, all that was left was his cape. Rose then started to lift into the air. "Thank-you Jake! For everything. I'll never forget you." Rose called, but Jake grabbed her hand. "Let go Jake." she told him. "I'll be okay. I promise. I'll be okay." As she said this her heart sank. She was lying and Jake knew that just as well as she did. Jake then let go of her hand as he grabbed the final skull. "We have to use the skull to save her!" Jake said as Fu, Loa-Shi, Sun and Haley approached him. "Sorry kid, but we need to destroy the skulls. Their power is just too dangerous." Fu said. "To use them for your own personal gain..." Lao-Shi started to say, but Jake cut him off. "It wouldn't be for my personal gain! It would be for hers! She deserves to be with a family that will care for her." He held up the skull, but Lao-Shi knocked it out of his hand. "Lao-Shi!" Sun yelled. ------------------------------ Rose shut her eyes. She was scared. She was very scared. She didn't want to die but it would be the only way Jake's family could be safe. "I love you, Jake." She said as she disappeared just like the rest of the Huntsclan. ---------------------------------------- Jake grabbed the skull and held it up in the air. "I w--" Jake looked up, but it was too late. Rose was dead. "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" Jake cried as he slammed the skull on the ground, shattering it and thus destroying all the skulls. Jake fell to his knees sobbing. "We should get you home." Lao-Shi said as he approached Jake. Jake looked up at him with pure anger and hatred as his claw appeared and he slashed open his grandfather's cheek. Sun gasped, Fu fainted and Haley screamed as Lao-Shi fell to the ground trying to stop the bleeding. Sun and Haley then approached Jake and helped him stand up. "Jake, we need to get you home..." Sun said softly. "Just leave me, please." jake said, the tears coming out of his eyes like a waterfall. Well, that's the first chapter. Can I get 3 reviews before I update? I just want to know if I'm doing an okay job. Oh, and you can now get your pitchforks and chase away Gramps, or me...
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Post by YFWE on Feb 19, 2007 20:52:55 GMT -5
Woot. Rose died. Yay for Rose dying. XDDD
Anyway... it wasn't half bad!! Update soons!
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Post by The Pantheon Dragon on Feb 22, 2007 6:31:50 GMT -5
Uh...wow.I didn't read your little notice of how it might be if Jake hadn't been able to save her but still,great job!Hope to see more from ya soon. LP
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Feb 22, 2007 20:58:21 GMT -5
Chapter Two: At Home There was a knock on the door and Susan answered it. What she saw almost gave her a heart attack. What she saw was a dragon Sun and Haley clutching Jake by the arms, trying to keep him on his feet. Jake's head was lowered. "What happened to him?!" Susan asked. 'Nothing, he's just really upset." Sun said as both Haley and her powered down. "At the Homecoming Dance, the Huntsclan tried to put all the Aztec Skulls together. The whole Huntsclan is dead." "What about Rose? She was our ally." "That's why Jake's upset. Rose is dead, too." Sun explained. "Your son tried to save, but Lao-Shi took the skull away from Jake. By the time Jake got the skull back, it was too late." "Oh my god!" Susan gasped. She held up Jake's head. His eyes were closed, he was asleep, but the bottom of his eyes were bright red and his face was pale. "Let's get him to his room." Susan said. She slung her son onto her back as Sun and Haley followed her to Jake's room. Susan put her son gently down on his bed and they left. By the time they got downstairs, Susan was crying. "What's wrong?" Sun asked. "I just can't believe my dad would do something like that. Jake loved her and most likely wanted to spend the rest of his life with her and now she's gone. When Rose disappeared after the Grand Equinox Hunt, Jake took it real hard. He wasn't himself. But now that Rose is dead, what if Jake tries to take his own life?" "I don't think he would do that." Sun said. It was bad. Very bad. But Susan, Sun and all the others wouldn't know how bad it was going to be. That is, until the next morning. Well, there is the second chapter. I know it wasn't as good as the first chapter, but it will get better. 88 and 89 strike back and 2 of the characters will reveal what they think of Jake as a dragon, one of them will make your jaw drop, like this: . Please review, I'm giving you puppy dog eyes...
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Post by twg519 on Feb 26, 2007 9:49:15 GMT -5
Uh oh! Superdooperdepressedangrysuicidaljakeyness!
ya, um, update soon.
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
Posts: 1,938
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Post by fudogg on Feb 27, 2007 23:16:46 GMT -5
Thank-you for being the first person to review my newest chapter twg519. I'd like 2 more reviews before I update again. Please and thank-you.
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Mar 9, 2007 20:22:24 GMT -5
OH MY GOSH!!!!!!!!!!! AMAZING! PLEAS PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE!
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
Posts: 1,938
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Post by fudogg on Mar 9, 2007 21:17:35 GMT -5
Without further ado, here is chapter 3:
Susan woke up in the morning when she heard screaming from upstairs. Susan ran upstairs to see her son half asleep in hysterics. His claws were out in the place of his hands and he had scratched up his shelf in which his alarm clock was on.
"ROSE! ROSE! NO! ROSE!" Jake screamed. Susan ran over to her son, but in Jake's fit, his claws went up and almost scratched Susan. Susan pinned Jake's arms to his side.
"HALEY, I NEED YOUR HELP!" She called. A couple of seconds later, Haley appeared at the door.
"What is it, mommy?" She asked.
"I need you to hold Jake down while I try to calm him down." Haley went into her dragon form and pinned Jake's arms to his sides and held him down while Susan tried to calm him down.
"Shh. Jake, you're okay. Calm down, sweetie. Just relax. I'm here." Susan said comfortingly, but it was having no affect on Jake who continued to struggle under Haley's grip.
"It's not working. Keep holding Jake down. I'm going to call Sun."
Sun arrived 5 minutes later and tried to help Haley hold Jake down.
"What can I do? Jake can hurt someone!" Susan ranted.
"I don't know if you have any choice but to--" Sun started.
"What? To chain my son to his bed?! Jake needs help. He needs it fast." Suddenly, Jonathan walked into the room.
"Morning famillia. I'm back from my business trip. OH MY GOD! WHAT HAPPENED?!" Jonathan shrieked when he saw the sight.
"Jake's friend Rose was killed in a terrible accident." Susan said.
"When did this happen?"
"Last night." Susan continued. "Jake tried to save her, but he couldn't. He's in hysterics right now and I can't calm him down!"
Jonathan looked at his son who was still struggling against Haley and Sun's grip.
"Maybe I should call Dr. Gimple." Jonathan suggested
"He's not sick! He's traumatized! He needs a mental help, that's what he needs!" Susan argued.
"Mental treatment will help but it will won't fully get Jake over his grief." Sun said.
Suddenly, Jake stopped struggling and he woke up. He started to whimper.
"Rose... It's my fault." By this point, tears were sliding down his cheeks. "It's my fault. All my fault."
Susan sat down on Jake's bed and embraced her son.
"It's not your fault, Jake. You did everything you could to save her..."
That's chapter 3! Please review!
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Mar 9, 2007 21:31:29 GMT -5
awwwww porr jakey! *cries* i just wanna hug him!
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Post by twg519 on Mar 10, 2007 18:57:16 GMT -5
When I read this story, I get an entire traumatic, drama filled episode playing in my head. Not many stories do this for me, UPDATE SOON!
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
Posts: 1,938
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Post by fudogg on Mar 10, 2007 21:14:07 GMT -5
Thank-you. Both of you.
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on Apr 12, 2007 13:33:29 GMT -5
Chapter Four
Susan sat on Jake's bed holding onto him until he stopped crying, which was at 5PM, Jake was physically and mentally exhausted and fell asleep 2 minutes after Susan let go of him.
That night, Jake had horrific dreams. He saw Rose staring down upon him and glaring.
"You didn't save me Jake!" Her spirit haunted him.
"I tried!" Jake choked out.
"Well trying wasn't good enough!"
Jake sat straight up in his bed, his sweat pouring down his face.
"Rose..." He whimpered. Jake snuck downstairs and went outside.
"I TRIED MY BEST TO SAVE YOU ROSE! I'M SORRY! MY BEST WASN'T GOOD ENOUGH! AND I TAKE FULL RESPONSIBILITY FOR YOUR DEATH! I'M SO SORRY, ROSE!" Jake called out as loud as he could. By this time, Jake was choking on his tears. He couldn't live like this. He went inside and went into the kitchen where he noticed his father's sleeping pills. Sometimes Jonathan had trouble sleeping.
"I'm coming, Rose." Jake took off the top and poured all of the pills into his mouth. He then went to the fridge and found a soda, he gulped it down and a few seconds later he collapsed on the ground.
Luckily, Susan came downstairs for a midnight snack when she saw her son on the floor with an empty bottle of sleeping pills in his hands.
"Oh my god!" Susan gasped. She quickly grabbed the phone and called 911. "Hello, I need n ambulance! My son just swallowed a whole bottle of sleeping pills."
About 5 minutes later, an ambulance arrived and Jake was put inside. Susan and Haley sat by his unmoving figure, both were fearing it was too late.
Please review, and I'll update soon.
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dragon.up.resource
Dragon-in-training
ISH BAYLEEF
Poor Pikachu. >.<[ss:American Dragon | Season 1]
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Post by dragon.up.resource on Apr 12, 2007 13:38:01 GMT -5
wow. OMG JAKEY! HE"S DIEEEEEING .. UPDATE UPDATE! Btw, totally killed my mood to write more Bayleef tonight. XD Ah well. It's in a good way. Keep writing!
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Post by huntsgirls1fan on Apr 14, 2007 18:57:00 GMT -5
OMG! JAKE CAN'T DIE! No way! :0 update soon!
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fudogg
Young Warrior Dragon
I've seen Dead Man's Chest enough times to know that this is not a good thing...[ss:Lao Shi]
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Post by fudogg on May 13, 2007 13:51:19 GMT -5
Chapter Five- At the Hospital
Susan and Haley were in the waiting room. Sun had called Lao-Shi, Sun, Trixie and Spud and told them Jake had attempted suicide. Trixie and Spud arrived first, then Sun, but Lao-Shi never showed up.
They were all sitting in the waiting room when the doctor showed up.
"Is Jake going to be alright?" Susan asked.
"Yes. You found him just in time. If you had been just 1 minute later, it would have been too late."
"Well, he just ate..."
"We are giving him a special chemical that will help his barf out the pills. Now, why would your son want to kill himself?"
"He lost a very good friend in an accident." Susan explained. "He thinks it's his fault although he did everything he could to save her."
"That's common."
"Can I see Jake now?" Susan asked.
"No. He hasn't finished barfing out the pills, yet."
"Okay, eww." Haley said.
"Yeah." the doctor said. "I'll be back in 5 minutes."
It was a long five minutes. Everyone was very worried, even Sun. But, soon the doctor came back.
"You can see him now."
They all entered Jake's hospital room. Jake lied there, unmoving, as if he was dead.
"Jake?" Susan asked as she sat down on the bed and stroked Jake's hair. "Jake, are you okay?" Jake's eyes opened slowly.
"Why? Why couldn't you just..." by this time, Jake had started crying again and he had started choking. "Why couldn't you just let me die?" When Jake said this, Susan embraced her son as tight as she could.
"I would never let you hust lay down and die." Susan comforted her son. Trixie, Spud, Haley and Sun watched Susan try to sooth her son as he whimpered and cried out.
It was incredibly painful for Spud. Jake was his best friend, other than Trixie. Jake had included him on his missions, saved him from Pandarus, helped him find his hundredth use for his "100 Use Cream" and a whole bunch of other things and Spud couldn't watch Jake suffer any longer.
"I should go." Spud choked out. "I can't watch this." Spud then turned his hel and left the room.
"By, Jakey." Trixie then followed Spud. Only Sun and Haley were there. Haley couldn't leave, no matter how painful it was to watch her only brother like this. Jake needed all the support he could find.
"Jake, just relax." Susan pleaded. "Just lie down and put this all behind you, please."
Jake tried his best to listen to her, he lied down on his bed, but scrunched himself up and continued to whimper.
Well, I really have to say, this is not my favorite chapter. It felt very awkward. There is more to come and the next chapter is when it gets real juicy. So keep reading and reviewing, and don't give up on Save Jake Long Day 3!
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