Post by yfwe on Feb 15, 2006 15:50:22 GMT -5
So like.... the sequel to You Raise Me Up. This one's celebrating it's one year anniversary on the 23rd, I believe. XD Anyway... I feel that of my 19 fanfics, this one was the most poorly written. But hey, what can ya do sometimes? But, yeah, here is the first chapter- four overall.
“The Friends My Dad Had”
Jake Long’s dad was always a little on the oblivious side. Kind of like Jake’s friend, Spud, only Jake’s dad was an adult, and usually, this type of thing goes away by the time you reach that age, right? Well, that wasn’t the case with Mr. Long.
I mean, if you had married into a family of dragons, wouldn’t you have figured it out by about the, say, 15th year of marriage? Not Mr. Long. 15 years the secret had been kept, and at this rate, he could be of an old age and STILL not know.
What I mean is that Mr. Long had married a woman who was a descendant of dragons. Jake’s mom’s father was a dragon, a Chinese one at that. He had the ability to transform into a dragon. These powers were partially passed down to his daughter, Kana. However, transforming powers skip a generation, so the next dragons would be Kana’s son and/or daughter. They came to New York City, where Mr. Long married Kana, and they had two children: Jake and Haley. These two received the transforming powers of the dragon, although they were also part-human, since that’s what their dad was. So, now Jake is 14, and has been entrusted by his Grandpa with the responsibility of becoming the American Dragon, and to defend all magical creatures living in New York City. Jake’s powers began appearing at about the age of 12, so Mr. Long has had “dragon business” going on behind his back for about two years.
Mr. Long had always been referred to as just a little “jumpy” by his colleagues, as well as his family. Still, he had some really good friends. Friends that would always go the extra mile for him. But that’s where the trouble started; it involved Mr. Long’s friends.
“Hey, dad!”, said Jake as his dad came home from work that night. Mr. Long sat down, looking a lot different than he usually does when he comes home. Usually, he’s singing. “Uh, dad? You okay?”, Jake asked.
“Hm? Oh yeah, bud. Don’t worry about it. Uh, honey?” He turned to Jake’s mom. “Could I talk to you for a minute?” The two disappeared into the adjoining room.
“Hm, this is kinda strange. This isn’t like Dad”, said Jake. “I know I shouldn’t do this but...” He averted his gaze away from the room where his parents were talking. “Ear of the dragon”, he said, and his ear morphed into that of a dragon’s.
“Jake, this isn’t any of your business”, said the ever-tattling Haley. “If you don’t stop, I’m going to tell Mo-om”
“Hey, didn’t you see Dad? He looked really upset”, argued Jake. “You want to know, right?”
“Well...”
“My thoughts exactly”, Jake concluded. And he turned his dragon ear towards the conversation.
“So, uh, what is it, dear?” asked Kana. She, just as her kids, knew that this wasn’t like Mr. Long, or Jeff- he never came home without coming in the door singing something.
“Kana... you know Bob Holden, my golf buddy from the Bagel Lovers downtown?” Said Jeff.
“Hmm.. Oh wait, isn’t he the one that gave the roman candles to Jake for his birthday?”
Jake smiled sheepishly. Good ol’ Uncle Bob. Bob wasn’t really their uncle, but everyone seemed to have a person named to be a family member, but wasn’t.
“Yeah, that’s him. Well, I got a call from his wife today. It seems that last night, he was... attacked. It would of been that he was mugged, except that no money or anything was taken. He just had scratches everywhere. The police said that they were like... claw marks.” He looked up at his wife. “This really scares me. He’s in the hospital right now, but the doctors said that he’ll be okay. Still... I’d like to go down there and visit him. If it’s all right with you.”
“Oh, sure. I’ll just take the kids to Grandpa’s. It’s going to be okay, Jeff”, she said, putting her hand on his shoulder. “Bob’s all right. You should be happy about that”.
“Haley, we’re goin’ to Grandpa’s house”, Jake said to his sister. “Finish up an’ let’s go.”
“Yay! Grandpa’s house! But, why, Jake? Is Daddy okay?” Replied Haley.
“Oh, yeah, Dad’s all right. It’s jus’ one of his friends, that’s all.”
“Ooh, is he the one who gave you the roman candles for your birthday? That guy’s funny”, giggled Haley.
“Yeah, it is. Now let’s go. We have t’ walk over.”
INTERMISSION
Just was thinking about this, and I thought I’d put in an intermission. This won’t be something I’ll do often. Just like to put it in for good measure. Get back to the story in a sec.
Hey! New cherry Pepto-Bismol! I like cherries. This is reason... to dance!
New Cherry Pepto!
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NEW CHERRY PEPTO!
Ok, I’m done.
“Grandpa!”, exclaimed Haley, as she ran in to meet Grandpa.
“Why, hello, Haley, Jake. What is, how you say, up?”, said Grandpa.
“Uhhh... just great, Grandpa”, said Jake, trying not to laugh.
“Yes. Jake, could I speak to you for a moment?”, asked Grandpa. “Haley, stay with Fu Dog.”
“What up, Gramps?”, Jake asked the old yet wise dragon. But he could already tell. It was going to have something to do with Bob Holden.
“Jake, I was hoping that you and I could go out for a few minutes. I have heard whatever attacked Bob Holden could be out again tonight. There may be no problem; it just seems a little suspicious to me. What say you, young dragon?”
“Uh, no problem, G”, Jake said. “But, uh, how did you know that it may be back out tonight?”
Grandpa was staring out the window. “Because this Bob Holden is not the first to be attacked. There have been two other cases, each of which have the same injuries. Also”, said Grandpa, “I had nothing to do so I went to the scene of each attack.”
“Now, there are two things that shall come out of this”, Grandpa reasoned. “First, each victim had been spotted at the exact place they were attacked at many times before. The victims were there every day, so someone had been watching them; knowing where they were going to be. And second”, continued Grandpa, “I did a little research. I was able to use a spell to track the attacker, and every time, it’s goes back to...a house. A house where a normal human might live...but these marks, they’re like claw marks. No ordinary human could do that. That is all.”
“Hmm...well, so where are we going to go?”, asked Jake.
“I have reason to believe that the next victim could be victimized tonight, and it is at the convenience store across from Spirits, the place where Bob Holden was attacked. The attacker has been going in a pattern, so according to the pattern, this should be the next place.”
“A’ight, so let’s get a-movin”!”, exclaimed Jake. “I’d really like to meet whatever this thing, an’ when I do, KA-POW! That’ll let him know not t’ mess with the American Dragon! Hah!” And with that, Jake did a superman leap- right into Fu Dog, who just so happened to be walking in”
“Whoa, easy, killer!”, laughed Fu. “Save up your energy for the thing that’s out there!”
“Yes, Jake. We mustn’t underestimate whatever this creature is. We will need to stay sharp, and be ready for anything that shall come our way. Oh, and one more thing”, said Grandpa. “I shall inform you upon the person that we will be trying to protect. Or at least who I think is being targeted, since he comes there every day. His name is Gary Long.”
Jake gasped.
“I did not think it was true, but...is it someone you know?”, said the now wide-eyed Grandpa.
“Yeah. That’s my uncle.”
END
Ooh, teh suspense. XD Hope you liked; update coming soon.
“The Friends My Dad Had”
Jake Long’s dad was always a little on the oblivious side. Kind of like Jake’s friend, Spud, only Jake’s dad was an adult, and usually, this type of thing goes away by the time you reach that age, right? Well, that wasn’t the case with Mr. Long.
I mean, if you had married into a family of dragons, wouldn’t you have figured it out by about the, say, 15th year of marriage? Not Mr. Long. 15 years the secret had been kept, and at this rate, he could be of an old age and STILL not know.
What I mean is that Mr. Long had married a woman who was a descendant of dragons. Jake’s mom’s father was a dragon, a Chinese one at that. He had the ability to transform into a dragon. These powers were partially passed down to his daughter, Kana. However, transforming powers skip a generation, so the next dragons would be Kana’s son and/or daughter. They came to New York City, where Mr. Long married Kana, and they had two children: Jake and Haley. These two received the transforming powers of the dragon, although they were also part-human, since that’s what their dad was. So, now Jake is 14, and has been entrusted by his Grandpa with the responsibility of becoming the American Dragon, and to defend all magical creatures living in New York City. Jake’s powers began appearing at about the age of 12, so Mr. Long has had “dragon business” going on behind his back for about two years.
Mr. Long had always been referred to as just a little “jumpy” by his colleagues, as well as his family. Still, he had some really good friends. Friends that would always go the extra mile for him. But that’s where the trouble started; it involved Mr. Long’s friends.
“Hey, dad!”, said Jake as his dad came home from work that night. Mr. Long sat down, looking a lot different than he usually does when he comes home. Usually, he’s singing. “Uh, dad? You okay?”, Jake asked.
“Hm? Oh yeah, bud. Don’t worry about it. Uh, honey?” He turned to Jake’s mom. “Could I talk to you for a minute?” The two disappeared into the adjoining room.
“Hm, this is kinda strange. This isn’t like Dad”, said Jake. “I know I shouldn’t do this but...” He averted his gaze away from the room where his parents were talking. “Ear of the dragon”, he said, and his ear morphed into that of a dragon’s.
“Jake, this isn’t any of your business”, said the ever-tattling Haley. “If you don’t stop, I’m going to tell Mo-om”
“Hey, didn’t you see Dad? He looked really upset”, argued Jake. “You want to know, right?”
“Well...”
“My thoughts exactly”, Jake concluded. And he turned his dragon ear towards the conversation.
“So, uh, what is it, dear?” asked Kana. She, just as her kids, knew that this wasn’t like Mr. Long, or Jeff- he never came home without coming in the door singing something.
“Kana... you know Bob Holden, my golf buddy from the Bagel Lovers downtown?” Said Jeff.
“Hmm.. Oh wait, isn’t he the one that gave the roman candles to Jake for his birthday?”
Jake smiled sheepishly. Good ol’ Uncle Bob. Bob wasn’t really their uncle, but everyone seemed to have a person named to be a family member, but wasn’t.
“Yeah, that’s him. Well, I got a call from his wife today. It seems that last night, he was... attacked. It would of been that he was mugged, except that no money or anything was taken. He just had scratches everywhere. The police said that they were like... claw marks.” He looked up at his wife. “This really scares me. He’s in the hospital right now, but the doctors said that he’ll be okay. Still... I’d like to go down there and visit him. If it’s all right with you.”
“Oh, sure. I’ll just take the kids to Grandpa’s. It’s going to be okay, Jeff”, she said, putting her hand on his shoulder. “Bob’s all right. You should be happy about that”.
“Haley, we’re goin’ to Grandpa’s house”, Jake said to his sister. “Finish up an’ let’s go.”
“Yay! Grandpa’s house! But, why, Jake? Is Daddy okay?” Replied Haley.
“Oh, yeah, Dad’s all right. It’s jus’ one of his friends, that’s all.”
“Ooh, is he the one who gave you the roman candles for your birthday? That guy’s funny”, giggled Haley.
“Yeah, it is. Now let’s go. We have t’ walk over.”
INTERMISSION
Just was thinking about this, and I thought I’d put in an intermission. This won’t be something I’ll do often. Just like to put it in for good measure. Get back to the story in a sec.
Hey! New cherry Pepto-Bismol! I like cherries. This is reason... to dance!
New Cherry Pepto!
And buy in the next 5 minutes, and you’ll get a free ringtone featuring Haylie and Hilary Duff’s “Our Lips Are Sealed”! We know we couldn’t actually sell these for money, so come in and get it!
NEW CHERRY PEPTO!
Ok, I’m done.
“Grandpa!”, exclaimed Haley, as she ran in to meet Grandpa.
“Why, hello, Haley, Jake. What is, how you say, up?”, said Grandpa.
“Uhhh... just great, Grandpa”, said Jake, trying not to laugh.
“Yes. Jake, could I speak to you for a moment?”, asked Grandpa. “Haley, stay with Fu Dog.”
“What up, Gramps?”, Jake asked the old yet wise dragon. But he could already tell. It was going to have something to do with Bob Holden.
“Jake, I was hoping that you and I could go out for a few minutes. I have heard whatever attacked Bob Holden could be out again tonight. There may be no problem; it just seems a little suspicious to me. What say you, young dragon?”
“Uh, no problem, G”, Jake said. “But, uh, how did you know that it may be back out tonight?”
Grandpa was staring out the window. “Because this Bob Holden is not the first to be attacked. There have been two other cases, each of which have the same injuries. Also”, said Grandpa, “I had nothing to do so I went to the scene of each attack.”
“Now, there are two things that shall come out of this”, Grandpa reasoned. “First, each victim had been spotted at the exact place they were attacked at many times before. The victims were there every day, so someone had been watching them; knowing where they were going to be. And second”, continued Grandpa, “I did a little research. I was able to use a spell to track the attacker, and every time, it’s goes back to...a house. A house where a normal human might live...but these marks, they’re like claw marks. No ordinary human could do that. That is all.”
“Hmm...well, so where are we going to go?”, asked Jake.
“I have reason to believe that the next victim could be victimized tonight, and it is at the convenience store across from Spirits, the place where Bob Holden was attacked. The attacker has been going in a pattern, so according to the pattern, this should be the next place.”
“A’ight, so let’s get a-movin”!”, exclaimed Jake. “I’d really like to meet whatever this thing, an’ when I do, KA-POW! That’ll let him know not t’ mess with the American Dragon! Hah!” And with that, Jake did a superman leap- right into Fu Dog, who just so happened to be walking in”
“Whoa, easy, killer!”, laughed Fu. “Save up your energy for the thing that’s out there!”
“Yes, Jake. We mustn’t underestimate whatever this creature is. We will need to stay sharp, and be ready for anything that shall come our way. Oh, and one more thing”, said Grandpa. “I shall inform you upon the person that we will be trying to protect. Or at least who I think is being targeted, since he comes there every day. His name is Gary Long.”
Jake gasped.
“I did not think it was true, but...is it someone you know?”, said the now wide-eyed Grandpa.
“Yeah. That’s my uncle.”
END
Ooh, teh suspense. XD Hope you liked; update coming soon.