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Post by Chaos on Sept 6, 2005 9:59:33 GMT -5
Ok, I know no one's on, so I'm writing this so I can see reviews after school. Part 1 [Shade/Freezy] Prolouge: Before the Trip In the mountains, I was laying down with Florence sitting next to me, the spring flowers flying off some of the trees. I grabbed one of the flowers flying around in the wind. "Here." I told Florence, handing her the flower. "Oh, Shade! You're so sweet!" Florence said. "But you are definitely sweeter..." I replied, we were about to kiss. Both of our watches rang but I ignored mine, but sadly, Florence paused and looked at her watch. "Shade, I'm sorry, but I have to go. Well, see you at the trip!" She told me, running off. I groaned and fell back down on the grass.
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Post by magenta on Sept 6, 2005 10:11:35 GMT -5
Good beginning. Please continue soon! ^_^
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 6, 2005 17:23:24 GMT -5
yes real great beginning plz continue when you can
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Post by Chaos on Sept 6, 2005 20:23:52 GMT -5
Alright, I'll continue now, then I have to get off.
Chapter 1: Toward What Seems As Paradise I met up with Jake, Spud, and Trixie after school. "Hey, guys, what're we doing today?" Trixie looked over at me and told me, "Remember? We're going on a camping trip." Trixie told him. "Again?" Spud asked, taking out his bag of marshmellows from his pack. "No, this is one with the school, Spud!" Jake reminded Spud. "Oh yeah, that's why I brought this load of stuff..." I muttered. The three of them moved up in line to get on the bus. "Also, I'm thinking about telling Florence the truth, she's always busy and she's my girlfriend. Besides, I never told Jake, and before that I was basicly evil, I must tell her soon." I said. "Shade, I'm not so sure, I remember last time..." Jake told me, having a flashback of the ski trip. "Yeah, yeah, but Florence is smart and kind, she wouldn't hurt a fly." I said. "AIYYA!!!!" Yelled Florence for far away. "What was that?" Spud asked. "Doesn't matter, we're on the bus!" Trixie said. Once everyone was seated and Profeser Rotwood was talking, Florence entered the bus and sat next to me. "Hey Florence!" I said. "Oh, hey there." Florence replied. I was about to open my mouth and talk when the bus jerked foward and Florence flew to the seat next to me and I hit the wall and slept the whole way there. "Wow, Romeo sure does have a way with words." Trixie laughed, the bus slowly driving on the way to the campsite.
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Post by warewolven on Sept 6, 2005 20:27:27 GMT -5
not bad
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Post by magenta on Sept 6, 2005 21:20:09 GMT -5
LOL! That was funny XD Continue soon ^^
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Post by Chaos on Sept 7, 2005 20:30:46 GMT -5
Thanks! Here it is!
Chapter 2: Arrival at the Campsite "Ok, students, here is the campsite, please leave the bus, slowly." Rotwood said. He closed his eyes, remembering the Ski Trip. He opened his eyes seeing everyone leave the place in a nice way. He sighed of relief and left the bus. "Ok, I'm going to tell her next time I see her." I said. "I hope you don't hurt yourself again." Trixie laughed. I groaned and looked around the area. There was a perfect, flat area for tents, a beautiful, sparkling lake, and a dark forest. "I assume we aren't supposed to go in there." I said, pointing at the forest. Jake shrugged and watched Rotwood and other adults putting up the tents. I yawmed and laid down on the grass. I thought I saw something tha was like Huntslass enter the forest, but I knew she wouldn't be here. "Uh, Shade. You know, Florence might be Huntslass, we've been suspisious ever since she moved here." Spud said. "Shut up, Spud!" I yelled at him. "That isn't true and you know it!" I continued to yelled. I deeply sighed and once again closed my eyes. I didn't see, but Jake frowned at me and walked off with Spud and Trixie.
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Post by magenta on Sept 7, 2005 20:34:05 GMT -5
Good chapter =D
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Post by ADJLFanatic on Sept 7, 2005 23:26:50 GMT -5
Love it. ^_^ May I suggest posting them at ff.net? It might deserve a great spot on the ADJL section there.
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Post by Chaos on Sept 8, 2005 9:37:43 GMT -5
I don't know how to post them... I have an account, but I don't know how to put up my fan-fics...
Chapter 3: In Search of Florence As the day continued, I wanted to go into the forest, hey, maybe Florence was there. I walked into the forest, but just in case, I went dragon. I looked around and saw lots of traps. "What is all this?" I asked myself, seeing a trap almost everywhere I step. "This is crazy..." I thought, flying out of the forest. I thought I saw Florence near the lake and I hurriedly transformed human and ran over. When I was there, Florence wasn't. I was the only one there. "Well, I should swim anyway." I said to myself, taking off my backpack, shoes, socks, and shirt. I slowly walked into the water and swam out to the deeper part. Under the water, it was very clear, I could see around. Suddenly, I was beeing pulled inward even more and I went above water to see a whirlpool! "AAHHH!!!!" I yelled, getting sucked in. INside the whirlpool, I was deep underwater and tried to hold my breath, but I finally breathed and noticed, I could breath under the water! I saw a figure in front of me. His hair was blue, he wore a brown shurt, and had green shorts. "Listen close and listen good, you are about to uncover a terrible secret on this trip, be very careful." He warned. "Wait, who are you?" I asked. He turned to look at me again. "That isn't important, you must get out of the water!" He said, moving his hands in front of him and I suddenly transported out of the water, just in time for dinner. I put my socks, shoes, shirt, and backpack back on and ran toward the campsite. We ate a big, but quick dinner and I looked at the sky, seeing clouds move by. "This person in the water might be true..." I muttered to myself, the clouds stretching over the lake, campsite, and the forest...
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Post by yfwe on Sept 8, 2005 14:45:55 GMT -5
You don't know how? I can teach you that. When you're at your account, go to documents, and then 'upload new document' at the page bottom. And then, once it reads it as being uploaded, move onto the story section. Click new story (you'll have to agree to the guidelines first) and then follow its instructions. That should be right.
Hope'n to see you there soon!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 8, 2005 16:07:47 GMT -5
yes shade plz continue plz it's really good
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Post by magenta on Sept 8, 2005 19:09:01 GMT -5
This is awesome! Please continue soon! ^_^
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Post by Chaos on Sept 8, 2005 22:11:06 GMT -5
Eih, too confusing. I don't want to save all that stuff on Microsoft Word, so forget it.
Chapter 4: When the Rain Arrived... At 8pm, the rain poured down very, very hard and everyone was outside the tents. Jake, Spud, Trixie, and I were outside the tents under a big tree. "So you're alright that I accidently got so angry?" I asked them again. They nodded and gave me a smiling face. "Alright, I'm suspisious of what's in the forest, I think Huntslass HAS followed me, and that guy in the water, he was just so strange..." I told them, frowning. I turned dragon and flew to the forest. Just in case, Spud and Trixie waited for me in front of the forest and Jake was in the shadows in dragon. A head peaked out of the water, which was that odd person, who warned me, but no one saw him. It's like it was his crazy sceme the whole time... Anyway, it was very dark inside the forest and I could barely see a thing. Suddenly I watched a figure jump from one tree to another. "Why did you follow me here?" I asked. Huntslass jumped in front of me. "You followed me, dragon. Here is where we fight, under the clouds, to see who is the strongest." Huntslass told me. We decided to move the fight on top of a very tall hill. I charged at Huntslass and prepared and iceball in my hand and we attacked for the move. She was hit with the iceball and I was punched through a cloud. We were very, very high. Finally, I figured I should finish this, and prepared for the ultimate attack. I put my hands together and yelled, "Icy Obliteration!!" A huge beam of ice shot at Huntslass, but she only barely jumped over the beam and kicked me in the face, making me throw my hands up and slash her mask off. I couldn't control my weak dragon self and turned human. I looked at Huntslass who's face was very horrified to see me, but as was I when I learned it was...Florence!
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Post by dragonfan123 on Sept 9, 2005 14:40:12 GMT -5
plz contiune it's really great
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